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  • Hey, Anne.
    Well written piece of work you’ve penned down!
    I noted two misspelled words though:
    contacted which should be contracted?
    and advicements which should be advisements…
    I appreciate that a lot of thought went into producing this piece. For better feedback I’ll have to read the preceding submissions though…

  • Hi, Chantel.
    You certainly nailed the nasty on jealousy’s head!
    Just a point or two of note:
    I believe “bee-line” is the more appropriate term?
    And the following sentence can do with an edit:
    “Rachel beamed at the large smile on her son’s face, and bent down to hug him.”
    (remember commas between verbs in sentences)
    Still good writing n…[Read more]

  • Hey, Anne!
    Your kind commendation on this piece of literary work is greatly appreciated! 🌺🤗 Thank you for reading it.

  • Hey, Chantel!
    I greatly appreciate the kind feedback you’ve given me, and for taking the time to have read it. Thank you. 🌺🤗

  • Hey, Kim!
    Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, and leaving appreciative remarks on it. 🙂

    My thought process during this was that more often than not, especially when speaking from emotion, we speak rashly. It’s a foolhardy thing that we do, further inflicting such unnecessary pain.
    And most cases, if we’d just waited and kept still……[Read more]

  • What If Oh Well by ©Maruschka Scott

    #

    Rather an “oh well” than a “what if”, no?

    If only I would have known…
    That it takes an ironclad will,
    To be still.

    To not act.
    And not react.
    Merely let go?

    Allow […]

    • great question!
      but why should we remain quiet when it hurts us to do so?
      thought-provoking piece , will reread this one a few times and ponder that all-important question – should we be quiet to keep the peace? hhmmm…..

      • Hey, Kim!
        Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, and leaving appreciative remarks on it. 🙂

        My thought process during this was that more often than not, especially when speaking from emotion, we speak rashly. It’s a foolhardy thing that we do, further inflicting such unnecessary pain.
        And most cases, if we’d just waited and kept still… Grace would settle. :3

        Proverbs 18:21 “Death and life are in the power of the tongue, and those who love it will eat its fruits.”

        Proverbs 12:18 “There is one whose rash words are like sword thrusts, but the tongue of the wise brings healing.”

        Proverbs 15:4 “A gentle tongue is a tree of life, but perverseness in it breaks the spirit.”

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  • Matthew 11:28
    Come to Me, all you who labor and are heavy-laden and overburdened, and I will cause you to rest. [I will ease and relieve and refresh your souls.]

  • Proverbs 14:30 AMPC
    A calm and undisturbed mind and heart are the life and health of the body, but envy, jealousy, and wrath are like rottenness of the bones.

    James 3:16 AMPC
    For wherever there is jealousy (envy) and contention (rivalry and selfish ambition), there will also be confusion (unrest, disharmony, rebellion) and all sorts of evil…[Read more]

  • Regenerating Ole Bones, by © Maruschka Scott#The man wove his fingers through the dame’s seating across him, completely oblivious to how much their contentedness was grating on Gail’s nerves. She ground her te […]

    • Proverbs 14:30 AMPC
      A calm and undisturbed mind and heart are the life and health of the body, but envy, jealousy, and wrath are like rottenness of the bones.

      James 3:16 AMPC
      For wherever there is jealousy (envy) and contention (rivalry and selfish ambition), there will also be confusion (unrest, disharmony, rebellion) and all sorts of evil and vile practices.

      Galatians 5:22-23
      But the fruit of the [Holy] Spirit [the work which His presence within accomplishes] is love, joy (gladness), peace, patience (an even temper, forbearance), kindness, goodness (benevolence), faithfulness,
      Gentleness (meekness, humility), self-control (self-restraint, continence). Against such things there is no law [that can bring a charge].

      • Matthew 11:28
        Come to Me, all you who labor and are heavy-laden and overburdened, and I will cause you to rest. [I will ease and relieve and refresh your souls.]

