• Gee. I’m buzzing with delight that I helped to inspire you. Onwards and upwards!

  • Hi Elizabeth. Your poem took me from being glad these ancient heroes had rebuilt what was broken, to feeling so sad at the image of ‘I enter my Jerusalem on broken wings’, but the resolve at the end brought hope back – ‘I gather my resolve, Rebuild these / Crumbled walls with war torn bones.’ I saw your post about having edited this poem and I…[Read more]

  • Hi Stevie. Oh what a great, contemporary take on the prompt! I love the repeated ‘you smiled at me’ – revealing no uncertainty until the last line. Well done and thank you for sharing.

  • Thank you, Christian! Lovely comments.

  • Oh that’s an interesting take on this poem, Teresa. It seems that the poem can be read in all sorts of ways I didn’t even expect. Thank you for reading.

  • Hi Pam. Hmmmmmmmm. Those are questions I didn’t ask myself. I wonder ……….. Thanks for reading.

  • Hi Chantelle. It’s great to see you back here! Thank you for stopping by to read my poem.

  • Hi Teresa. I read this poem when it first came up, then went away to ponder over it. I’m back! And have reread it. I love every image you have created, but this is my favourite: ‘And a trysting weekend / Memory fills a lifetime’. It’s the most enigmatic of the lot. The poem itself lifts my spirits with every image, except the last one – the heaven…[Read more]

  • Hi Chantelle. It’s great to see you back here again. What a great poem! You have some excellent images here – the ‘pop up mountains’ and the image of ‘too white’ hands in the darkness. I’m wondering if the ‘loss of the journey’ refers to a journey you long to take, but can’t at the moment? Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Hi Pam. This is an interesting take on the prompt. The first thing that struck me in this poem was your last line. ‘Abdicate your will to my administrations.’ ‘Administration’ relates to the process of running a business or government. I think you mean ‘ministrations’ – relating to healing. Or have I missed your intention? I’m also not sure…[Read more]

  • Hi Christian. Another fantastic poem from you! I love the repetition of ‘ I do not miss a beat.’ It makes a noise in my head, and I can hear the chisel tapping away at the stone. This image made me sit up in my chair ‘as keen as eunuch’s razors’. I love the rhythm of your poem. Thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Limor. I stopped at your poem because we’ve both written about Hestia, the enigmatic goddess, this month! You’ve told her complete story in this beautiful poem. Just a couple of suggestions, take them or leave them: leave out ‘protectively’ in this line ‘poised besides Dione who fawns protectively over Aphrodite’, also it should be ‘beside’ not…[Read more]

  • In Awe of Hestia by June Hunter

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    Beside the hearth the virgin goddess

    Feeds the everlasting fire,

    Nurtures the lamp of perpetual flame.

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    Hestia, goddess of family union,

    Makes each home her […]

    • Hello June,

      It’s lovely to be back here and to see you are still writing! 🙂

      You definitely captured Hestia’s enigmatic personality. There’s underlying tension between the images in your poem that works very well – it creates Hestia’s mysterious aura. This stanza was my favourite:
      She is first born, last reborn.
      First swallowed, last disgorged.
      Daughter both eldest and youngest.
      There’s also a nice twist/ change in tone in the last stanza that adds further interest. I found it changed the way I saw her when I read through your poem a second time.
      Thanks for sharing. I always enjoy reading your work.
      Chantelle

    • I like the title to your poem, June. You tell the enigmatic story of Hestia in just a few verses. There is a feeling of calm and assurance throughout. Hestia will cede her place at the highest table to enable peace and harmony among the gods. Which makes her more beloved and admired among mere mortals. And yet questions remain, what if she had decided otherwise? And would any of the other gods or goddesses have challenged Dionysus claim?

    • Hi June, I particularly liked the ending where for me you had her change from a goddess to many a mortal woman who sacrificed her identity to become the wife of one not quite worthy of her sacrifice.

      • Oh that’s an interesting take on this poem, Teresa. It seems that the poem can be read in all sorts of ways I didn’t even expect. Thank you for reading.

    • Hi June,
      I hadn’t heard of Hestia before (or, if I had, I’d forgotten her). I like the way your poem introduces your reader to the goddess of the home, but then twists in the final verse to the fact that she is superseded by Dionysus, the god of drunken revelry. It is a metaphor for everyday homes both now and in the past. The woman makes the home, adds her own talents but is often overshadowed by the noisy male of the species. Great poem idea, great poem.

    • I have always believed that Hestia was under rated, she is the mother of all. She has been my Goddess at certain times in my life. You have captured her so well.

    • Hi June! How incredible that we both chose Hestia. I think there are many invisible threads that link us writers together (the mind is a curious beast). I loved your gentle, wholesome and soothing portrayal of her up until your line: ‘ First swallowed, last disgorged ‘. This told me something was coming and it did, I knew then that you would stick it to Dionysus. Well Done!

  • Hi Astrid. I think you’ve got an excellent story here, but there’s so much hopping from one scene to the next, that much of what your story is trying to do has been lost on me. As it is a first draft, however, there is lots of room for improvement. I hope you keep refining it. Thanks for sharing.

  • Hi Elizabeth. I love the voice of your protagonist – the matter-of-fact way in which she tells her story. It brought to mind the character in the book Where the Crawdads Sing, by Delia Owens. Have you read that? I wondered then, as I do now with your story, why the mother would not have taken her children with her. The image of the fixed bench in…[Read more]

  • Thank you, Elizabeth!

  • Thank you for reading, Astrid

  • *lovely (not lively)

  • Thank you for reading, Ana, and for your lively comments.

  • Hi Jane. What I liked about this story is the character of your MC – a strong woman. I thought the backstory about where she’d come from as a person unnecessary and misplaced in this piece – would she really be thinking all that as she made her way from her seat to the top of the table? It didn’t fit naturally for me, seemed as if it was just…[Read more]

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