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  • Hi Jane.
    I am so glad you have enjoyed the latest instalment. I really worried that I wouldn’t submit. Funny enough I messaged Mia the week before this saying I won’t make deadline today and then she told me I had the wrong day. Sadly, I still din’t write until day of submission again haha.
    The relationship is developing quite nicely and I can’t…[Read more]

  • Well done Jane on finishing the Orange Oddities piece with a wonderful tie in to your original piece. I really enjoyed reading their adventures and hope you uncover more next year.

  • Light bounced off the cave walls like Christmas lights as the entire illusion cracked. My father’s jaw dropped as he stared at the room and then me. “Your may be more powerful than we realise.”I shut my hand, […]

    • Hi Wesley, I enjoyed the 10th part of this story. Congratulations on getting it in, just in time:) I saw that you didn’t get a chance to edit. I have pulled up a few things to help you with your editing:) This was a fabulous continuation and it is nice that he is finally starting to accept his powers and be a little excited to learn what he can do. The father son relationship is great too:) I hope you have a fabulous Xmas and New Years. Look forward to reading more of your stories next year:)

      Light bounced off of the cave walls like Christmas lights – don’t think you need the of after off.
      My father’s jaw dropped as he starred at the room and then me. – stared
      A tingle was all that remained. The cave walls remained in full view. Water dripping down some of the walls. – if possible good to replace one of the remained’s as they are so close to each other, perhaps – A tingle was all that lingered. The cave walls remained in full view with water dripping down some of the walls.
      “because you terminated the spell by forcing your way through it, you depleted the remaining magic in the amulet. If I was power it I would have had to yield or perish.” – capital for Because and I think you need If I was powering it, I would have had to yield or perish.
      “Exactly. You mind focused on something else. Your not you
      My father caught me surprised expression. – my not me
      He waved his had and the wall looked perfect once more. – hand not had
      I couldn’t believe what I was looking at but there was no nose and it gave all away. – This sentence is a little confusing, not sure if it is meant to say – I couldn’t believe what I was looking at, but there was no nose, which gave the illusion away. Or something like that:)

      • Hi Jane.
        I am so glad you have enjoyed the latest instalment. I really worried that I wouldn’t submit. Funny enough I messaged Mia the week before this saying I won’t make deadline today and then she told me I had the wrong day. Sadly, I still din’t write until day of submission again haha.
        The relationship is developing quite nicely and I can’t wait to see where it goes.
        I hope you have an amazing Christmas and New Years as well. Also can’t wait for yours.

        Thank you so much for all the edits. I really appreciate them so much. I missed so many in the beginning of the story.
        BTW the last one that didn’t make sense was supposed to have said: but there was no noise. Meaning snoring or breathing etc which gives away an illusion as exactly that.

  • I have never seen my father cry or become emotional in any other way than anger. He turned away form me. I patted his back just like mom used to when I injured myself. It was different trying to comfort him. He […]

    • Oh nice. Part if a larger piece? I like the way you show his relationship with his father through the hug, a gesture learned from the mother who isn’t there. And yet their bond, despite a lack of affection (physical anyway) is strong. Great premise with his powers. In the second to last paragraph,I think you want now rather than not.

    • Very nice ! Looking forward to the next installment!

    • Hi Wesley, glad to see you continuing with this storyline:) I enjoyed this part as the father continues his tutelage of his son. It must be so frustrating for his son, as he has so many questions and his father is not very forthcoming. He learns things in very small drips. Can’t wait for the next instalment. Well done.

  • Oh wow. A promise kept although in a very different way to expected.

  • I enjoyed the different language to convey her meaning and how different they really are. Sounds like an interesting language to get to understand as well.

  • To be completely misunderstood. The sad truth when communication isn’t right between couples. I won’t lie, I wouldn’t mind that robot to take over the tasks I don’t want to do 😂

  • Hi Christa. I enjoyed the tales and the different views. I am intrigued as it seems the two parts were different tales. In a way it comes across like in the coffee shop with someone observing the two sets of people. I do love the couple at the end and his comment.

  • I enjoyed the “why are we here moment” and the bringing the fortune cookie in to tell the tale.

  • Oh wow. I love this and the thought of the character deciding their own fate. In a way it’s how I’m sure many of our characters do what they want when we write and things go a different way to expected.

  • Hi Christa
    I got to do two things when reading this story. Enjoy a short story and discover something I hadn’t known before. Well done.

  • Hi Christa
    That was brilliant. I love the twist at the end. Completely unexpected. Well done.

  • You definitely have a lovely novella and well done on finishing the 30 days.

  • I held my breath for as long as I could, kicking to get to the surface. My lungs burned. It was not  enough. Reflex took over, I gulped for air. Water. Only water. I gagged and spluttered. My legs flailed […]

    • Wesley, I like it! I feel the struggle for survival. We made it to 30!

    • Wow! Way to finish. 😀

    • a strong first paragraph…a great last line.

    • What a great finish. The word talon threw me. Then I thought an eagle caught him, and dropped him on shore.. I hope that’s what happened. Well done.

    • Hey Wesley, I am wondering if the talon belonged to some mysterious deep sea creature. Something was going to eat him and yet he is alive. Is this a metaphor for making it through the 30 day challenge. Hard to keep up and at times feeling you couldn’t make it, and then there you are at the end – a survivor? Well done – congratulations for making it out alive.

    • Very descriptive Wesley. Great way to finish.

    • Escaping the depths only to be caught onshore? A horror story indeed, waking from a nightmare to find reality is worse? Either way the descriptions are graphic. Well done!

    • Well done. So was he left or taken away?

      Both ways, thanks for sharing the story. Congratulations for completing 30 🙂

    • Vivid imaginery…. made me wonder what the talon is?! Well done on Day 30!

  • Awwww. way to make me tear up. Beautiful. I can’t believe it all ends here so I hope you do write more.

  • Wowzer. An intense addition to the tale and I’m glad she got away mostly unscathed. I was holding my breath while I red the attach and almost rape scene. This piece feels real and in the moment.
    I can say I like th last Lin by Azlan.

  • I probably will and may use it on a 12SS post but will see how all goes. This was one of the hardest stories for me to get out tbh.

  • Hi Jane. The hike was beautiful and has become this piece’s picture. It is a cat yes. The aim for it was to create the premise that is was a person and only at the end realise it was a kitten not baby but it didn’t go that way.

  • Hi Candice. I battled so much and this was the only thing I could do. The inserted story just didn’t play game.

  • I sat in the car on the way to a hike. Panicking. My story was still unwritten. So many ideas were running through my head: a submarine finding lost treasure, a woman giving birth, a whale finding its family. I […]

    • Clever way to deal with writer’s block! Will you go back and finish the unfinished when the muse returns?

      • I probably will and may use it on a 12SS post but will see how all goes. This was one of the hardest stories for me to get out tbh.

    • Hi Wesley, yes I could see you continuing this for a story in our short story group:) Am I right in thinking this is actually a cat and not a human that is pregnant?? Great start and I hope you enjoyed your hike:)

      • Hi Jane. The hike was beautiful and has become this piece’s picture. It is a cat yes. The aim for it was to create the premise that is was a person and only at the end realise it was a kitten not baby but it didn’t go that way.

    • Oh that is so cruel! I have had almost the exact conversation with myself over looming deadlines. Well done

      • Hi Candice. I battled so much and this was the only thing I could do. The inserted story just didn’t play game.

    • I think we all had one of those days, for me it was Day 15 with Hound and I just couldn’t, couldn’t come up with anything, so I wrote about how I couldn’t come up with anything lol.

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