Reflections of Love, What I Wish I Said by Melanie Delaney

Reflections of Love, What I Wish I Said by Melanie Delaney # Kal carefully closed the oven, catching a glimpse of his bare feet and stripped pyjama bottom clad legs in the heavy, black glass door. He asked Alexa to set a timer for a further five minutes and turned on the laptop that sat...

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Ismael
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1 month ago

Hi Melanie. Great use of the prompt here. Well done, but I have a question? Is this right?

 Dan looked up and caught him staring, he smiled and waved. Beckoning Dan to come outside.

I though Dan was already outside. And it might help to have a comma between these sentences. 🙂

Ismael
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1 month ago
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LOL Yay! 😀

Elaine Dodge
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1 month ago

Neatly done, Melanie. Left me wishing I a) had ingredients for cake and b) my diet allowed it.

Rebecca J Robbins
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1 month ago

Adorable story! Truly adorable. Thank you for sharing your creativity and story with us all. The only piece of logic that I struggled with is that he had to go to a zoom call, but still had time for the cake and icing and asking out. with a minor shuffle of language and this becomes a non-issue. Loved it. Well, written and nice twist about the grandmother artist! Lovely.

Kim
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Kim
1 month ago

Aawww such a feel good romance.
Send me one of them handy Aussies pleez, I also need some building work done.. 😉😊

Kim
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Kim
1 month ago
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🤣🤣🤣🤣 both….and they mustnt know about each other!! 😁😄

Yea…been rough few months didnt write. But have been keeping up with my poetry…that’s been my lifeline tbh…

Kim
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Kim
1 month ago
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Georgiana Nelsen
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1 month ago

Hi Melanie!
What a fun story! Great characters and so nice to read a realistic work from home story. Wonderful reasons to the prompt and seamless writing!