    • Hi Maruschka
      I love how you ended this piece, and how you show what influence our choices to have faith and choose God before we resign ourselves to the things that plague us, can have an influence beyond ourselves. Well done xxx

      • Hey, Chantel!
        I greatly appreciate the kind feedback you’ve given me, and for taking the time to have read it. Thank you. 🌺🤗

    • Hi Maruschka,

      This is such a calming piece. Often time, we forget the miracle a prayer can do to our hearts even if it goes unanswered in that time, the power of faith is incredible. I loved the way Gertie’s demeanor changed along with Gail’s without her intending to do so.

      As for your writing, I must say I loved your word choices. They set the “tone” for the story perfectly. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading more from you. 🙂

      • Hey, Anne!
        Your kind commendation on this piece of literary work is greatly appreciated! 🌺🤗 Thank you for reading it.

  • Hi, Lionel.
    I sure appreciate the unexpected turn of events!
    I almost had the heart to back out from reading this story, at least until “doubting agnostic” suggested “wait, there’s more”.
    (I’m a Bible-believing Christian, and for a moment feared the worst was to come out of this story — alas, there was cause for hope!)

    I agree with most above c…[Read more]

  • Good morning, Catherine.

    I agree that a lot of thought went into this, and your efforts brought together an interesting collective people & plot lines…

    However, and forgive me if it feels as though I’m picking your story apart, but I see that no one else made any mention of the following points of note:

    “Zaks automatically appeared at her…[Read more]

  • Hi, Susanne. I appreciate your kind comments. Thank you for taking the time to read. 🙂

  • Thank you for your comments. 🙂 Appreciate your time in reading my poem.

  • To Be by © Maruschka Scott#August’s wind brushing cheeksI raise my handslifted on its wings My, what rough caressas though completely carelesswhat bliss is this?! Swept up in a hush of Peaceif naught but a mo […]

    • Jane replied 1 month ago

      Hi Maruschka,
      Beautiful. I really like the word choice of your poem. It makes me feel peaceful.
      The shape is lovely as well.
      One small suggestion, perhaps separate your three verses with a line in the middle and maybe take off the label of Haiku. This stands alone as a beautiful poem all on its own. And a Haiku has very strict syllable patterns of 5, 7, 5 and this does not quite meet that strict ruling in a few areas.
      Really well done and thanks for sharing:)

      • Thank you for your comments. 🙂 Appreciate your time in reading my poem.

    • Hi Maruschka, this is a reall y beautiful poem. Your images carry me away! I agree with Jane, the label “haiku” doesn’t quite apply here. My immediate association was “epiphany”, where one moment in time makes you realize so much more, makes you realize the connection to a more spiritual idea. But then, that’s only when you feel like labelling it. Great take on the prompt!

      • Hi, Susanne. I appreciate your kind comments. Thank you for taking the time to read. 🙂

    • I like the way you use the caress of an August wind to claim just a moment’s peace from the rest of the world. (Having said that we have been enduring Storm Ellen here in Wales for four days and caress is not the word I would apply to Ellen!). Lovely poem.

    • This is lovely, Marushka. The internal alliteration of the middle quatrain adds to the hush and drew me in to the place … standing there in the breeze, lifting my arms, feeling the “hush of Peace.” So nicely done with an economy of words.

    • A very refreshing quality, makes messy Ahhhhh!

    • Oh such a sweet, peaceful poem. It slowly puts my heart at ease. It relaxed my mind. I can almost feel that August wind caressing me.

  • Hi, Stella.
    I am happy to have reminded you of such a priceless memory of your little girls… <3 Sure it brought a smile to their faces as much as it warmed your heart to relive those moments! 😀
    Thank you for leaving such generously kind feedback. I sure appreciate it! :3

  • Hey, Sandy.
    I do appreciate the wonderfully kind feedback, and am very pleased that you found this an enjoyable read! <3
    However; could you please be more specific regarding those “verb tense issues”? Thank you. 😀

  • Hey, Ellen!
    I’m greatly appreciative of you leaving such kind comments, having read the rough writing… 🙂 Thank you!

