Beautiful images Nam. I think this is about flowers growing together and then one no longer being there – perhaps destroyed by a storm or plucked. I liked the format you used and the rhyme – although not conventional every pair rhyming. The break after each pair of lines gave me a breath to think of what I’d just read. I like how you personified them to talking to one another and being friends.

Well done and thanks for sharing.

Thank you Debbie for exactly understanding the meaning of Poem though it may not be clear by words. This is encouraging.

I feel your sadness at the end as one of the pair has gone missing. This year I have had the time to watch flowers bloom and fade in much more detail than usual and have experienced the same kind of sadness as they go past their best.

I saw flowers, too, and then was pleased to scroll down to the comments to read others had seen the same. That is a gift with words — to invoke an image with words while never mentioning the subject’s form. Well done. I felt the anticipation. I saw you there on the ground taking pictures up close. I saw the rain. I felt the sadness of the missing mate. Thank you for sharing this lovely work. An edit: Oh my! I scrolled back to the top after writing this comment and saw the picture of the blue and white flowers. Ha. I did not even notice them before I read your poem.

Nam,
Your flowerpots caught my eye and pulled me to read. Good job, loved reading your interpretation of Blank.
Wanda

I see your practice with writing is paying off. I could see the irrigation throughout the farm plots and your younger siblings hoping for a treat at the end. Thanks for sharing!!

Sweet story.
I enjoyed the details you provided about the gardening.
The only thing I would suggest is the word “alien” should be “align”.

Thank you Marilyn for ready story and remarks. Thanks for pointing the error which I have corrected. I love the people who point to the specific error and help me to improve it.

Hi Nam

There are a few spelling and grammar errors in here, but don’t let that distract you from writing from your heart as you do. The finesses of correctness will come as you grasp the nuances of English by reading and learning. The story is just a perfect little lesson for us all. If we bring biscuits, they will be expected. So, manage expectations well.

It is an adage I follow myself as best I can every day.

Martin

Thank you Martin for so nice comments. It’s very useful. I would rate five stars for your comments.