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  • Hi Bhavna K.
    Many thanks for your inspiring feedback. I love planning trips for these seniors. Many of them still travel in their 80’s. They are remarkable.

  • Hi Michael
    Many thanks for your kind feedback and suggestions. I appreciate you reading my story. Thank you for your suggestion of adding extra characters – good idea.

  • The 20-seater minibus with a trailer, pulled up at the curb of the retirement village.  Twitters of excitement flitted about as twelve women gathered their hand luggage and filed through the gate to board the […]

    • Love the title for the story, that’s what got me to read it. It felt authentic, plenty small details along the way that you can only get if you’ve experienced it yourself in some way. I especially liked the limited leg room on the bus detail.
      Great job overall with this, I don’t have anything else to add really. I guess you could have included a few more personalities into the mix – some of the other guests. But it’s just a suggestion. This story is good as it is.

    • Hi Laura. This is a beautiful memoir. I could easily picture the experience and the places as I have travelled extensively in South Africa. I think your ladies were extremely well-behaved. I expected some complaints. Your title works well in tweaking interest. I particularly liked this line , ‘Maryanne twittered away on her mobile’. A few years ago, I met a group of senior citizen’s on tour at Oribi Gorge. I was inspired by their zest for living and wrote a short memoir of my experience to capture that delightful experience. Thank you for the read.

    • Hi Michael
      Many thanks for your kind feedback and suggestions. I appreciate you reading my story. Thank you for your suggestion of adding extra characters – good idea.

    • Hi Bhavna K.
      Many thanks for your inspiring feedback. I love planning trips for these seniors. Many of them still travel in their 80’s. They are remarkable.

  • Thank you for an interesting story. I am happy for you that you didn’t have a prolonged hospital stay. Here’s hoping the budget cuts and figures improve along with your health. Well done!

  • I agree with Anjum. Art does unearth and heal many hidden emotions. I enjoyed your descriptions of the sunlight cascading through the window, and your descriptions of the instructor. Well done!

  • What a heartwarming story. I love it. Well done with the writing .

  • Hi Bhavna K
    Thank you for reading my story and for your very interesting comments. Yes, Garth had a serious point to prove and as you mentioned, there is not a lot of trust around when it comes to these ‘kind deliveries.’ The elderly lady who is happy to allow Garth into her home, reminds me of a few seniors that I worked with a number of years…[Read more]

  • Hi Patty
    Congratulations on a beautifully written story. The emotions and tensions related to this true incident in history are so well portrayed in your writing. Well done!

  • Hi Patty Panni
    I agree with you, I wouldn’t accept those chocolates either. It’s a good social experiment anyway. Thank you for reading my story.

  • Hi Beth Stillman Blaha
    Thank you for reading my story and for your interesting comments. Once again I am excited about other readers’ reviews and insights into my story. Thank you Beth.

  • Hi Sandy Menarek
    Thank you for your kind comments about my Willow Pattern plate story. I am always amazed at the opportunities that other readers see in my stories. Your idea about other willow plate stories sounds quite intriguing. I might just look into that. Thank you Sandy.

  • Garth adjusted his backpack and positioned himself on his bicycle. He briefly glanced to the right before feeding into the moving traffic. He smiled.

    ‘I wonder what people’s reactions will be again today. I lov […]

    • Am I supposed to get a sense of foreboding with this ending? it’s a fortress with a elderly woman with an unnamed we. Regardless, its an intriguing premise of someone looking to restore faith in humanity and prove their psych professor wrong. You have captured Garth’s youthful enthusiasm well.

    • This is an interesting and very timely take on the prompt. I have to admit, I wouldn’t accept a gift of chocolates from a stranger. At any rate, I enjoyed your story. Well done.

    • Hi Beth Stillman Blaha
      Thank you for reading my story and for your interesting comments. Once again I am excited about other readers’ reviews and insights into my story. Thank you Beth.

    • Hi Patty Panni
      I agree with you, I wouldn’t accept those chocolates either. It’s a good social experiment anyway. Thank you for reading my story.

