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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 4 weeks, 1 day ago
Thanks! I want to create an overall longer story with these. I am creating with a plan this time! 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, One Last Job by Candice Black 1 month ago
Great story. Your descriptions are full of impact (no pun intended) and both add dimension to the character and the story. Very well done. 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Tempted by Lenore Butcher 1 month ago
Well done! Your use of language and the buildup of tension was great! The ending was amazing. This was so much fun and beautifully done. 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Weapons by Mara Adlem 1 month ago
Really interesting. You crammed so much character into such a small space in your story so well. Nicely done!
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Prix Fixe by nsbnina 1 month ago
Well done. Killer twist. And your descriptions and flow are beautiful. I am so hungry now! 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 1 month ago
Thank-you so much! I appreciate that.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Time Before by Peggy Rockey – Part 4 – Tempted 1 month ago
Nice job! I will now have to go back and catch up! I am thinking of doing parts of a whole story as well. I love how Star Trek Discovery has done things… there is an over-arching season question and story, but each episode is still it’s own story. I think that’s how I want to think about it…episodic story writing. I’m looking forward to seeing ho…[Read more]
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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 1 month ago
Thanks! This means I’m off to a good start! 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Oh, Brad! by Carol Marshall 1 month ago
😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 1 month ago
Hi! Thanks. I have plans for these stories. This is going to be fun!
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ChacoKid commented on the post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 1 month ago
Thanks. Truth with a twist from my new local area. 😀
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Tales of the Librarium No. 4: Bubble-gum Girl by Melissa P 1 month ago
Nicely done! That first couple of lines really places your character solidly & clearly in mind. Then you just play with her and it for the rest of the story. I loved it!
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Oh, Brad! by Carol Marshall 1 month ago
Carol, I apologize. Kim probably did things the right way. I didn’t want/mean to “correct” your work at all… I just know for me, sometimes it’s easier to explain or see – If I can show. Please take my comments in the spirit they were given- I really do love your story.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Temptation by Joy V 1 month ago
Fun story. Nicely done.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Oh, Brad! by Carol Marshall 1 month ago
Nicely done. Good descriptions and feels. My only suggestion would be to get rid of “had”. It would strengthen your story and writing instantly – making these few lines feel more immediate. It would be an easy way to fix a word could overage, if you have one, also.
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ChacoKid wrote a new post, The Devils Hole – PR Henriksen 1 month ago
   It was a lovely day on the lake-blue skies, plump clouds, and a slight breeze. Of course, pretty much any day on the lake was good. She found the spot. It wasn’t a guarded secret or anything, but no one both […]
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Happy Hour by Chris Fruge 1 month ago
Nice. Lots of tension. Lively descriptions. Good end.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Forgo Temptations by Jens Grabarske 1 month ago
Cute. Nice use of the prompt. Fun quick twist.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, Tempted by Amanda john roberts 1 month ago
Not what I expected. Nice twist.
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ChacoKid commented on the post, A SPELLING LESSON BRUCE LAISTER 1 month ago
Nicely done and great use of the prompt!
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Talk about curiosity…. We’ll done. CA
Hi! Thanks. I have plans for these stories. This is going to be fun!
I like the story of how the Devil’s Hole got its name. And I like your descriptions, especially ‘Sunshine warmed her shoulders, hugging her like she was a beloved daughter.’
Interesting that Cam didn’t panic and struggle but seemed to go along with it; makes a refreshing change, for me anyway. The part about her ‘massive collection of poor choices’ not featuring as her life flashed before her is a nice touch.
Thanks. Truth with a twist from my new local area. 😀
A lovely way to weave legend and present tragedy together. You have some wonderful descriptions that drew me in and anchored me inside the story. This was an interesting and captivating story. Well done.
Thanks! This means I’m off to a good start! 😀
Nice twist on a legend. The poetic tone adds to the atmosphere of your piece and that last paragraph is epic.
Thank-you so much! I appreciate that.
This is terrifying! I love this line: “Amazingly, Cam thought, none of her massive collection of poor choices even made the first 100 feet.” This is a great plot for flash or for longer stories. Well done 🙂
Thanks! I want to create an overall longer story with these. I am creating with a plan this time! 😀