Hi Sue I wondered if the MC had met this man during her travels as I couldn’t discern when they may have spent real time together. I liked the scene in the shop when they bought the scarf, where the age difference is brought out. I did wonder how a young 20 something might be able to support her Kiwi lover in UK, but all together it was an i…[Read more]

Hi Lauren – I also enjoyed this – I love that you didn’t make Margaret smug which would have been easy to do, but this round (well, square!) table scene was v reminiscent of many a girls’ night out – great dialogue and characterisation.

Hi HM – Thank you for reading and for the insightful comments. I like the idea of the circular opening and closing, although I am not fond of writing in 1st person. Still, that would be an exercise in itself, stepping out of my comfort zone and I could always craft a different ending (or is narrative from the grave credible?!) I really appreciate…[Read more]

Thank you, Pam – I am debating after Nina’s suggestion whether to drop the last 2 lines and let the devastation be implicit…

Thank you, Marcena!

Hi Nina – yes – that is a great idea – v powerful. Thank you – for the read and input x

Thank you so much for the read and kind comment.

Stay warm and stay safe x

Good luck – I hope you can help her…

Thank you, Marisa for your read and kind comment

Thank you Nonie! Poor Liz!

Hi Pam – this is excellent and great vocab. Language is so dumbed down these days, I love a linguistic stretch!!

The pleasure….the regret…delicious (the poem and chocolate!!)

Definitely one for the reader to mull over, but then there are no right or wrong answers in interpreting poetry.

Elegant simplicity.

Hi Ester this is very poignant and what a sad misunderstanding if only they had communicated better.

Hi Ellen, I loved the rhythm of this – the subject matter reminded me of my own submission so I really felt it…Nicely done

Thank you so much

Thank you, HH – I put ‘grown up why’ in inverted commas following Susanne’s suggestion

Thank you, Christian, a sad, human truth, indeed