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  • Your poem is beautiful. I like how you used the prompt. Thank you for sharing.

  • I liked the way you built a relationship through time. The last two lines made me pause, seconds to change the world. Such a short time, but oh so true. Thank you for a lovely poem. I enjoyed it.

  • I feel like this often. I like the rhythm of your poem. Thank you for sharing.

  • I can fully understand why the play was ruined for you. If it were me, every time I even thought of going to a play, I would hear his mother whining in my ear No getting away from it either. And then, just when you think it’s okay, something else goes wrong to completely ruin it for you. Well done.

  • When I was reading, this was playing like a movie in my head. It feels like a part of a much larger story. I expected your mc to be hit with the bat. It was fast paced and kept my attention all the way through. Thank you for sharing.

  • This was great fun to read. I found a few spelling errors, easily fixed. I loved how you showed the description of your characters rather than telling about them. Thank you for sharing.

  • Delightful. Your characters and scene are so vivid, I felt like I was in the attic with them. I hope there is going to be more. Great job.

  • I love the description you give of sounding out her name. “a tidal wave going through his head” when she ended the relationship is spot on. Your short staccato sentenced show his frustration with his relationships. Thank you for sharing.

  • Countdown to Christmas by Sandy Menarek

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    Five weeks before Christmas

    Decorating, baking, shopping to do

    There’s plenty of time

    to get it all done.

    Four weeks before Christmas

    Decorations all over the f […]

    • This is an introspective thoughtful piece. I love that it is relatable. I love that you repeated ‘decorating, shopping, baking’ – five weeks prior to Christmas and the day before Christmas. This is a living breathing poem…

    • I think you’ve gotten a glimpse of my life every year. There never ends up being enough time to get it all done does there? I also loved the repeated list of things that had to get done it seemed to emphasize the urgency and the time slipping away.

    • Hello Sandy,

      Oh yes – your poem hits the spot! Why we set ourselves impossible targets I haven’t sussed out. Thanks for sharing and enjoy the day when it comes!

    • I really like how the you use repetition to emphasize the passage of time. Thank you for sharing 🙂

  • The Magic Broom by Sandy Menarek

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    Thelma was sitting on the seat of her walker on her sidewalk with a broom in her hand.  She had planned to sweep the leaves away when she saw the neighbor girls, Jennie and […]

    • Hi Sandy, this reminded me so much of Tom Sawyer tricking Huck Finn into painting his fence for him! I laughed as Thelma sent the girls over to Julia’s house … what a great way to take something that is work and make it into fun, without the girls ever knowing. 🙂 Critical comment: there are some places where your punctuation could help the reader follow along better. As for commas, I believe it is acceptable to use one before “too” or to leave it out – but the key is to be consistent (there may be others who disagree, but I’m basing my comment on what I see as the current trend). I love that you’ve taken a couple of wise old “aunties” and shown us their relevance. Women of a certain age have a way of becoming invisible today. Thank you for sharing – it was a lovely story. 🙂

    • Loved the characters and the relationship they shared. I half expected the girls to really fly and the older women to join them. Great story.

  • Thank you for your comments. I’m glad you enjoyed my story.

  • Thank you for your suggestion. I’m so glad you liked it.

  • Sandy Menarek commented on the post, Yet by Riana N 2 months ago

    This made me laugh and feel your pain at the same time. Thank you.

  • I love your poem. The image of mental constipation, and slitting paper with pen, will be with me forever. Thank you.

  • What a great name for a hermit crab. It is such a feel-good piece. Nice work.

  • Clever. It took me reading the comments to figure out the caps at the end. Love this. Thank you so much for such an inspirational poem.

  • I thought you did a great job of showing the control and manipulation of the man in the car. You stayed in the present tense throughout the story, which I find difficult to do. Thank you for sharing.

  • I liked how you made the light feel warm and familiar, making me think that Theodore was taken to a better life than his solitary sad one after his mother died. Thank you for sharing.

  • I liked your comparison of the two wings of the hospital — one felt warm and comfortable, while the other felt cold and uninviting. I also liked how you left us with the doctor not knowing what to do. It seems that this is part of a larger story. Thank you.

  • Happy Thanksgiving by Sandy Menarek

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    How can we be thankful for

    A year like 2020?

    People we love

    Panicking and scared

    Yearning for peace

     

    Tears that we shed

    Happy times canceled

    All wearing masks

    No […]

    • Shae replied 2 months ago

      I wrote on Autumn but right now I am writing an Acrostic poem on Thanksgiving.
      I have gotten addicted to this style.

      Your poem is beautiful.

    • MA replied 2 months ago

      This is lovely. I like the focus, and I feel this way often about 2020. I have a lot to be thankful, some directly resulting from everything 2020 brought. And I’m thankful for your poem.

    • Hi Sandy
      Your work indicates such a high sensitivity to human suffering. And making the acrostic work with so many lines is not at all easy.
      Very nice job. Thank you for sharing.

    • Hi Sandy,
      I like the positiveness of your poem, which gives a light towards the end of this grim year. Indeed, happy thanksgiving.

    • Great poem Sandy that sums up this year. I am so glad that you took it to a positive note of things that it has taught us and the good that has come from these difficult times.

      I liked the rhythm of the piece.

      Well done and thanks for sharing.

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