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  • Ah thanks Christian 🙂

  • Hahahah, I love “spanner in the works” – I think it’s from my dad. Thanks for the read and the comment.

  • Thanks Chloe – really appreciate your comment 🙂

  • It’s in these times that plans are so uncertain,

    From one day to another, things change,

    Plans fall away, you’re coughing?  Oops, let’s rather not,

    Best we cancel and rather re-arrange.

    School’s been on, even […]

    • Hello! I really like your poem. I like how the repetition signifies the monotony that this pandemic has become – the day in day out bit and table and chair etc.
      I think it has lovely pace and flow. Good job.

    • Jodie,
      You’ve captured the monotony and uncertainty of the current situation. I like the expression “spanner in the works.” An office mate originally from Great Britain used that expression.
      Best,
      Wanda Lovan

      • Hahahah, I love “spanner in the works” – I think it’s from my dad. Thanks for the read and the comment.

    • Hello Jodie,
      Your poem is a good response to the prompt. I enjoyed reading it.

  • Hi Mark – thanks so much for the feedback and suggestion of splitting the paragraph. And I’m glad you enjoyed reading my story. In a nutshell, Yvonne was the surrogate mother for Cindy and then stole the baby 🙂

  • She now knew without a doubt that the lady she’d previously seen was Yvonne.  It was definitely karma – it always came back to bite you!  But who was it going to bite this time…her or Yvonne?! 

    She didn’t […]

    • Hi Jodie,
      I picked this one as I saw you had no comments and that’s not fair. I have never read any of the previous stories and that did leave me at a disadvantage.
      However, this is an intriguing story. When I had finished it I now want to know more. Is Yvonne all bad as CIndy makes out?
      Have a look at the third paragraph. It is very long with a lot of information in it. Maybe split it?

      My opinion but still a great read

      • Hi Mark – thanks so much for the feedback and suggestion of splitting the paragraph. And I’m glad you enjoyed reading my story. In a nutshell, Yvonne was the surrogate mother for Cindy and then stole the baby 🙂

  • Thanks Christian. Nothing in particular, just as a mum of kids who are now more grown up, I can pick up my own interests and not be conformed to what others think works or is best for me. So it’s stepping out and doing whatever I want that makes me happy 🙂

  • Hi Nissan – thank you very much for your feedback, much appreciated 🙂

  • Focus
    Purpose
    Vision
    Driven
    I am enough
    I am good enough
    I am better than good enough!
    The chains that have kept me back,
    Kept me from allowing myself to become the true me, who I really am,
    They are now gone,
    And […]

    • Hi Jodie
      This is a special capture of the prompt I would say. The self determination is impressive and the tree shape is very nice. Well done.

    • Hi Nissan – thank you very much for your feedback, much appreciated 🙂

    • Hello Jodie,
      I like the way your determination shines through the poem. I hope all goes to plan. I would like to hear what it is you intend doing and how it pans out. Best wishes with it.

      • Thanks Christian. Nothing in particular, just as a mum of kids who are now more grown up, I can pick up my own interests and not be conformed to what others think works or is best for me. So it’s stepping out and doing whatever I want that makes me happy 🙂

  • Thanks for the read and the feedback. If you get a chance, please do read the previous stories I’ve written. Would love to get your feedback.

  • Yvonne…

    Ever since she’d seen Cindy three weeks ago, she’d become more guarded.  She’d made sure that leaving the house was almost completely restricted to school trips.  If she’d told Gemma and Gray that they c […]

    • Hi Jodie, this is very intriguing, and it entices me to go back and read the rest of the story. You did a good job of creating some tension in the story, making the fear of being found out and the fear the past has come back to haunt. It was a little confusing when you switched points of view because the paragraph the paragraph just as the switch happened was unclear as to who it was applying to, Yvonne or Cindy. Great read though. Thank you for your story.

      • Thanks for the read and the feedback. If you get a chance, please do read the previous stories I’ve written. Would love to get your feedback.

  • Jodie commented on the post, Another Me by Jodie 3 months ago

    Thanks Deryn.

  • Jodie commented on the post, Another Me by Jodie 3 months ago

    Thanks for the comment Christian. Yes I can imagine, one doesn’t want to live life thinking of the “what ifs” all the time – life, afterall, is so short as it is!

  • Thanks for the read and the feedback Cathy 🙂

  • In another world, things could be different.

    Things could be better, I could be thriving, maybe I’d be successful, perhaps I’d be happier.

    Yet here I am.

    I’ve made the choice to stay, to smile even though the s […]

    • I suspect this poem will resonate with many of us. Who doesn’t have at least one crossroads in life that would have changed our outcomes to some degree. Thought provoking.

    • Hello Jodie,
      I share great periods of self-doubt but from my great age have decided I have to get past them otherwise I shall have wasted a lifetime wondering if there is another me! Well done for putting such doubts into a poem.

      • Thanks for the comment Christian. Yes I can imagine, one doesn’t want to live life thinking of the “what ifs” all the time – life, afterall, is so short as it is!

    • No regrets…but sometimes it’s hard not to have them. Hopefully, on balance, life has been kind to us all, but we must above all be kind to ourselves. Lovely thought provoking piece

  • Thanks for your feedback Cobus 🙂 Glad you enjoyed the read!

  • Yvonne…

    It. Just. Couldn’t. Be.  In Kansas, after months of planning.  On the kids first day at school.  She couldn’t believe she’d allowed herself the freedom.  To think she imagined she’d one day live a “norma […]

    • Hi Jodie,
      Despite not having read parts 1 through 8, I still followed easily enough. I liked how you unfurled the mystery by dropping hints throughout, instead of dumping the whole backstory at once.
      Madison should probably stop watching documentaries about pregnancies gone wrong.
      Take care.

  • Thanks for the feedback Wanda – for a change, this is not about my own life, just a made up poem 🙂

  • Thanks for the feedback Christian.

  • Thanks for the feedback Joan. I guess it’s all about who’s reading it as well – different strokes for different folks 🙂

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