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  • Kathleen started taking the course 52 Scenes 9 months, 2 weeks ago

  • Hi Lauried,
    Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment. I would love to hear what you came up with for an ending. I purposely didn’t put one because during that time, anything could have happened. … or not happen. I wanted the reader to let their own imagination take them to their answer.

    Kathleen

  • Patti,
    Thank you so much for your comments. Back in 1939 it was a very dangerous time in Poland. No woman was safe from the soldiers and it was during the treaty talks between the Polish Government and the Nazi’s. Poland handed over half it country to Hitler with the promise the rest would be untouched by them. As in other agreements with other…[Read more]

  • Hi Anjum,
    Thank you so much! Some places in the world it is, unfortunately, a very common occurrence. Thank you for reading and commenting.

  • “Get rid of that camera.” Susan dragged Irene into an alley on the outskirts of Krakow.

    Irene kept snapping as her view was cut off.

    They huddled, shoulder touching, listening to the sound of goose-stepping sol […]

    • a common situation but cleverly composed

    • Loved it, would be interesting to know what happens next.

    • Dangerous times, indeed. When everyone, even a hotel clerk, was intent on spying on spying on everyone else. Poor girls!

      Well done!

    • Hi Anjum,
      Thank you so much! Some places in the world it is, unfortunately, a very common occurrence. Thank you for reading and commenting.

    • Patti,
      Thank you so much for your comments. Back in 1939 it was a very dangerous time in Poland. No woman was safe from the soldiers and it was during the treaty talks between the Polish Government and the Nazi’s. Poland handed over half it country to Hitler with the promise the rest would be untouched by them. As in other agreements with other countries, he lied. I know
      I purposely left the reader dangling. No ending is wrong, or correct. For those who like HEA, you can say the two women pulled it off, were nice enough not to get pulled into a situation they couldn’t get out of unscathed. Or if you are more of dooms dayer… They did end up in that camp after the soldiers got through with them, and the clerk opened the box to steal the candy, and found camera.

      Kathleen

    • Hi Lauried,
      Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment. I would love to hear what you came up with for an ending. I purposely didn’t put one because during that time, anything could have happened. … or not happen. I wanted the reader to let their own imagination take them to their answer.

      Kathleen

  • Like the analogy. No she wasn’t a cop, but she took martial arts. Had that in there at one time and had to cut it.

  • you are so correct.

  • Thelma was almost at the car when he got out to open her car door. “What happened Thelma? You don’t look thrilled.”
    “Those people and their small print happened to me, George. I don’t think I’ve ever been this a […]

    • Surprising twist, not a bad attempt at action, clever pun on fine print.
      I would like to suggest reading it out loudly, I believe with a little editing it’ll read more easily.

    • There are too many places like that. Or the fine print says the refundable amount will decrease by a percentage for each week after purchase. The robber was like the unfortunate that decide to rob a Police convention. Maybe he couldn’t read or didn’t see 400 officers in uniform.
      Was Thelma an officer also or just fed up with the day and being pushed around?

      • Like the analogy. No she wasn’t a cop, but she took martial arts. Had that in there at one time and had to cut it.

    • Hi
      An interesting read–clever moments, CA

    • you are so correct.

  • Hi Debbie. the white space was there. I’ll be careful to double check before I save it. I always check for the italics and bold. lol I can absolutely agree. I hate it when there isn’t any white space. my apologies.

  • Most women are underestimated because of that. Thank you!

  • Thank you so much~!

  • Angelique,
    Beautifully written. Moved my heart. It left me wondering what happened with the kidnappers and her. I know you were limited on words. Maybe sometime you’ll add more to it and let it be either a longer short story or a Novelette.
    Kathleen

  • Hi Debbie,
    This was fabulous. Very few of us think of time a fragile yet it is so terribly. Your descriptions, and dialog made me hunger for more. Loved the ending – horrified for the living, but the lack of anxiety of where they were brought joy to me. I will look for more of your stories.

    Kathleen

  • The Orb by Kathleen Osborne

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    Sinnge held a delicate globe in her hand. Junga hung over her right shoulder. “Where’d ya get the pretty? Can I hold it?”
    “Quit hovering like that. You know I can’t stand it.” He s […]

    • Wow! This is amazing! I love the world you have created and I would love to read more of your work! Nicely done!

    • Great story Kathleen. I love the message it contains of inner strength and believing in oneself. The title drew me to the story and delivered a wonderful world.

      I would like to see a bit more white space – blank lines – although the indentations help, but my brain was still a little overwhelmed by it looking like one long piece.

      Well done and thanks for sharing.

      • Kathleen – nice story. An intriguing beginning, interesting middle, inspiring end. I like the message you convey in your wisdom. We all have something to share with some gifts and talents not yet developed. Enjoyed your work. I was not bothered by the lack of white space but I do understand it.

      • Hi Debbie. the white space was there. I’ll be careful to double check before I save it. I always check for the italics and bold. lol I can absolutely agree. I hate it when there isn’t any white space. my apologies.

    • Great store and so true sometimes the most fragile looking things are the strongest. It flowed smoothly from beginning to end.I like it.

    • Thank you so much~!

  • Thanks again for the advice…. if you encounter it again, you’ll see the changes.

  • ENOUGH! by Kathleen Osborne#Sam drove up the long driveway. He pulled into their detached garage, making sure he left more than enough room for Janice to get four-year-old Betty in and out. Thinking about them […]

    • Hi Kathleen!
      I was sitting on the edge of my chair while reading your story! I enjoyed the suspense and am glad it ended well. 🙂
      You didn’t explain who this maniac is or what his motives are. Do you plan to write a second part to explore a bit more? It would be interesting to learn more about him. It’s not usual to walk around with a sword stabbing people around. I’d love to know more. 🙂
      I spotted a few parts where you can improve your writing:
      You can put these two sentences together: “They had bought the original house. From the developer who was revitalizing it as a gated community.”
      In “Why dinner and kisses with the love of my life,” I believe you meant: “How about dinner and kisses with the love of my life?”
      In “The two officers that will be in charge are Baylor a Marus,” I think you meant “Baylor and Marus”.
      It was a nice read. Thanks for sharing. Keep it up.

    • Thanks again for the advice…. if you encounter it again, you’ll see the changes.

  • Hi Jodie,
    Loved this. I was with your character every step of the way. I’ve been through some earthquakes, nothing that bad, thank God. But I understand the fear and terror that strikes you heart and mind.

    I, personally, love it if someone finds typos or tells me some things need to be corrected AND they tell me where. Sometimes offering…[Read more]

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