  • Pardon’s Passby © Maruschka Scott#White cotton began dusting the powder blue overhead, forming a large grey mass. Before Ella could mind the weather though, rain started pattering down onto her rented Activ Ch […]

    • Hi, Maruschka,
      I wonder what the future holds for this pair. Will they fall in love like in my Hallmark movie story or is something sinister in store? Will she leave him at the lodge and then forever dream of him? Hmmm…
      Nice build, great details, like tucking her hair behind her ears, the instinctive flip of the wipers. Keep up the good writing.

      • Hey, Ellen!
        I’m greatly appreciative of you leaving such kind comments, having read the rough writing… 🙂 Thank you!

    • I loved your first paragraph. It set the tone for the rest of your story. I could feel Ella’s frustration with getting lost. I noticed some verb tense issues and switching viewpoints, but those are easy fixes. Great use of the prompt Thank you for an enjoyable read.

      • Hey, Sandy.
        I do appreciate the wonderfully kind feedback, and am very pleased that you found this an enjoyable read! <3
        However; could you please be more specific regarding those “verb tense issues”? Thank you. 😀

      • I’m sorry, I should have given these examples in my comment.
        She has been out here looking for the place a good three hours!  She had been out here..
        Once she’s parked in the Lodge’s reception parking. She parked or she’d parked.
        I hope this helps.

    • I loved your story, his name Freek and the afrikaans slipped in there I could imagine this boer dressed in his kaki best traipsing down the mountain (his backyard :). I also loved the mooi mooi reference. When my daughters were little girls they used to call the shoes they wore to church their moisy shoes and the name stuck for years. I had forgotten about that.

      Hoping to continue hearing where this goes.

      • Hi, Stella.
        I am happy to have reminded you of such a priceless memory of your little girls… <3 Sure it brought a smile to their faces as much as it warmed your heart to relive those moments! 😀
        Thank you for leaving such generously kind feedback. I sure appreciate it! :3

    • Hi, Maruschka, that was a lovely story and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for adding the glossary at the end, which helped me understand the foreign language, although I didn’t find it difficult to follow the story. Great start to a romance. Thank you for sharing.

    • Hi Maruschka,

      Thank you for taking us trekking this morning and for the pleasure of reading a few Afrikaans nuggets, and of course for sharing this chance encounter of Ella and Freek.

      I loved this sentence:

      “And how is it that you happened to be here to meet me mid-mountain this afternoon?” 

      Contructive commentary – in the opening paragraph the repetition of “started” slowed me down a bit.

      In this sentence: “… which the man before her innately exudes…”
      the verb should be in the past tense.

      You have a lot of adverbs and I would encourage you to see if you can swop a few of these for stronger verbs e.g. focus intensly = concentrate etc.

      Lovely story and thank you for sharing!
      J

    • Hi, Maruschka!
      Great fun story!
      I could feel with Ella, the tension of being lost in a foreign country, the excitement of meeting a handsome savior, the disappointment of letting hi go, and finally, the awe of finding him at the hotel.
      I hope there is more coming. I’d love to know what happens next with these two.
      My favorite parts were the poetic beginning: “White cotton began dusting the powder blue overhead…” and the way you described a Freek’s laugh: “a deep from-the-stomach raspy sort of laugh.”

    • Hi Maruschka,
      I really liked this story. The only confusion I had was there was rain starting at the beginning of the story but it did not end when she went for her walk. Did she walk it the rain? Might need to tie up that loose end. Great tale. It would be great to see what happens with these two! Keep up the good writing.

  • Hey, Jane.

    I greatly appreciate your comment, and find it pleasing to know that you could enjoy it — regardless of whether or not it lived up to “sonnet’s standards”. 😛 Thank you!

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