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  • Kat commented on the post, BLANK by Symphony 4 days, 22 hours ago

    Symphony, this is a powerful read – such a journey from life to death. Your description of the bedding – hope-filled hospital corners – is heart-breaking in itself, when you think about the hope that loved ones bring with them to those lying dying… Thank you for sharing.

  • This flows well, with force due to the short lines. I found the blank space, no children an interesting observation (as a non-parent by choice!) The repetition works well, thank you for sharing.

  • Gosh! This took me straight to that scene from the Deer Hunter…so scary. Well-written and observed.

  • Hello Kim. This is a powerful read – with much still to fear, I fear. I agree with all the comments. I liked the rhyming couplet style you used too as it was subtle.

  • I loved this – even without your picture of Lowry on the banner, I would have held the same images in my head from your verse. I loved the line: Cobbles thwart spindle legs. I love Lowry’s art too – one of my last trips back to the UK (from Australia) my Chester-dwelling brother took me to the Lowry Gallery…fabulous!!!

  • Hi Debbie. What a detailed description of mindfulness! It’s such a skill to maintain the focus on the nothingness, and your poem describes it well. I liked that the first half seemed to get to that point – until the line “Now…” – and then, for me, the second half read as though the nothingness had been surpassed by thoughts about it…trust…[Read more]

  • This evokes a good storm so well! I love the cleansing that it brings, and your poem captures it beautifully. The smell after rain is divine…

  • Thank you Debbie – I agree that the short form with no rhymes worked for the disjointed nature of the snapshots. It is a terrible disease that fills us all – rightly – with concern/horror.

  • Thank you Kim for reading this.

  • Thank you Christian – I agree that being aware of what you’ve lost would feel terrible…and then I wonder if that memory doesn’t last (perhaps kinder that way?) I think the carer will always carry the heavier burden.

  • Alzheimer’s Cruelty by Katharine Short (kittykat)

    ***
    Snapshots of past me.
    Sometimes with you; sometimes not.
    Intermittent me.
    .
    How do you see me –
    As I was, or as I am?
    Memories linger…
    .
    Whose place is harde […]

    • Jane replied 1 week ago

      Hi Kat, beautiful poem. Stark, and to the point. The cruelest of diseases that robs us of our loved ones before they have left this earth. Well done and thanks for sharing.

    • Your linked haikus are very effective and tell a heartbreaking story. I have heard people say that the one who is ‘blank’ has an easier life but sometimes the blankness lifts and I think that must be awful for them – to come back into a strange world from wherever they have been. We all dread having Alzheimers and / or having to care for a loved one with this awful disease. Thank you for sharing your powerful poem.

      • Thank you Christian – I agree that being aware of what you’ve lost would feel terrible…and then I wonder if that memory doesn’t last (perhaps kinder that way?) I think the carer will always carry the heavier burden.

    • Alzheimer’s is cruel.
      if one could stay in the blank, then maybe it might be a blessing, but as Christian says, sometimes the veil lifts and the realization is horrifying, however brief that moment is – and that’s heartbreaking to watch.

      Thanks for penning this xx

    • Oh Katharine! This piece yanks at my heart. It says so much in these few words and is difficult for both parties, but I think some people need to ‘check out’ before they leave us because some can’t handle dying and are afraid.

      I loved the thought of this line:
      Intermittent me.

      I feel that the short lines work well and the short verses because it carries the short attention span and the flickering memories. It flows well.

      Well done and thanks for sharing. Sending much love and light.

      • Thank you Debbie – I agree that the short form with no rhymes worked for the disjointed nature of the snapshots. It is a terrible disease that fills us all – rightly – with concern/horror.

  • Thank you for reading.

  • Thank you Debbie.

  • Hello Christian
    Thank you for this! The prompt led my brain to start generating all the phrases that started with the word ‘taken’, and in the end I started writing them all down. It was curious to me that what fell out in terms of subject matter was a sexual murder – but also given my career in criminal justice maybe not so curious! I can see…[Read more]

  • A great take on the prompt and a lesson for everyone – if only some world leaders could follow suit… Thanks for sharing!

  • Gosh, I liked this! The things that cannot be taken from us – except when we allow it to happen… It made me think about how some people survived in the concentration camps and it a great reminder to us all in these difficult COVID-times that there is a lot we still have, inside us all. Thank you for sharing.

  • Kat commented on the post, Taken by JM Barrie 3 weeks, 1 day ago

    I liked this – the prompt was such a thought-provoking word and I like your interpretation and take on it. Snapshots of different lives. The short lines give it power too.

  • Hi Christian. I can relate to this so well – that love affair that comes with a long read and the absolute emptiness that comes with its end… Wonderfully put!

  • Kat commented on the post, Moving On by NetaQ 3 weeks, 1 day ago

    Hi Neta. I liked your take on the prompt, and especially the strong end. My favourite lines were these:
    I gained perspective as with a sneer you sliced off the
    frozen fat on me, and left the lean with your unkind words
    Brilliant! Thank you for sharing.

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