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  • Great poem Anthea. You had me swaying and hearing music by the end of the piece. The pace increased the further I read and I loved that this wasn’t a rhyming poem but about how these 2 important building blocks of poetry make the lyrical words sing to us.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Anthea. Much appreciated.

  • Great poem Wanda. Like an artist you took your paintbrush and conjured big, beautiful strokes across my mind of these changing season. The words flowed well and the rhyme didn’t feel forced.

    I loved these lines:
    And the tree is going nude,
    How rude!
    Gentlemen, avert your eyes
    Kentucky coffee tree in the backyard lies.
    She is doing the…[Read more]

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Wanda. Much appreciated.

  • Love it Christian. I did not know what enjambment was and when I looked it up I said oh, there is a word for what I enjoyed about your format. Something I’d like to try.

    I absolutely love the message of your poem, highlighting this constant internal struggle that many people suffer. The piece doesn’t finish because it leaves the reader thinking…[Read more]

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Christian. Much appreciated.

  • Wow Kim! Your words are strangling my heart with their power. The rhythm pulls me beautifully to the brutal end.

    I send love and light for healing of the heartbreak in this poem. May the release of the words be a little helpful.

    Great work and thanks for sharing a piece of your soul.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Kim. Much appreciated.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Elizabeth. Much appreciated.

  • When I started reading I was wondering where the rhyme was, but you turned it on it’s head and I loved it Elizabeth.

    I love poetry, but dislike it being taught at school because I always wonder who decides what the poem means. For me poetry means whatever it does to the reader. I am given words to put on a page and they will strike each reader…[Read more]

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Jane, and thanks for picking up my error. Yes, where should be were. As for commas, I avoid punctuation as much as possible in my poetry, but maybe I should read it through.

    Her being discovering her perfect ideals – I was trying to say that she is figuring things out with every part of herself (her…[Read more]

  • Love the acrostic Jane. You tell the story of a common occurrence and how easily people walk away instead of fight.

    The rhythm and rhyme was great and you created images I could fall into.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Christy. Much appreciated.

  • Great poem Maria. I also fear more lurks beneath these words which paint beautiful imagery.

    The rhythm and rhyme of the piece works well and is a pleasure to read and a feel like I slide over them easily as I would the ice.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Thanks Maria. It was inspired by my 16 year old whom I took dress shopping yesterday and realized that she’s not a little girl anymore.

    I have always taught my children that they deserve to be respected and loved and to accept nothing less.

    Have an amazing day.

  • Beautiful and sad poem Christy. The words flow well and the rhythm and rhyme are easy.

    The piece stirs a sadness of wishing it was better.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Love it Rachel. Her dad was obviously a purist and like many children they will find a way around their parent’s wishes.

    Thanks for sharing and making me smile this morning. Well done.

  • Hmmm. I’m now craving a slice of homemade bread slathered with creamy butter. Your poem was melodic Riana and I could see and feel and smell the process and satisfaction of preparing the dough from the golden wheat fields to the kitchen.

    The words flow beautifully and the rhyme doesn’t feel forced.

    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Her Carriage Departs by Debbie Gravett

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    Cinderella sprung from a little girl

    A beautiful woman has begun to unfurl

    No longer playing at make-up and heels

    Her being discovering her perfect ideals

    Decisions […]

    • Cinderella all grown up!!! I love it!!!! This was so much fun to read I read it twice!!! I’m gonna read it again!

      My most favorite line!

      Filled to the brim with a respectable love
      One that she is most deserving of

      This was great fun Debbie.

      • Thanks Maria. It was inspired by my 16 year old whom I took dress shopping yesterday and realized that she’s not a little girl anymore.

        I have always taught my children that they deserve to be respected and loved and to accept nothing less.

        Have an amazing day.

    • A love ode to coming of age! Cinderella launched. Very hopeful and optimistic outlook for a lovely young lady off to live her life, perhaps even getting married. Nice.

    • I hope you read this to your daughter:) It is very touching and sweet:) The love and respect shines through.
      One small question about these two lines:
      Her being discovering her perfect ideals
      Decisions where once about what to wear
      I found them a little confusing. Not sure if where is meant to be were in the second line and her being? Maybe a couple of commas could help.
      Well done and thanks for sharing:)

      • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Jane, and thanks for picking up my error. Yes, where should be were. As for commas, I avoid punctuation as much as possible in my poetry, but maybe I should read it through.

        Her being discovering her perfect ideals – I was trying to say that she is figuring things out with every part of herself (her being) because it is hard crossing that threshold from child to adult and although she’s not quite there yet, these are the years of working through the confusion and finding her identity and learning to be comfortable with it.

        Truly appreciate your time.

        • Hi Debbie, thanks for the explanation:) Yes that definitely makes sense, and yes I tend to not use too much punctuation in my poetry either.

    • Sweet. I love how you use a fairy tale to show the journey of a little girl to adulthood. The couplets give it a sing-song feel, appropriate for the topic, and I appreciated some of the unique pairings. Nicely done.

    • This was so touching – could just about see you bursting with pride, and perhaps a little fearful too – to let her go to find her own way in the world.
      Love the pic also,it is stunning
      Well done you Mama Bear – your daughter will always find her way back to you, enjoy those special moments ❤

    • Hi Debbie, It’s hard to let go isn’t it? Your Cinderella is ready to fly the nest but will always have a homing instinct. It’s a lovely warm poem and encapsulates the slogan: A daughter is just a little girl who grows up to be a friend. Well done on the poem and thanks for sharing it.

    • A beautiful description of how our daughter’s grow up, we drift apart, and then back together. Great writing.
      Wanda

    • Aaaah, Debbie, I like what you have done with the prompt this month and the image you have added is lovely! Well done!

  • Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Kat. Much appreciated.

    I think this year has required a review of the tools that we are equipped with and that we teach our children. Priorities have shifted and our focus. We have definitely been told that we are not in control of everything and that we do need to learn to accept and go with the flow.

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