Thanks Srivalli – I’m glad you “got it”. Hopefully the tighter style adds a dash of menace

Thanks Christian – I quite enjoy “going dark” sometimes with my writing – I can take on a different persona!!

Thanks Ann

Thanks Pam. This little outline could lead to many red herrings and twists…

Aah – another story writer. All power to your pen

Thanks Peggy – it was a fun piece to work on!

Hi Jane – I imagined him shuffling and mumbling down the stairs when ??? It almost feels like flash-fiction to me which is why I was a bit unsure about how well it would work

Hi Thandie – yes, I took the narrator as partner but if I got even more dark it could have been a money grabbing adult child who was after the huge inheritance!! I think I’ll stop at irritated partner..

Aha – I wondered if there was too much backstory and of course several consequences to follow.. Thanks for reading my poem

This poem changes direction quite abruptly after the first stanza. Your account of the bus ride is rich in detail, which is rounded off in the final stanza with the wise reminder to us all to tread more softly and with wisdom-based caution.

Wow Jane – I bet this took some hard work to master and to make your words fit and flow. It appears effortless, which is part of your skill. Thanks for sharing this piece with us

Wonderful!! And yes, don’t we all wish these curses on such thoughtless people – they seem to be a universal pest.. Thanks for the smile Pam, and the crafty witchy olde worlde way you’ve played with words.

The Alzheimer’s Haiku is so very poignant and so very real… Ouch. Well captured and taut, both of the Haikus

Very neat ordering, Christian – of constructed items and situations, the human body and then accidents linking into acts of war. Such a fine thread, this place we call life. Thanks for reminding us of how precious our lives are…

I enjoy your tight choice of words and brevity of these four pieces but I’m not sure that they fit the Haiku formula that is taught formally with its prescribed number of syllables per line etc? Your first piece resonates with me – that shadow aspect of ourselves that makes itself seen and vanishes so easily. Thanks for sharing your work

Hi Dianne – such a simple story told with humour and affection. I’d maybe look at editing the two references to feet (lines 2 and 3). And how real the filming to be shared now and in the future as entertainment! Thanks for the smile.

I loved the “dark waves winking and flirting” and enjoyed the sense of this woman waiting on the seashore.

Thanks – often my thoughts are just as scattered…