• Hi Lisa,
    Thank you for the read and the lovely comments! I am glad that the dialogue agreed with you, as did the props.
    The tea was just an addition to the accessories, a trinket amid the several things adding to the opulence of the restaurant. Also, good that you pointed this out. Initially, I had plans to involve the waiter in some way with…[Read more]

  • Hi Kristin,
    Thank you for the read and your kind comments! I am glad that the character and her motives held ground for you. Yes, about the ex-wife part, initially when I had started writing, a reference to her was just a way to provide a glimpse into Roberts’s character. But later I thought why not make her a part of the conspiracy, hence added…[Read more]

  • Hi Del,
    Thanks for your lovely comments and the read! I am thrilled to know that you liked the conflict and the dialogue. Thanks for pointing that part about ‘Roberts’s’ I will rectify that. I am glad that you liked the title. Initially, it was ‘The Offer’. But I changed it later considering the price that a character might have to pay. Thank you…[Read more]

  • Hi Peggy,
    Thanks for dropping by and those wonderful comments! I am glad that the conflict and descriptions managed to grab your attention. Thank you for that too on adding another sensory element, will keep that in mind. Thank you so much for your lovely comments once again!

  • Hi Cheryl,
    This just keeps getting better and better! This is turning out to be such a suave, fast-paced thriller! I love how this is moving. The way you have taken real-life incidents and masterfully assimilated them in your narrative, speak tons about your storytelling skills.
    I love the characters you have created. Dom and Randall come…[Read more]

  • Hi Patty,
    It’s great to see your comments under my stories again. As always, I am really humbled by your lovely comments! I am glad that the dialogue and narrative struck a chord with you. Thank you so much for the support and for the read! Cheers! ❤️

  • Hi Kaiser,
    This was a very sweet story. It has the balmy feel to it, like that of a bedtime story one reads out to children at night. I liked the concept and the earnestness with which you have penned it. I can see that everyone has already pointed out the grammatical errors. I will just suggest one small thing. These lines, “But today, he…[Read more]

  • Thank you for sharing a snippet of your personal experience through your story! I admire people who are brave enough to do so. I always say this, as I always shy away from putting my life out there in my stories. It requires a different kind of emotional strength to do so, which I lack.
    I did not see what’s predictable about the ending. Are you…[Read more]

  • Hi Del,
    Thank you for sharing a snippet of your personal experience through your story! I admire people who are brave enough to do so. I always say this, I always shy away from putting my life out there in my stories. It requires a different kind of

  • Hi Robelle,
    That was intense! Very poignant too. I loved the images of pain you drew with your words. This part just brought a lump to my throat – ‘Tears filled her eyes. ¨I understand Constance. Thanks for everything. Can you at least tell me what they named him? Is he healthy?”‘
    Great story! Thank you for sharing!

  • Hi Ana,
    One more story, once more I am awed! Your stories are definitely not for the meek, they are for the strong willed, passionate readers. I love how free the emotions flow in your characters. I loved your MC, her monologues, a gradual delineation of her obsession for this man…so much so, that it drives her to commit murder. The weird part…[Read more]

  • Hi Patty,
    I had seen your post on Facebook earlier, about how you weren’t sure you will be able to submit this story. I also saw you mention later in a comment that you did submit it. And I am really relieved and happy to see if here. This was such a beautiful, optimistic story. I don’t know if Otto is a name of a real dog, but I could see him…[Read more]

  • Hi Peggy,
    This was such a heartwarming story! I loved how the narrator went from door to door, evaluating people. She’s got a sharp eye and an affable persona. That’s a winning combination. I loved the ending. I am guessing she managed to go on her Europe tour? A very pleasant read! Thank you for sharing!

  • Hi Del,
    This was just beautiful! There was a childlike innocence to your story…many parts made me smile as I recalled find memories from my own childhood. For me, it wasn’t my mother’s dresses, but her lipsticks that captured my attention. We lived in a duplex quarter. I believe I was 6-7. Mom had this orange shaded lipstick. Those days, it was…[Read more]

  • Hi Lisa,
    Okay, so this story brought back the headlines on the newspapers to me. Also all those breaking news flashes on TV, for obvious reasons.
    I really liked how you have handled the subject and your setting is simply perfect. I love the way this narrative moves. Your MC is very well eked. I can see the homework you have done behind this.…[Read more]

  • Hi Andrea,
    That was a powerpacked follow-up to your last story! I love how you have sequenced your events and divided your story through character perspectives. Your imagery, especially in action sequences is very engaging and one can almost see things taking place before one’s eyes .
    The story flows seamlessly.
    Just wish to bring two things…[Read more]

  • Hi Hyle,
    Thank you for the read and your lovely comments! I was a little scared while writing this story since it was about a different culture. But I am really glad that the dialogue, descriptions and story worked. It’s indeed a humbling experience.

  • Hi Hyle,
    That was an awesome follow-up story! You have a way with setting, dialogue, characterization and like everyone else pointed out – accents. I could see all of the events taking place before my eyes. Your descriptions rouse panic, concern and give that much needed adrenaline boost. I loved the end where they overpower Ripper. This was an a…[Read more]

  • Hi Jessica,
    This was an awesome read! You don’t need to hear it from me. You already have a string of appreciative comments by some of the best authors of this group. 🙂 I loved your descriptions. Especially, the way you go on describing a rain-drenched city, the romance and the longing associated to it. This was my favourite part – “The shiny, w…[Read more]

  • Hi Becky,
    Wow! This was such an engaging read! I am not into romances usually. But I could not stop reading yours. And that generous dash of humour was point on. I like the way you have characterized your MC. Her lingo, her attitude and persona – all of it comes across through the narration. I was quite interested to get a peek into her f…[Read more]

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