    • Hi Laura. This is an interesting experiment and I would have loved to read this to the end as the story has the potential to deliver some very interesting outcomes. Personally, I would never accept a delivery like this. There are too many weirdos out there and there is something very scary about a stranger knowing where you stay and crossing that threshold. The Garths of this world are an endangered species and we’re not sure how to respond. Thanks for a thought-provoking piece.

    • Hi Bhavna K
      Thank you for reading my story and for your very interesting comments. Yes, Garth had a serious point to prove and as you mentioned, there is not a lot of trust around when it comes to these ‘kind deliveries.’ The elderly lady who is happy to allow Garth into her home, reminds me of a few seniors that I worked with a number of years ago in a retirement village. They were SO trusting and some of them lost large amounts of money because of this misplaced trust. They DID love surprises and ‘stranger danger’ was not part of their vocabulary. I guess they grew up in a very different society. Kind regards Laura

  • Hi Donal
    Many thanks for reading my story and for your kind feedback. Dolly’s life clearly centered around her antiques and not so much around those who bought them from her. Thanks again for commenting.

  • Natalia stepped across the worn wooden floor planks into the cool interior of Dolly’s Favourites, an antique shop that she called her second home. A bell tinkled somewhere in another part of the shop, announcing h […]

    • Laura, was grabbed by the familiar Willow Pattern so iconic. This is a sad story, an innocent bystander is gunned down accidentally by the perpetrators of a violent crime. Blue certainly figured a lot in the theme, the story of the origins of the Willow Pattern is a clever aside.
      I liked the idea of the younger more techno savvy youths advising the older lady how she might access the phone.
      I am unsure about Dolly’s reaction after hearing of Laura’s death, (someone who was known to her) her concern is about the welfare of the plate. If I had heard her I would have asked her if she had any shame given the circumstances?
      Maybe the moral of the story is beware who you leave your hard earned cash to? Thank you for sharing this compact little story.

    • Hi Donal
      Many thanks for reading my story and for your kind feedback. Dolly’s life clearly centered around her antiques and not so much around those who bought them from her. Thanks again for commenting.

    • This is such a sad story. Dolly’s apparent lack of concern for Natalia wasn’t what I expected, but this line, “that plate will find itself in the loving hands of someone else soon enough. They always do,” tells me that there are more blue willow plate stories to come. I thought your story flowed well and I enjoyed reading it.

    • Hi Sandy Menarek
      Thank you for your kind comments about my Willow Pattern plate story. I am always amazed at the opportunities that other readers see in my stories. Your idea about other willow plate stories sounds quite intriguing. I might just look into that. Thank you Sandy.

  • Hi Vera Mark
    Many thanks for reading my story and for your kind words and valuable feedback. Much appreciated.

  • Thank you so much for reading my story Lenore. I appreciate your very kind feedback. Kind regards

  • It was a sweltering day, even in the shade of the large oak tree in the backyard of Aunty Nadia’s comfortable home in Pretoria. Christmas days at her house were always elegant affairs and the entire family w […]

    • You had me with the title – I love Christmas and everything to do with it and I quite like socks to boot! I’m so very glad I read this piece – I have a real soft spot for family traditions, especially ones around the holidays and I loved getting this little slice of life view of your family and their holiday traditions. Thank you for sharing this piece of yourself!

    • Thank you for offering this tale of family love. With so much to worry about in this world, it serves as a beautiful reminder of how simple it can be to spread happiness. Even in the form of socks.
      If I had anything to suggest, it would be to make the conversation between Oupa and Stephen a little more… conversational. Their dialogue could be a touch more natural; some of it reads more like an account of what happened rather than a conversation between grandfather and grandson. But that is really a minor point.

    • Thank you so much for reading my story Lenore. I appreciate your very kind feedback. Kind regards

    • Hi Vera Mark
      Many thanks for reading my story and for your kind words and valuable feedback. Much appreciated.

  • Wow, what an interesting turn of events. I am glad that Mariam did not find out about the affair with Candace. I am left feeling pity for Candace though, losing two loves in her life. A lovely story. Well done. Kind regards

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