• Hey Ben, So glad I popped in for a read (yep time to find distractions) and of course had to see if you were back on board. Beautifully crafted. Well done.

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  • Hey Kim,
    I’ve never been referred to as an odd cupcake but I think its a great compliment (as I’ve always thought of myself as a little too normal). Interesting comment – its tough to get the balance right between purity and craft. But no doubt there is something magical when the river flows freely and pure. Hope to tap that big time this year…[Read more]

  • Hey Seyi. Glad you enjoyed the ramble and that it may help keep your future travels firmly based on terra firma (not that I’ve ever cruised – maybe it’s brilliant). Thanks for reading this and others – I am planning on a break from 12ss to focus on a novel but no doubt be back some time. Good luck with your writing in 2020 and all the best for the…[Read more]

  • Hey Rachel, as always you are way too kind. I really wanted to go out with something quite a bit more impactful than this for my last (maybe 😉 piece. That said, yes it was great to find a way to Fiji and the Tongan Cannibal King in exile. And don’t worry, sure I’ll be around and might even send you some stuff through the year (when my authorial…[Read more]

  • Horror holiday tales are the best. Unfortunately, TripAdvisor spoils things these days – flattening out our experiences so you avoid the lows a little, but also may not stumble as readily upon those amazing surprises. Anyway, thanks for reading and commenting. You probably wont read me next year. Planning to focus on other writing for a bit but no…[Read more]

  • Oh – ok – you found it…seems like you actually read this first?
    Anyway, thanks for your reading and comments – all the best for the festive season and good luck with your writing too.

  • Hey Paul – sorry for the belated response. Yeah she certainly didn’t hold back. Just a heads up – this wasn’t the final piece you read. Just the first draft. Think it got a little tighter, but dont feel obliged to hunt it down 🙂

  • Yeah I struggled (as always) for a title but went with a single word (as I like to do) that seemed the most apt…I believe it is rare for one to feel fully at ease in life – but when you do – people, places, experiences – cherish them and live in the moment. Then get ready for the next shift. I’m glad you enjoyed the read – thank you for commenting.

  • Hey Charles – thanks for reading – Yeah nah never been on a cruise and cant see it until I go to the Antarctic (coz its the only option). Have hired a campervan and ended up stuck in a flooded river (but that’s for another story!) Lots of detail to make up for a rudderless plot! Glad you enjoyed it tho. Cheers Adam

  • “Woven on the loom of life” – I love that. Thankyou. For me it’s what storytelling is, riffing of experiences we know (or know of) and can then apply imagination. I’m glad it came together for you and you enjoyed it as to be honest, it was a bit of a dogs breakfast earlier in the week. Thanks for reading and commenting. Cheers Adam

  • Yeah I struggled with a single minded story so kind of ended up being a bit of blend, working hardest to keep the thread and voice consistent. Was fun to write (and relive the moment in the Fijian hills where we stumbled in our hire car on this historic site – was something that really confronted us around how the world has changed. Hope the…[Read more]

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  • Hey Rachel, out of pressure comes diamonds. Lovely story with your trademark twist executed impeccably again. The last paragraph of the first scene – perfect. And you know me – I’d love to see and feel and smell a little more of what is going on – just like that moment and a little less dialogue. Like when you take us right in close to the bindi…[Read more]

  • Hey Scott, that’s some recollection – the image of the shoes and broken glass is so powerful. You’re parents must have had some kind of night waiting. I did wonder if the piece could be strengthened by a few adjustments…I’d love to be thrown right into the concert experience to create some kind of energy and tension straight up in the work. I…[Read more]

  • As the husband of a librarian I had to laugh. I loved that she was part caricature, part super hero. You capture the atmosphere of the library so well – and I love that the opening sentence, long and meandering reflects so nicely its esteemed content. Well done. A fun read well crafted.

