Thank you so much, Jane – I am enjoying writing poetry so much, although Sonnet, like Villanelle, is a bit daunting!

Hi Neta – I was completely swept up in this and the misery of Kay’s existence…her brief period of feeling loved and loving and so knowing what that should feel like made the switch to the control over her even more poignant.

I felt it needed a little more dialogue but understand the word count but this piece is definitely worth expanding into…[Read more]

Hi Cinthia I liked the premise and overall execution of the story, with similar reservations to above re time and place, and more character details required to enable us to empathise a little more with the characters. The dialogue was very good and I must say it elicited almost equal sympathy for each of them – it was simply a love that died and…[Read more]

Hi finally got round to editing and you’re right…I like it much more now – thank you!

Thank you so much, Kim – I have finally got round to editing and splitting that line, and I like it much better now. Really appreciate your comments.

Thank you so much, Martha – your response to the poem means a lot to me. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Thank you so much, Glen

And it took a South African to write it. Stick it to him, Kim.

Hi Rachel – wow and hasn’t it been COLD here!! This is icy…that sky….brrrrr. Brilliant!

Hi Sharon – this is very inventive and shows how many different ways a story can go with a little tweak of a verb here and an adjective there! Well done!

Hi Angelique – very to the point, blunt and impactful.

Thank you, Christian

Hi there – yes, thank you – words drying up on stage and no prompt! What a nightmare. Many thanks for the read and kind words.

Thank you so much, Marcena

Ah thank you, Nina – I am enjoying this poetry way more than I imagined I would. Not sure about an actual sonnet, though!

Hi Lauren – Thanks for your read and input – would it work if I just broke the line in 2, splitting it after ‘improvised’ ?

Hi Martin – I get you now, although like all art, anything we see or read is open I guess to personal interpretation, and it’s interesting that Sharon and I drew the same conclusion. It nevertheless stands as a strong piece of writing and we can each see in it what we personally have felt or relate to, or what resonates with our own experience/s.…[Read more]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Jan. I don’ know why I had such doubts about this piece. I was wracked with insecurity about it and almost didn’t post it,,,but that 12 in 12 kept me going! Hope you are safe and well, D

Hi Shae – yes…do we really see the hopes, dreams etc of other people…do we care enough to see them? Or are we all a bit bland and homogenous, that colourless palette…we should show more colourful passion and then would be seen…I really liked this thought provoking piece.

Hi Lauren
Don’t they say that we have nothing to fear but fear itself! This is lovely…one niggle is the split infinitive which is pedantic so please ignore if you think so…I try never to be intimidated rather than I try to never be intimidated…