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  • Hyped Can Kill by Kathleen Osborne

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    “Oh, man, did you see that? Crap. He has a bleedin’ gun. Where the hell did Brian get that. He’s gonna get us all killed,” Gimpy said to the rest of the gang.

    At least t […]

  • HI Becky,
    I just realized the reply I made never got sent.

    I’ve had problems with apostrophes since school … and that was over 50 years ago. lol
    Thanks for catching it though.
    And thank you for popping by.
    Yeah, I liked Mary too.

  • Thank you John. I really enjoyed writing it.
    Kathleen

  • Hi,
    Nice twist to weird neighbors… ghosties instead. If you were allowed more words you could show their shock at him saying the car was ready, yet to their knowledge no one had worked on it.
    It would, word count bummer part, have been nice to know the local… your description made me think of Africa or Australia.
    It did hold my attention, and…[Read more]

  • Hi.
    Delightful until the ray gun came out. lol
    Had me go there for a minute.
    I think this would be great if you turned it into Novella.
    You did a fab with the prompt.

  • Love it. You caught and held my attention.

  • Anne, Thank you so much for reading and letting me know you enjoyed the closing sentence. I wish we had more word allowed to share about the community, but I’m not an experienced enough writer to figure out how to squeeze it in with everything else. I might add it when I pull a bunch of my short stories into a collection and publish them, though.…[Read more]

  • Nosey Neighbors by Kathleen Osborne
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    “Oh, no! It’s the Johnson’s. HIDE and no talking!” Mary said to her family. She didn’t need those nosy Johnson’s inside her house. If they found a speck of dust, they would b […]

    • Hi Kathleen

      I think we’ve all had neighbours a bit like this (maybe not so bad) and it was a humrous account of a totally unsuccessful avoidance strategy.
      I think a bit of background on the neighbourhood would have helped – were they all like this? did the community broadcast standards?
      A very satisfying ending – I suspect you enjoyed writing that last sentence!
      Cheers
      Anne

      • Anne, Thank you so much for reading and letting me know you enjoyed the closing sentence. I wish we had more word allowed to share about the community, but I’m not an experienced enough writer to figure out how to squeeze it in with everything else. I might add it when I pull a bunch of my short stories into a collection and publish them, though. I think it would strengthen it.
        Kathleen

    • Hi Kathleen – A humorous story indeed, especially the part where Mary tries to tackle her son before he reached the front door. One editing issue is the use of the apostrophe when mentioning the Johnsons – only use an apostrophe to indicate the possessive. You conveyed the idea that the Johnsons literally controlled the neighborhood and you transmitted the sense of antipathy very well. Like Mary, one may want to see less of the Johnsons in future, and more of your amusing stories – perhaps centred around Mary and her family. She sounds like quite a character!

      • HI Becky,
        I just realized the reply I made never got sent.

        I’ve had problems with apostrophes since school … and that was over 50 years ago. lol
        Thanks for catching it though.
        And thank you for popping by.
        Yeah, I liked Mary too.

    • Hi Kathleen,

      I enjoyed this little drama! Great pacing. Wonderful descriptions. The characters sound fascinating.
      Keep up the good work!
      Kind regards

  • Afraid to Ask by Kathleen Osborne

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    Harry could feel the ring box slide up and down his leg in his pants pocket as he walked to his car in the parking garage. Tonight was the night. He’d gotten Susan, Abby’s sis […]

  • Hi Ana,
    Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Yeah, I am working on those. And thanks for letting me know your impression.
    Kathleen

  • David,
    I wish I was as good at proof reading my own things as I am at doing others. lol I hear exactly what you are saying….

    I will continue to persevere to catch those pesky errors. One day soon, I’ll find everyone one of them and severely deal with them. lol

    Kathleen

  • Thank you all so much for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate it.

    Kathleen

  • Thanks Micaela,
    I know… it’s my dream house. lol
    Kathleen

  • I want to thank any and all who read my short story. Your constructive critiques are helping me grow as an author. They are something I truly treasure.

    Kathleen

  • HI Jennifer,
    Thank you for reading and commenting.

    I’ll working on making sure my characters dialog sound like two distinct people.

    You can go in models anytime the sales office is open… word count kind of hindered me on how to get that in. lol But get observation.

    Thanks again,
    Kathleen

  • Hi Chantel,
    Thanks for reading and commenting.

    One of my most difficult challenges in writing it tenses. So I truly appreciate you sharing. Now I can go back and update this and post it revised on my website when the contest is over.

    I’m just glad you enjoyed it, and weren’t too thrown off by the tense switches.

    Kathleen

  • Hi Estelle,
    Thanks you so much for reading and leaving a comment.

    Each comment encourages me to continue writing.

    Kathleen

  • Hi Michael,
    Thank you so much for reading and leaving a comment. I thought about Joyce helping her, then I remembered watching a show on telly where a young couple had fallen in love with a house and they were competing against someone who had cash. The cash buyers were also willing to pay more. They contacted the seller and shared their hopes and…[Read more]

  • Hi Catherine,
    Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. It means a lot. And yes, lol, I am working on the repetition and those pesky typos/etc.

    I would love to have a kitchen with a pot filler, which is a spigot at the back of your stove with a long arm that can swing out over any burner on your stove, above in pot you have there. Turn a knob…[Read more]

  • Thank you so much Bhavna! I appreciate your comments and couldn’t agree more about the happy ever after. I’m a bit a of an optimists and it always comes across in my writing.

    And those pesky errors…. grumbling here. I’ve had so many people edit it prior to posting and still missed some. But, I will catch them next time. So learning curve…[Read more]

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