  • Great read Bob and feels fresh. I don’t think I’ve ever read a story of yours without laughing out loud. The reveal is great. You capture the two guys at the bar moment so clearly (and yep Bushmills is king!). Somehow I could feel the werewolf coming on quite early – not sure how you tweak it a little to keep that reveal back a little. If you…[Read more]

  • We sit at a trestle table on plastic chairs in the school hall alongside with half-familiar parents. Aged doppelgangers of kids we know really well and love.

    Guess it’s Millie’s Mum at the end?

    He’s the split […]

    • Adam, your tale is so relate-able; from sitting around the event at the school, packing for a vacation you wouldn’t normally plan, to feeling like an old timer on a ship full of millennials. Not my type of vacation, for sure (even though we’re planning an Alaskan Cruise for next summer, our first cruise ever). A great story, which I enjoyed thoroughly. Thanks

      • Yeah I struggled with a single minded story so kind of ended up being a bit of blend, working hardest to keep the thread and voice consistent. Was fun to write (and relive the moment in the Fijian hills where we stumbled in our hire car on this historic site – was something that really confronted us around how the world has changed. Hope the Alaskan cruise is amazing – I want to head to Antarctica in 2021 – have never been on a cruise (apart from an overnight ferry between Ireland and France sleeping under a bench!). Thanks for reading.

    • Adam,
      This story has such texture. It’s feel woven on the loom of your life. Wonderful bits of melancholy and understanding strewn about a landscape where the sun is setting.
      I enjoyed this immensely.
      Thanks for sharing.

      • “Woven on the loom of life” – I love that. Thankyou. For me it’s what storytelling is, riffing of experiences we know (or know of) and can then apply imagination. I’m glad it came together for you and you enjoyed it as to be honest, it was a bit of a dogs breakfast earlier in the week. Thanks for reading and commenting. Cheers Adam

    • Adam lots of imagery that has a Byzantine quality. So much detail. I enjoyed your description about the cruise ship experience. I hope that wasn’t your experience because it sounds dreadful at least if one is over 50 years old. Once again a beautifully detailed story – I enjoyed it Amigo.

      • Hey Charles – thanks for reading – Yeah nah never been on a cruise and cant see it until I go to the Antarctic (coz its the only option). Have hired a campervan and ended up stuck in a flooded river (but that’s for another story!) Lots of detail to make up for a rudderless plot! Glad you enjoyed it tho. Cheers Adam

    • Hi Adam. ‘Discomforting’ is a very good title for this short story as that feeling came through strongly. All of it was well written, as usual, but my favourite part was early on – the not-quite-knowing the other parents’ names, the irritation with ‘the woman’s’ inane comments – been there/done that, your observation is spot on and very relatable! I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, thanks for sharing.

      • Yeah I struggled (as always) for a title but went with a single word (as I like to do) that seemed the most apt…I believe it is rare for one to feel fully at ease in life – but when you do – people, places, experiences – cherish them and live in the moment. Then get ready for the next shift. I’m glad you enjoyed the read – thank you for commenting.

    • Hi Adam,
      This story reminds me of my Honeymoon! lol We went to St Lucia and although it was, yes tropical as the brochure promised I felt as if I needed more vaccinations than I already had. The week couldn’t end quick enough. On our tenth anniversary, Kevin and I got to talking about the day we got married and the Honeymoon. At the time of our travels, we told each other what fun we had.

      Ten years later both of us finally admitted St. Lucia is a place best kept to the natives.

      You piled each sentence perfectly to set up the next sentence. I felt as if I were there going through the moments. I enjoyed the buildup to the hostel. I laughed out loud when I read the ending. Great stuff!

