• Hi Debbie, thank you so much for reading and your lovely comments. This poem began its formation during a late afternoon walk as I watched a gorgeous cloud above me. And then as I walked I watched it change, and seem to move further away from me, hence the beginning of my poem:)

  • Hi Limor, thank you for stopping by and your kind comments. I am glad it spoke to you. Could definitely be trying to connect to or reach out to lost loved ones:)

  • Hi Angelique, what a magical web you weave. I was transported to another place, full of beauty, wonder and fairytales. Well done:) So beautiful.

  • Thank you Angelique, I appreciate you reading and your lovely comment:)

  • Jane commented on the post, Illusive by Jane Bradshaw 1 week ago

    Hi Mark, thanks for reading and you kind comments:) Glad you enjoyed my simple poem:)

  • Hi Nam, thanks for reading and your feedback:)

  • Fabulous, it looks so much better now:)

  • Hi Debbie, I am not sure why but for some reason I want to say – retract and run like hell. I really enjoyed your poem, some fantastic lines within. This poor person is like a washing machine in full cycle, toss – turn – toss – turn – what to do??
    Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Hi Chloe, a lovely poem filled with introspection. I find I question myself all the time, even about the smallest things:) This poem shows one’s trepidation at the thought of giving your life to another. It is certainly scary, but can also be very rewarding. I agree with lelfring, you need to remove an it from this line
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  • Hi Naina, I love the mystery in your poem. I am left wondering if you are speaking about God or someone a man. But the enigma of it is just as nice. You have some lovely imagery within your words as well:) Thanks for sharing.

  • Ah yes the joys of being a woman. I often think it is so unfair, one thing after the other, hormones always running rampant. I am hopeful that when peri-menopause subsides and the real menopause has set in that life might become a little more pleasant:) You have captured it all so well. Although I am lucky enough to say that even though I get hot…[Read more]

  • Hi Martin, I enjoyed your poem, just the way it is. But then I am a lover of free verse, not having to follow rules and stipulations (hence why I find the sonnet so darn hard). As others have said your picture was perfect for this poem, the eyes definitely have it. I wonder what ever became of the lady with these eyes? Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Hi Angelique, very clever indeed. I liked the way this poem showed the way she appeared the world – and then the way she felt inside. I often say to others that we have no idea what is going on inside peoples lives – so try to be kind. This encapsulates that truth. Really well done. Thanks for sharing.

  • Hi Cinthia, enigmatic for sure. I cannot quite work it out, at first I thought you were writing of God, then I thought of a partner, but then I thought – I have no idea:) Really well done, some lovely word choice and I like the way you had shorter and longer lines throughout – catches ones attention.

  • Hi Sandy, a great take on the prompt. You are so right, the English language is darn right confusing. As a school teacher I remember trying to teach spelling rules, i before e except after c oh and these few exceptions…… and the list goes on. How on earth do children learn to write and read the language. It is beyond me. You have captured this…[Read more]

  • Hi Nam, an interesting take on the prompt. I like how you reused the ending words in each verse. I assume this poem has three verses and that they all got put together when you posted it. Mine did the same. I then went back in and edited it and put a full stop between each verse to stop it going together. You might want to try this as then your…[Read more]

  • Hi Katharine, thank you for reading and for your kind feedback. I like it when a poem can have many meanings. I kind of like your take on it:) Thanks.

  • Hi Katharine. Oh, how clever are you:) I have wanted to write a good Reverso poem for quite a long time now, but I have not managed it yet. They are one of the hardest poems to write, in my humble opinion. This one is fabulous. I cannot decide if I prefer it up or down:) Both are great. Well done.

  • LOL, the Jane red pen:) Yes, definitely a very good result. It was certainly fun:)

  • Hi Ben, thank you for reading and your kind feedback. I am so glad you enjoyed it.

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