You captured a beautiful moment and made it even better. To me, Jennifer was a child, but that may not be the case of course. Loved it. Congratulations.

Fabulous imagery; so good, I felt like coughing. A great piece of writing.

Haha that last line really took me by surprise. Well done Zannie. You created a great story in so few words.

Great imagery and you really pulled me into your story. Great writing.

Love this Amy, well done. You created a piece that is easily relatable and then that last line pulls us in. Very intriguing. Nicely done.

Thanks so much Alyssa; that’s really lovely of you.

Thanks Barbara. As soon as I posted it, I had a forehead slapping moment and realised the dialogue was wrong. I think a little girl is more like to say “Me too”. Never mind; I’m just thrilled that I might actually make this writing every day challenge 🙂

Thanks for reading it and for your feedback, Zannie.

Thanks Barbara; really appreciate that.

Thanks very much for reading it and your feedback.

Thanks very much Shelley. Appreciate your feedback.

Thanks so much Amy.

Thanks Jane, appreciate that.

I wondered what you were going to do with this prompt. Good on you for making it work. Keep the story going.

Great story Christa. It was chilling even before I read the Brothers Grimm story (and thanks for including that link). I really like what you did in so few words. You created an intriguing and mystical fairy tale. Well done.

This is developing so wonderfully Jane. You should be very pleased with this – I am. I know the “I see you Azlan” line is really great and full of emotion, but I actually love your very last line. Saying that he “showered and shaved for the first time in weeks” is a perfect way to show how he picked himself up despite his grief which will never…[Read more]

Thanks for your comments Jane.

Yikes! Great story and really pulled me in. Keen to know more. Congratulations.

Nice! You really pulled me into this story. Great story telling Chris.