      Happy Holidays and Happy New Year, I hope I’ll read ya in 2020.
      Maria

      • Horror holiday tales are the best. Unfortunately, TripAdvisor spoils things these days – flattening out our experiences so you avoid the lows a little, but also may not stumble as readily upon those amazing surprises. Anyway, thanks for reading and commenting. You probably wont read me next year. Planning to focus on other writing for a bit but no doubt will be back one day (might even pay to keep my membership just so I can dip in if I need inspiration!) Take care
        Adam

    • I loved this! (Sorry, but I honestly can’t find fault!) Your prose sings, as always, and I too found many relatable and laugh-out-loud moments in this. (Especially since I HAVE been on cruises and your description is dead on!) And I’m so happy that you finally worked that cannibalistic Tongan king into one of your pieces. Man, I’m going to miss your writing on here, so this is definitely bitter-sweet. Can’t wait to read your novel one day. Please stay in touch! Cheers from South Africa! – Rachel

      • Hey Rachel, as always you are way too kind. I really wanted to go out with something quite a bit more impactful than this for my last (maybe 😉 piece. That said, yes it was great to find a way to Fiji and the Tongan Cannibal King in exile. And don’t worry, sure I’ll be around and might even send you some stuff through the year (when my authorial confidence needs a boost!). Coz I know where to find you. You keep writing up a storm – you’ve got a great touch and am sure you will unlock your “even more awesomer” as you edit harder, and search for the very best word you can find each time. Thanks for everything in this community – knowing you (and your Mum) love the work has been really important to me. Chat online sometime soon and between now and then have a merry Christmas (if that’s your thing) and a cracking 2020. Adam

    • Eish Adam, you had my wife rushing to the study to find out why I was laughing out loud and actually applauding at the screen 😀And this was only at “Aged doppelgangers of kids we know really well and love” ! Brilliant writing, wonderful contrast between where we started out and where we ended up. Your main character’s inner monologue is prize winning. I have been battling my wife and kids for decades as they have tried to convince me to go on random cruise after random cruise. I think your story (with your permission) will put that idea to bed for good. Some gremlins sneaked in and left the word “with” in the opening sentence and changed the word “bass” to “base” in the sentence that begins “The Captain circulates…..” Otherwise it’s perfect. Well done and all the best for the end of the year, hope to continue reading from you in 2020. Regards, Seyi

      • Hey Seyi. Glad you enjoyed the ramble and that it may help keep your future travels firmly based on terra firma (not that I’ve ever cruised – maybe it’s brilliant). Thanks for reading this and others – I am planning on a break from 12ss to focus on a novel but no doubt be back some time. Good luck with your writing in 2020 and all the best for the festive season. Adam

        • Seyi replied 2 months ago

          Hi again Adam and I will miss your writing on this site but will be looking forward to your novel. All the best, enjoy the holidays and wish you an awesome new year. Regards, Seyi

    • Kim replied 2 months ago

      Hi Adam

      saw your fb post – will be sad to miss your writing next year but I totally get it – so if you do intend to focus on that book and really WRITE – then I wish you the very best in your endeavor. And if you do happen to perchance miss the discipline of writing…well, you know where to find the rest of us die-hards.

      you are an odd cupcake – if you dont mind me saying – when you struggle the most with a prompt or put in the least amount of effort your writing seems to come alive to me , like in this piece, but when you rework it and rework it – it feels flat and ‘overcooked’.
      Hope you harness that creative freestyle that seems to work best for you when writing next year .

      I loved this story – rich in flavour and characterization – and I particularly liked the passive-rebelliousness of the middle-aged couple !

      All the best, Kim

    • Adam replied 2 months ago

      Hey Kim,
      I’ve never been referred to as an odd cupcake but I think its a great compliment (as I’ve always thought of myself as a little too normal). Interesting comment – its tough to get the balance right between purity and craft. But no doubt there is something magical when the river flows freely and pure. Hope to tap that big time this year (and then tighten a little 😉
      Glad you enjoyed this piece – you are right – parts of it flowed but others were a little harder to extract. Guess that’s the process oftentimes.
      And yes am sure i’ll be around – will pay just to keep the connections alive and so I can pop in and have a read if nothing else!
      Take care and happy new year. Adam

  • Yeah its funny isn’t it. Gestures can be intersting things to explore in writing – they can say a lot (or be overused I guess! Haha). Thanks for reading and commenting.

  • Thanks Peggy – glad it came together and went up a notch in its most recent draft. As always, thanks for your support and feedback.

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