The Aftermath (Scene 49, Complication) by R.L. Nel

  • : Creative Non-Fiction
  • : Some swearing
  • : These scenes are not written in chronological order
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Riana N
4 months ago

Hi Rachel. This was a good scene. I do not know any law lingo, so I can’t really comment much on that aspect, but I felt like you portrayed the emotional element of all of this stunningly. I felt like I could understand Zelda’s emotions even though I’ve never been in such a position. You don’t shy away from showing the emotional load of your story, and I think that is very brave and really well written. You also somehow manage to weave in the ray of hope throughout, so very well done, I have been so touched by the few scenes of yours I have read!

David
5 months ago

Hi, Rachel-
I made the mistake of reading this scene after scene 50. Bummer.
Zelda was right to doubt the system after what she’d been through. But as I think I mentioned before, there really is no such thing as an open-and-shut case. Especially where a jury is involved, the results can turn on a small thing that no one else even thought was relevant.
It almost sounds like Zelda is mad at Alberto. That’s hard to do even when justified. If someone asked her, she might even deny it. The simple statement is perfect.
Good scene, and much easier to take knowing what I know already. 🙂