Mildred by Sandy Menarek

The pen shook as he tried to write his name. It reminded him of the day he signed a card he made for his second-grade teacher, Mildred Thatcher, and how carefully he wrote it.  He was in love.  The knock on the door brought him back to the present.

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Delrae Goodburn Lurie

What a lovely story. My curiosity about Mildred was aroused from the start. Great descriptive lines ” spokes on a wheel” and “sad racoon eyes”. Well-done.

ScottHeile
1 year ago

What a touching story. I like that you included characters who were likable, but also that you added some who weren’t. It makes the story more real.
I felt that the dialogue worked well, and was mixed in a good proportion to the narrative.

I like how you touched on the idea that George was very alone in the rehab center. Sure there were people like Jodie who seemed to care well for him, but he was away from everyone and everything he ever knew, including his beloved dog, which seemed to be a huge barrier for his recovery. Something as simple as a pet can do wonders.

The only thing I think might be addressed is the use of the name Mildred for both the dog and the second grade teacher. I feel like there was some kind of connection between the two, (maybe he liked the teacher so much that he named his dog after her,) but it wasn’t completely clear to me. (That might just be me totally missing it, however.) Something to look at, perhaps.

Great story, Sandy.

Tapan Mozumdar
1 year ago

It’s good story about kindness and complete in its own right. Just that the prompt didn’t seem much in use. Or, may be I didn’t get the context.

gglotzer
11 months ago

This was a very sweet story. I liked George. I did find it interesting that he named his dog after his second grade teacher. Personally, I have no idea what my second grade teacher’s first name was. I did find it a little funny that the grandson was the first to ask who Mildred was. But that’s almost not worth mentioning. Nice job.