Opposites Attract by Deryn Graham

No rhyming here...

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Glen Benison
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1 month ago

Hi Deryn, this is great .I really like the brevity and your talent in getting the point across very succinctly. This line is a keeper for sure: ‘Inside but outside of each other’s worlds’

Marcena
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1 month ago

Hello Deryn,
Clever use of the prompt. Well done. I love the line with “life’s autumn season.”

Nsbnina
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1 month ago

Clever response to the prompt and cleverer you. Wonderful Message in those last two lines!

Kat
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Kat
1 month ago

I love the imagery that life’s autumn season brings for me. My personal view is that all relationships should be both ‘inside but outside’ of each other – sometimes individuality is ceded (voluntarily, but not always) – and as we grow older and wiser in our own skins we feel more confident to remain ourselves and maintain our individuality: after all, it’s what makes us interesting and attractive to others! Thank you for this.

EDamonMitchell
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1 month ago

I love your interpretation of the prompt! Who woulda thunk, right? And now, to comment on the content: Though I have been married 28 years now, I feel this is where my husband and I are now–very comfortable in our own skin, and thankful for the relationship carved out by two very, very different people. I love the honesty, the sincerity of this work. Nicely done.

Lauren Benere-Forder
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1 month ago

I like your interpretation of the prompt! I wish I had thought of this, haha! Thank you for sharing.

Hardly Haiku
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1 month ago

Great poem and a different use of the prompt.

Sharon Hancock
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1 month ago

Nice unique take on the prompt. It was well written and to the point. Thanks for sharing.

C Alexis
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1 month ago

Hi
Your non-rhyming poem is like a jazz piece full of dissident notes accompanied by unusual rhythms.

Christian Donovan
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1 month ago

Hi Deryn. I really really like this – both from the point of view of a poem and also because I appreciate the sentiments you portray.

Fantastic last two lines: We have discovered a space where we can be ourselves / Inside but outside of each other’s worlds. Thank you for sharing.

Poem Crush
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1 month ago

An interesting take on the prompt, about the last line
What does it mean to be “inside but outside of each other’s worlds” ?

maria delaney
1 month ago

Opposites do attract.

We are always looking for what we are, NOT. Why is that?

This piece gives a great outlook on all those couples that wonder how they found one another when they have nothing in common.

Great job!

Jane
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1 month ago

Hi Deryn, love it:) Your interpretation of the prompt (without actually having to make your poem rhyme) is very well done. Short and sweet- my take on it is that you are saying this relationship shouldn’t really work but it does:) Well done and thanks for sharing.

Pam Muller
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1 month ago

Nice one Deryn. Not rhyming but a good poem. Thanks for sharing.

AnnKleinn2019
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1 month ago

Opposites and no rhyming – an irregular combination that tells it as it is. Love it