Thanks Amy Rae. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I hadn’t thought of the shooting on that movie set but you’re right, it could make quite a thriller.

What a lovely compliment – that you are so invested in the story that you enjoy playing with the characters yourself. Thanks so much for reading. I appreciate the comments and suggestions.

Thanks for reading Jane. I appreciate your kind words.

Thanks Nina. I appreciate you reading my story and the lovely comments.

Thanks Sharmayne. I appreciate you reading my story and your comments. I liked your idea. I’ll have to ponder it to see how it would work.

What a wonderful job you did teasing out the differences between these two. I feel sorry for poor Nathan but kept yelling at him in my mind to stop basing his life on anyone. He’s going to be so disappointed when Kat asks along someone else. I don’t think they view life the same at all.

Great job on your first short story!

Thanks so much Barbara. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you reading and commenting. I’m thinking about the suggestions you and Becky made to see how I might have done it differently.

Thanks, Becky. I’m glad you liked it. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments. I’m pondering your idea to see what I might change. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

I really enjoyed your story Susanne. This was perfect for this time of year. I can certainly relate to wanting to ditch all the hype and enjoy a quiet holiday without frantic preparations. I liked that you took each tradition and skewered it. I do think it was reminiscent of Moon – the getting down to business approach. Very fun read!

What a beautiful, sad tale. One holiday a year for the love of your life. I can’t imagine the torture. I thought you had a wonderful pace for the story – taking time for setting the scene and giving us insight into both characters. Wonderful job, Sharmayne. I really enjoyed the read.

What a wonderful story. I really enjoyed the read Mike. I liked that you didn’t make your MC be the biggest, smartest, etc. He was an everyday guy meeting a Princess. Wow! You did a great job on building up the story. He had a good reason for traveling – over with his friends. And they met once and enjoyed their conversation, setting up the…[Read more]

It was good to read about the Detective again. He stoicism in the face of such tragedy is remarkable. I don’t know how he could be anything but and do his job. I really loved the line “Freedom works in tandem with safety and they both prefer daylight.” I found it a bit heart-wrenching considering the circumstances. And the two children across the…[Read more]

It was great reading about Polly again. She is a very interesting character. I never thought of what she did as “aiding those looking to cross the River Styx. ” You did a great job of building the picture of their relationship and how Arthur was part of her growth in her chosen field. I was glad to have a bit more time to get to know Polly in this story.

Great story Barbara. I loved the way you lead us to what was happening slowly, setting the scene just right and building on it. The description of the crystals – for the layman – as a tacky Swarovski habit, made me laugh. I’m invested in the story now and it has me wanting to find out what the potion does and how it will help.

As an inveterate list maker, I can feel this woman’s pain. I loved the way the list kept growing despite constantly marking things off. This was a different way to tell a story that I ended up really enjoying. And her husband’s advice at the end made me laugh out loud.

Great story Amy Rae. I loved the vivid descriptions of their lives there. Very imaginative. Have a great holiday!

This could be a conversation in most any family I’ve known. There’s always a Gwyn to contend with. I wonder, though, if the Mom won’t surprise them all. I think you bring all that family conflict out beautifully in the dialogue between these two characters. I’m increasingly impressed with your ability to communicate so much through the use of…[Read more]

Thanks so much for your comments and suggestions Paul. I’ll start looking a bit more for those repeated words – it looks like that would be a good way to get my word count down too 😉
You make some great suggestions and I’ll definitely put those to good use. I’m eager to learn and happy when I get info that will help me to do that. Thanks for reading!

Thanks for reading and your comments Barbara. That part about the father resonated with me too. I agree with you about the past tense – I haven’t tackled it yet but plan to make those changes soon. I’m glad you enjoyed it.