• Love the tale this poem tells Wanda. The words flow well and leave me with a warm fuzzy feeling inside and a smile.

    It is wonderful to pick up something and it gives you wonderful memories. I aim to make those for my children.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Thomas. Much appreciated.

  • Hmmm I’m liking what is in that bowl. The poem flows well and the alliteration creates a melodic piece with great rhythm.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Heart-wrenching poem Ester. I can feel the pain and misery created by your choice of words – knife, rotten and storm raged.

    I can feel the difficulty in memories and remembering and missing.

    Although I don’t get who left, it doesn’t matter because you convey the effect it had.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme of your piece Juanita.

    You painted the scene well and gave a feeling at the end of darkness having been lifted. I’m feeling hungry now 😉
    I like the idea of the opening line to not focus on difficulty and hardship, but see our blessings.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Great poem Tom. You paint the scene well and I can feel the fight from nodding off. Won’t it be wonderful after that pleasant dream to realize that your wine is still there waiting for you.

    The rhythm and rhyme were good.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • The fatal death knell has sounded

    For this fleeting bout of happiness

    Blood spatter dripped on the floor

    From the knockout punch

    Rendered smile absent and broken

    In the violent yank of reality

    Crawling to […]

    • fabulous depth in your writing, thank you for sharing.

    • Hi Debbie, this is beautiful! I love how there are two parts here: the first with the strong metaphor of the fight in the ring, a daily battle against overwhelming grief; the second the meditative reprieve, and eventually even gratitude, found in sweet memories – despite the relentless pain. Lovely read, thank you for sharing! -Deb

    • Hi Debbie, so much within this poem. It is like a tiny tale. It starts very brutally and shocking in a way, with the blood spatter metaphors. A great way to grab attention. I love how it ends with a smile and rosy apple cheeks – as a first love is remembered and beautiful memories overpower the misery and sadness from the beginning of the poem. Really well done, thanks for sharing:)

    • Debbie, I read this several times. It is a convoluted relationship as most of life is, but light triumphs over dark in the end. Thank you for your poem, and the :ringing, singing bowl of joy.

      • Thanks for reading and your feedback Juanita. I appreciate you taking the time to read it more than once.

    • Debbie,
      I enjoyed your poem. Not sure I caught it at first, had to revisit.
      Thanks for sharing.
      Wanda

      • Thanks for reading and your feedback Wanda. I appreciate you taking the time to read it again.

    • Hello Debbie,
      I wondered where the boxer’s story was taking us – now I see it, but I worry that despite the tenderness shown, the brutality of this contact ‘sport’ may yet harm the relationship. An interesting take on the prompt.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Wanda. Much appreciated.

  • Great Haikus Leona. I googled the artwork and fell in love. Your poem does great justice to the painting.

    One of my favourite lines:
    Broken dolls in ghetto streets

    Very powerful and I love the hope in amongst the pain and destruction.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Great poem Renee. You tell the story well and paint vivid images in my mind – not entirely my cup of tea, but well done.

    The piece flows nicely and your words are powerful.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind and detailed feedback Chantelle. It is much appreciated.

  • Yes, I can read the top line perfectly now.

  • Beautiful poem Sandra. Your descriptions did a great job to paint the scene in my mind.

    I’m not sure if these – Vrojaket, Kelsaera – are character names because I couldn’t find them when I tried looking them up.

    Your piece flowed well and I could feel the passion. Great job.

  • Gorgeous Wanda. I love how you measured the events of the year with the changes in the garden. I am so looking forward to Spring here in South Africa which is only a few weeks away, but we already have roses blooming.

    Your poem has a beautiful rhythm and paints lovely images in my mind.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • Loved the story Tom. I did however – and this could be my twisted mind – get a bit of an ominous feeling with your last two lines. A sailor among the rocks might not be breathing.

    The rhythm and rhyme of the poem were great and I felt like I was floating on the waves. I love how you described them in this line:
    she hides beneath the dancing…[Read more]

  • Great poem Ester. It has a beautiful cadence, a little like the waves. My heart felt lighter with the conclusion of finding home – that place where we feel comfortable and find our perfect fit.

    One of my favourite lines among the many lovely images you painted:
    waiting to take a lost soul on an adventure

    Like Dianne I am also curious to…[Read more]

  • Debbie commented on the post, Ekphrastic by William 2 months ago

    Great poem William. In such few words you describe the art of taking the great wonders of life and Earth and producing art with it and the responsibility artists have to do this.

    Like Christian I wonder if you had a particular painting in mind that inspired you.

    Your piece has great rhythm and rhyme and inspires me to want to create.

    Well…[Read more]

  • I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm of your poem Gretchen. I can picture your intro of the metal wall hanging on a blue wall, but would love to see the art that this is based on.

    Your last two lines give me a much deeper meaning than what I’m imagining the image to be. I get the idea of a trapped life. What I love about poetry is each reader pulls…[Read more]

  • Great poem Christian. Your piece weaves a great story to this picture and I too like the POV you’ve done this from. I also like the title you’ve given it. I can feel the disillusion with her words.

    I enjoyed the rhythm of the poem and your word choice works very well with the art. You use the senses well with the scratching pencil and imagining…[Read more]

  • Thanks for pointing that out Jane. Not sure what happened. I have deleted the duplication.
    Thanks for reading and your kind feedback. It is always appreciated.

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