Your poem is beautiful. I like how you used the prompt. Thank you for sharing.

I liked the way you built a relationship through time. The last two lines made me pause, seconds to change the world. Such a short time, but oh so true. Thank you for a lovely poem. I enjoyed it.

I feel like this often. I like the rhythm of your poem. Thank you for sharing.

I can fully understand why the play was ruined for you. If it were me, every time I even thought of going to a play, I would hear his mother whining in my ear No getting away from it either. And then, just when you think it’s okay, something else goes wrong to completely ruin it for you. Well done.

When I was reading, this was playing like a movie in my head. It feels like a part of a much larger story. I expected your mc to be hit with the bat. It was fast paced and kept my attention all the way through. Thank you for sharing.

This was great fun to read. I found a few spelling errors, easily fixed. I loved how you showed the description of your characters rather than telling about them. Thank you for sharing.

Delightful. Your characters and scene are so vivid, I felt like I was in the attic with them. I hope there is going to be more. Great job.

I love the description you give of sounding out her name. “a tidal wave going through his head” when she ended the relationship is spot on. Your short staccato sentenced show his frustration with his relationships. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you for your comments. I’m glad you enjoyed my story.

Thank you for your suggestion. I’m so glad you liked it.

This made me laugh and feel your pain at the same time. Thank you.

I love your poem. The image of mental constipation, and slitting paper with pen, will be with me forever. Thank you.

What a great name for a hermit crab. It is such a feel-good piece. Nice work.

Clever. It took me reading the comments to figure out the caps at the end. Love this. Thank you so much for such an inspirational poem.

I thought you did a great job of showing the control and manipulation of the man in the car. You stayed in the present tense throughout the story, which I find difficult to do. Thank you for sharing.

I liked how you made the light feel warm and familiar, making me think that Theodore was taken to a better life than his solitary sad one after his mother died. Thank you for sharing.

I liked your comparison of the two wings of the hospital — one felt warm and comfortable, while the other felt cold and uninviting. I also liked how you left us with the doctor not knowing what to do. It seems that this is part of a larger story. Thank you.