Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Amanda. Much appreciated.
I believe that unexpressed feelings manifest in physical illness and it is very unfortunate that if it makes people uncomfortable society believes that you should not inconvenience others with it. The policy you have with your daughter is great.
Great poem Trace. It leaves the reader with much to ponder and each reader can take their own view from the words which lead in many different directions and thoughts. I read it a few times and I interpreted different things each time.
Neglected for the betterment of tomorrow
This spoke to me of not living in the current moments of life and…[Read more]
Great poem Linda. You create a fast pace with the words you use and I like that you don’t include question marks because it helps the pace keep going. It is a great story in this poem, though scary.
The piece flows well and it slows down nearer the end to make me feel the difficulty of you trying to put everything into focus.
Hope you get…[Read more]
Wonderful poem Ellen. I love the repetition like the blank pages that just keep coming and need filling. I also like how you ended the piece on a positive note of hope.
The words flow well and the short lines give the sense of continuing through the struggle of the blank page and filling it rapidly once begun.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Great poem Riana. I loved the rhythm and the change at the end with the shorter lines wishing for possible absolution by bullet.
I liked the different take on the prompt albeit disturbing, but I got the message of a desperate seeking for the weight of a sin to be lifted and the only way the person can see is through death.
Well done and…[Read more]
Beautiful poem. I love that you make this about all the possibilities and listing them creates a spark of hope in a stuck artist’s mind.
Love this line:
And what shall find its birth among these lines?
The piece flows well and I had to look up acolyte and love this word and how you have used it. I often feel that I am a messenger and these…[Read more]
Great poem Cinthia. This so resonated with me as I am struggling to write and the moment and missed my first 12 short stories post in three and a half years. I could feel the raw desperation of being sucked into nothingness and being that blank page that feels empty.
The piece flows well and your repetition of blank drives home the feeling of…[Read more]
Great poem Christian. Your words flow well and convey the boring and monotonous life of these mill workers, only to return to the same the following day. You paint some wonderful images – one of my favourites:
of a horde of panes–
each one a spy fixated
on the blank-faced figures beneath,
The words you use give a good sense of the s…[Read more]
Great poem Limor. You started with a great title and just carried on with wonderful writing. The piece was powerful. At first I thought that she was going to commit suicide, but all became clear as the blank page.
You have many beautiful phrases. These are some of my favourites:
the circus tent that is my single-parent life
She is unimpressed…[Read more]
Oh Katharine! This piece yanks at my heart. It says so much in these few words and is difficult for both parties, but I think some people need to ‘check out’ before they leave us because some can’t handle dying and are afraid.
I loved the thought of this line:
I feel that the short lines work well and the short verses…[Read more]
Love this Anthea. Very sad, but you have described it well. I love the language you’ve used and the piece flows nicely.
This line paints the picture of the divorce perfectly for me:
they pull up the drawbridges of their separate lives;
Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Oh goodness Srivalli, please get out of my head. 😆
So few words, but much power in them and here I go feeling guilty all over again at not writing enough. This is especially powerful considering this month was the first time I missed submitting a 12 short stories piece in 3 years and 6 months. Not because I didn’t have the time but because…[Read more]
Thanks for reading and your kind feedback Jane. Much appreciated.
Meditation takes time and I sometimes struggle. When I can’t quiet the voice, then I use a guided meditation with someone else’s voice that drowns out my own whining and I’ve found many that can get me to the serene calm place that leaves me feeling refreshed when I’m done. But…[Read more]
Beautiful storm Jane. I love the positive ending with hope after the dark time and so may it be with the world.
The words flow well and describe the feel of this weather well and the cleansing it brings, calming all the dust and the irritation, washing away the grime.
I don’t love storms because of the lightening and thunder we experience…[Read more]
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