Molly & the Whale by Laura

Will Molly be crushed by the mammal she hopes to save?

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Dianne Williams
1 month ago

I really enjoyed this. Very evocative.

Patrick
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1 month ago

Hi Laura,
You’re very good at creating a palpable scene. Very descriptive and evocative. Perhaps try better verbs and more accurate nouns. “ran-slid” isn’t a word; “a large beached mammal” is very generic. I did enjoy “barnacled flipper” and “straining surf”.
Thanks for sharing.
Pat