Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Wanda. Glad you enjoyed it and much appreciated.

Great poem Wanda. You painted the feeling of autumn very well in my mind, using different senses and I loved the images.

The rhythm was good and I enjoyed the rhyme – I was thrown a little when the pattern changed though.

Thanks for sharing.

Thanks for reading and I’m glad you liked the metaphor. Much appreciated.

Great alliteration, and the short lines make the poem punchy. I too could hear this as a tv or radio ad.

I do wonder if there is a hidden message though. Is Jasmine poisonous – the use of courage? Another 13 – unlucky number? I get a feeling of murder here and you might not want to go with. I could be way off track, but there is a suspicious…[Read more]

Great poem Hanri. I love the war of life and soldiering on. Your metaphor is very appropriate and the words flow well.

Not a lot of words, but powerful. I too appreciate the resolutions silently begging to be buried in honour. Looking for a little bit of hope that the whole year isn’t a failure.

Thanks for sharing.

Love it Christy and I can sooooo relate at the moment. It feels like my head is empty of anything creative.

I love the rhythm and rhyme of your poem and the subject is appropriate.

Great job and thanks for sharing.

Beautiful poem Tom. I love the images that you paint in my mind. Your words transported me from 32 degree sunny South Africa to the impending cold.

The piece flows wonderfully. I don’t know why, but the end gave me a peaceful feeling of the acceptance to the end of life by disease – unseen foe. I looked up the mountain you mentioned and the…[Read more]

Great poem Liz. I loved the lines where she thought she belonged in the frozen food section.

I enjoyed the repeated lines as a statement that it doesn’t matter because love is love and she managed to find it, and perhaps she didn’t expect it once and surprised herself. I hope she managed to hold onto that once in a lifetime love.

I liked the…[Read more]

You yanked me into the most gorgeous scene with your first line Christian and from there on it was a delight for my ears. Your words and the way you expressed simple things like crumbs on a chair was gorgeous. Love your poem and the heart tugging memories of granny and the bowl that carries her memory.

The piece flowed and took me through a…[Read more]

Thanks for reading and your feedback Christian. Much appreciated.

Thanks for reading and your feedback Juanita. I appreciate you taking the time to read it more than once.

Thanks for reading and your feedback Wanda. I appreciate you taking the time to read it again.

Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Jane. Always appreciate your comments.

Loved your poem Jane. I could feel the pain in the words and the numbness.

The piece flowed well and I liked the structure and your word choice.

Great work.

Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Deb. Much appreciated.

Wow Wanda that is so cool to know some of the history. That’s what makes the stories.

Great haiku Mark. I can feel and see the beautiful bowl sparkling.

I also love that last line because it conveys the strength of the glass and its humble beginnings.

Oh Deb this tale is beautiful and sad all rolled into one. I loved the details you mention of the mother.

This is one of my favourite lines:
‘Her mind was askew, itchy,’
I love the idea of an itchy mind

Thank you for ending it on a happier note as I’m a sucker for the heaviness being lightened, even though life might not always work like…[Read more]

This poem touched my heart Neta. I could feel the deep-seated sadness and an idea of what if I’d chosen differently.

I liked the repetition as it emphasizes the loneliness.

I too loved this line:
“life walked down Broadway. ”

The couplets work well for me because it gives the reader a moments pause to absorb what you’ve just said and…[Read more]