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Cheryl wrote a new post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 6 minutes ago
Back in the Forest
Clara and Dean sat down on the rock in the middle of the clearing trying to figure out what their next move was going to be. Dean stood up and started to pace back and forth. He was never one […]
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 10 hours, 58 minutes ago
Thank you, Tuesday. I can probably put ‘Five years earlier’ to separate that section to make it less confusing.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 11 hours, 1 minute ago
Thank you, Astrid.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 11 hours, 1 minute ago
Thank you, Angelique
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Cheryl commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 19 by T. Weeks 3 days, 1 hour ago
Your descriptions of the girls riding the horses was great. I felt like I was riding along with them. I am interested to see what is going on between Rebecca and Max, since it seemed like he completely ignored Rebecca.
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Cheryl commented on the post, Week 20 by Angelique Pacheco 3 days, 1 hour ago
Nice scene, well written. It was an interesting back story on Chavvas. I was confused when it said he was five years old, but he didn’t go to the orphanage until he was a teenager. Other than that, I enjoyed the scene.
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Cheryl commented on the post, The Pumpkin Murders – Scene 19 – by Astrid Blume 3 days, 2 hours ago
Wow, that was good! Your descriptions gave great imagery, I felt like I was walking right alongside of them and eavesdropping. You have such a knack of placing the reader with your characters. Great job!
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Cheryl commented on the post, Dead Man's Wife by Chase Madeson 3 days, 2 hours ago
Good dialogue between Roula and Denzyo. I was confused at first when Roula started to talk to Denzyo, but rereading it again it is fine. Your story is coming along beautifully.
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Cheryl wrote a new post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 6 days, 23 hours ago
Eira –
“Here you go Maddie, oh! Take this one to your mother, as a thank you. She’ll know what I’m talking about.” Eira put the last of Maddie’s purchases in a cloth shopping bag decorated with flowers that […]
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Great learning about Eira. Her ability is very cool, the good and the bad. I can’t blame her for wanting to hide it. In you second section I got a little lost at the beginning of it but I figured it out. I felt like maybe I needed something to let me know that it was several years before.
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Thank you, Tuesday. I can probably put ‘Five years earlier’ to separate that section to make it less confusing.
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Hi Cheryl,
I love the birthmark detail on the last part and am curious to know what exactly Eira feels when Getty does her thing.
I also enjoyed getting to know Eira and her ability to heal other, though it comes with a price. Perhaps there’s a way to heal others without having to transfer it onto herself?
Curious to know more. Astrid-
Thank you, Astrid.
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I love this piece. I think you’ve really captured how Eira would want to hide her ability especially when she describes how people would line up to get healed. Nice work.
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Thank you, Angelique
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 1 week, 1 day ago
I’m thinking about starting the story with the triplets’ lives, but not a defiant yet. Yes, you will find out in another scene as to why she was unable to communicate with Brice. Thank you, Kali.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 1 week, 1 day ago
Thank you, Jackie.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 1 week, 1 day ago
Thank you, Angelique.
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Cheryl commented on the post, The Pumpkin Murders – Scene 18 – by Astrid Blume 1 week, 6 days ago
Great scene. I loved the dialogue between Spalding and Sage, eating lunch and going over their suspects. Good relationship between the two. Good job.
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Cheryl commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 18 by T. Weeks 1 week, 6 days ago
Don’t know if it was supposed to be funny, but I laughed anyway when Raygar was stepping on people sleeping on the floor while he was trying to get to the door. Good description. I like the interaction between Rebecca and Raygar. Will she tell him why she was banished?
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Cheryl commented on the post, Dead Man's Wife – Chase Madeson 1 week, 6 days ago
Nice scene, good flow. Check your first sentence. Surprised about Roula’s brother maybe married to Danyor’s daughter. Curious to see where this goes.
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Cheryl commented on the post, Aethia (scene 11) by Kali Goodenough 1 week, 6 days ago
Very interesting scene. Nice flow with the dialogue. You can feel Lena’s agony losing her sister. Good transition into the Hall of Relics.
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Cheryl commented on the post, Week 19 by Angelique Pacheco 1 week, 6 days ago
Nice scene. It was a good transition into her memory of her first week of being in a big city. Good descriptions and dialogue. I liked that you dove more into Jewel’s background.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 1 week, 6 days ago
Thank you, Astrid.
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Cheryl commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 2 weeks ago
Thank you, Kali.
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