Thanks! I want to create an overall longer story with these. I am creating with a plan this time! 😀

Great story. Your descriptions are full of impact (no pun intended) and both add dimension to the character and the story. Very well done. 😀

Well done! Your use of language and the buildup of tension was great! The ending was amazing. This was so much fun and beautifully done. 😀

Really interesting. You crammed so much character into such a small space in your story so well. Nicely done!

Well done. Killer twist. And your descriptions and flow are beautiful. I am so hungry now! 😀

Thank-you so much! I appreciate that.

Nice job! I will now have to go back and catch up! I am thinking of doing parts of a whole story as well. I love how Star Trek Discovery has done things… there is an over-arching season question and story, but each episode is still it’s own story. I think that’s how I want to think about it…episodic story writing. I’m looking forward to seeing ho…[Read more]

Thanks! This means I’m off to a good start! 😀

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Hi! Thanks. I have plans for these stories. This is going to be fun!

Thanks. Truth with a twist from my new local area. 😀

Nicely done! That first couple of lines really places your character solidly & clearly in mind. Then you just play with her and it for the rest of the story. I loved it!

Carol, I apologize. Kim probably did things the right way. I didn’t want/mean to “correct” your work at all… I just know for me, sometimes it’s easier to explain or see – If I can show. Please take my comments in the spirit they were given- I really do love your story.

Fun story. Nicely done.

Nicely done. Good descriptions and feels. My only suggestion would be to get rid of “had”. It would strengthen your story and writing instantly – making these few lines feel more immediate. It would be an easy way to fix a word could overage, if you have one, also.

Ex…
In a hurry, head bent against the rain, she had collided with the man as…[Read more]

Nice. Lots of tension. Lively descriptions. Good end.

Cute. Nice use of the prompt. Fun quick twist.

Not what I expected. Nice twist.

Nicely done and great use of the prompt!