I feel the emotion in this poem. ‘‘His collar has been revoked”– I like this play with words- something the poet shares with Father Francesco.

this piece captures the surreal quality of the painting. Interesting musings in the waiting room.

the short sentences work very well. I like the rhythm of this piece. Every line brings something new.

the title drew me in to read your poem. I like the sense of rhythm. I can hear a drum beat all the way through.

I liked how you began with questions. This invites the reader to open their minds. I can feel your admiration in the writing too.

did you come across Cheryl Pappas?

I love that goat- it is quite a character. I do hope the heroine gets the outcome she desires. I am very impressed by her dedication to her chosen work, which comes across in the story. I think her fiance to be might be a bit jealous of her goats.

I enjoyed reading this. I liked the way it stopped in places and went into more detail, giving it depth. The part about dealing with imaginary bags was great. Something about the MC made me think of Austin Kleon , his books and his parenting.

I wondered how the hermit crab form would work for a 1500 word story and this was very effective. It is also a kind of memoir or biography. Very inventive piece.

I like the tone of this. It made me think of the 40’s PI stories.
”all I wanted was to dance and sweat Okinawa out of my body and soul”- great sentence.
I was surprised by the behaviour of the police though.

I enjoyed the rhyming couplets, and the story telling. I can feel the energy of the girl stolling without a care.

this would go well with a drum background

I enjoyed reading your poem both ways and how it tells different stories.

”end explore the through games and books..- I did not understand this part of the sentence.

”You are Angel sent from above”. I wonder if it would work well to add ‘You are AN Angel sent from above’

I love the theme you chose. It is a great idea to let a newborn know how much they are loved with their very own poem.

‘Clean me up, wrap me up
in toasty towels of Your kindness’ – this is an unusual phrasing for beseeching. I would not have thought of it. It seems to blend both birth and baptism.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked the depth of emotion and the poignancy throughout.