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Honey Mustard wrote a new post, Lou's Little Wild God by Honey Mustard 3 hours, 14 minutes ago
The little wild god on her shoulder was annoying the crap out of her. There he was, yapping into her ear, about the blonde woman ahead of them in the queue boarding the aeroplane. Her spirits will call you, the […]
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Honey Mustard wrote a new post, Bandwidth, Buttons and Burn by Honey Mustard 16 hours, 5 minutes ago
Bandwidth, Buttons and Burn by Honey Mustard
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Having dropped Peony at her digs in Mowbray, Michael returned home to find Alma at the dinner table in the kitchen, answering emails on her laptop. Emma-Leigh was […]
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I am getting into this story and find myself wondering what holds Alma to Michael. The dialogue is masterful. Tight and tense. I enjoy how Alma actually controls the scene even though it is written from Michael’s POV.
These sentences were unique and I loved them as a reader:
-He poured himself another glass of wine, as Alma had annexed his earlier one.
-the whole paragraph where Michael compares his wife’s aging to the house’s aging! OMG. Fantastic.
Very curious about this family.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Trouble with Al by SM Prasad 3 days, 2 hours ago
Hi Sudha. No I’ve not seen that. I was hooked on Designated Survivor for the last few weeks, and am now trying to keep myself away from the remote so that I can produce instead of consume. 🙂 But I’ll go look for Dead to Me once the next 10 days have been managed. (The big suspense is whether I’m going to be able to hold down my day job, meet…[Read more]
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 3 days, 2 hours ago
Oh Elizabeth, I’m so grateful for these comments from an expert! Yes, I was a bit iffy about putting those diagnostic words in the mouth of the teacher/school psych – don’t have knowledge of what is permitted. And I’m so glad you confirmed this for me – given that poor Iris, well-intentioned as she might be, has done this now to two hot-shot…[Read more]
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Trouble with Al by SM Prasad 4 days, 16 hours ago
Hi Sudha,
Ah! now things that happened in the previous scenes are starting to click into place. I think this will have happened somewhere after the lipstick analysis and the boxing scene. And so it seems Al is working with the FBI but he’s also trying to dodge them, burner phone and all – and I’m still suspicious about him & Camille – that…[Read more] -
Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 4 days, 16 hours ago
Jan, you made me smile with this delightful character analysis of Alma. Yes, I’ll definitely take her there – I like what you want for her. Maybe I should even make Alma a bit frightened of her own potency. Maybe that is why she keeps herself on such a tight leash. I think you’ve just given me the character flaw I’ve been looking for all the…[Read more]
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 4 days, 16 hours ago
Yes, Leona! Indeed! I should put that in. The word limit got the better of me, and I’m a bit insecure about overwriting, but you’re right – the point of the meeting must be clearer. Thanks so much – I value your input.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 4 days, 16 hours ago
Thank you Sudha, I love your strong reactions against Michael. It gives me ideas for the next time he features.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 4 days, 16 hours ago
Thank you, Maria, I like being challenged by comments. I think there is something to be said for not always have a blow-up kind of tension, but rather a slow, subdued burn. The latter might hurt as much. That said, the reader’s opinions and wants matter, and I will give it some thought.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, The Parent-Teacher Meeting by Honey Mustard 4 days, 16 hours ago
Thank you Michael, these are kind comments, and I get what you say about finishing a book. I think I might be juggling two story lines that don’t fit. Time will tell.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, La Rage – Scene 7 Crème Brûlée by Jan 4 days, 16 hours ago
Hi Jan, hope you’re doing well.
This scene pulled up a lot of compelling themes of its own, beyond the ones you’ve already established in the previous scenes. Here the LGBTQ issues seem to be coming to the fore much more than in the relationship with Dan and Jamie, and for me that raised some questions:
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Robben Island* by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you, Wanda! I appreciate your comments.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Robben Island* by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thanks so much Elizabeth. Your comments mean a lot to me.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Robben Island* by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you for coming by, reading and commenting, Jane.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Robben Island* by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
No need for apologies, Kim. It’s taking me very long to get around to everyone too. Work, you know. And life.
I must say I am amazed at how many different things people noticed in this story. I just woke up one Saturday and the whole thing was sitting there in my head, waiting to be committed to the page. Such a strange experience. -
Honey Mustard commented on the post, Onion by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Yes, Amanda, you’re right, and this was certainly not my finest moment. It needs some more work before it is presentable… Thank you for your frank assessment.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Onion by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you, Jane!
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Onion by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you, Kim, for coming by and commenting!
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Onion by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you Christian, for coming by and commenting.
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Honey Mustard commented on the post, Onion by Honey Mustard 5 days, 2 hours ago
Thank you, Symphony. Much appreciated!
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Whoa, HM, this was surreal. I loved it. The little wild god is such and interesting character. Lou seems to have her own amazing characteristics as well. Such a fun story. Thanks for sharing and making my day. 🙂