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  • “Did you ever think that as a child you’d end up searching through a dumpster in Hell with your buddy, Vinny?” He stated this as they sorted through a plethora of used tissues, paper cups, and other discarded w […]

  • Megan – Thanks for sharing your August submission and interesting take on the prompt. I am unsure I have ever heard of or read feminist sci-fi before but it caught my attention. Could see you expanding on this and putting some more detail into it! Also I hope the MC dad is okay! Feel free to critique mine! Thanks! – Matt

  • Charles – well done once again. I don’t know whether to laugh or cry. Easy to follow and funny and then it his you with some repercussions and loss of innocence. Always a joy to read! Thanks for sharing! I agree with Amrita – its time for you to get all this stories in one collection! – Matt

  • Peggy! Great feedback and I will do that immediately! Glad you enjoyed the story and I can’t thank you enough for your time! I went back on forth on the characters in this one for a while and edited all the way up to the moment I submitted, but I’m glad to hear some folks enjoyed it. Mark is definitely a very…colorful guy hahah thanks for reading! – Matt

  • Anne! Thank you so much for taking the time to read my stories not once but twice! It means the world to me – time is precious so thank you for giving me some of yours. Appreciate the feedback and glad you enjoyed! I am still working very hard on my grammar etc – thanks! – Matt

  • Sudha – awesome story and easy to follow! Love the perspective and take on this prompt! Thanks for sharing your life experiences. Feel free to critique mine, I’d love to get your feedback on it! – Matt

  • Joe – You have kept me reading through numerous updates to this story. I was hooked when you first posted it because I lived in Nashville for a while so it was fun and easy to connect with the story – and imagine what a zombie/killer teddy bear outbreak might look like there. Also really enjoyed the night of the living dead/return of the living…[Read more]

  • Yo Charlie! Incredible again. Always putting a smile on my face. I think I have said it before but I lived some of my formative years in LA so I always love to read about your take on it and think on my good times there with my wife when we were in our 20s doing stupid shit together. Well written, funny and easy to follow as always! Thanks, man! – Matt

  • Ray – Awesome story! Can’t wait to see where it goes! I agree with Patty and Cecile – great detail in short sentences and easy to follow. Well done – makes me want to jump in and help our MC take down Magron! – Matt

  • Ray – Thanks! I wrestled with this one for a few days towards the end. I really didn’t want it to be that obvious and almost changed the whole thing numerous times. Thought the ending was too easy and everyone would have told it was subpar. Really appreciate it you honestly didn’t see it coming! And yes, I am absolutely awful at proofreading hah…[Read more]

  • Charles – Thanks so much for continuing to read. Wanted to give Greg a rest this month and honestly really didn’t like where this was going. But, I wanted to give this storyline a good try. I was editing it up until the morning I posted it! Appreciate it, I absolutely suck at proofreading – no matter what I try haha. Going to try and get my next s…[Read more]

  • “And their time had come to an end. Star crossed lovers. The old house remained. Undisturbed. For now.” She closed the book as applause erupted through the auditorium. She stood up, holding her best-selling nov […]

    • Love this twist Matt. Can’t believe I didn’t see it coming, but I didn’t. Check with a little Grammerly there. Things like possesives and such. Couple of spots ed might work better than ing. Still good stuff. Well done Ray

      • Ray – Thanks! I wrestled with this one for a few days towards the end. I really didn’t want it to be that obvious and almost changed the whole thing numerous times. Thought the ending was too easy and everyone would have told it was subpar. Really appreciate it you honestly didn’t see it coming! And yes, I am absolutely awful at proofreading haha I am working on it to my best ability, please keep the feedback coming! Thank you for your time! – Matt

    • Well, it’s that time again and I had to drop in and read your latest. I’m absolutely stoked that you are continuing your ghost story. This new chapter flowed well and was fun to read. There were a few minor edits for example – Mike’s age being written out as forty as opposed to 40. But other than that I think you’ve got a great storyline that deserves another episode or two. Bottom line 👍👍

      • Charles – Thanks so much for continuing to read. Wanted to give Greg a rest this month and honestly really didn’t like where this was going. But, I wanted to give this storyline a good try. I was editing it up until the morning I posted it! Appreciate it, I absolutely suck at proofreading – no matter what I try haha. Going to try and get my next story done earlier in the next month and actually print it out and read it that way to see if it helps. Always appreciate you checking in, reading and commenting your feedback! Thanks! – Matt

    • Oh I love it! This was great. Wonderful story/idea, great characterisation. Dialogue perfect, and I wasn’t expecting there was a “ghost writer”! I really love this line: Mike shot some more finger guns as he backed out of the board room. As I can really picture that character as someone like Mathew McConaughey. I think this is the second story I have read of yours now, and I’ve enjoyed them both. There was some minor spelling issues, but they were really minor. Great job!

      • Anne! Thank you so much for taking the time to read my stories not once but twice! It means the world to me – time is precious so thank you for giving me some of yours. Appreciate the feedback and glad you enjoyed! I am still working very hard on my grammar etc – thanks! – Matt

    • What a fun read! I didn’t realize this was a continuation of an earlier story, it stood alone just fine on it’s own. The pace of the story is excellent, the excitement from all the fame Marilyn received during the book tour was palpable, Mike the agent seemed a little over zealous, but you wrote him so well I could see him in my mind, shooting his finger guns; and while I never saw the twist at the end, the surprise was awesome as the ghostwriter came on the scene and took over the story! Well done.
      One of the best editing tips I’ve found is to either read the story out loud to yourself, or if you use Word to have it read aloud – you’ll hear the errors quicker then you’ll see them and I find it works a charm!
      Nice work, Matt. I’ll be on the lookout for your work in future.

      • Peggy! Great feedback and I will do that immediately! Glad you enjoyed the story and I can’t thank you enough for your time! I went back on forth on the characters in this one for a while and edited all the way up to the moment I submitted, but I’m glad to hear some folks enjoyed it. Mark is definitely a very…colorful guy hahah thanks for reading! – Matt

    • Hi Matt,
      I loved the tension of the book tour, the frenetic pace, and the many pressures. Do we have an idea as to why Mark is so intense? Is it just the prospect of so much money to be made?
      Is the reason that Gina and other women his on Marilynn because Dave, the “ghostwriter” writes the book from the POV of a romantic man?
      Is Marilynn bothered by the fact that Dave does all the writing but she gets all the credit?
      At the end, it seemed as if Dave possessed her body before the writing happened. I saw below that this story is one of a series so I’m intrigued with where you will go with this. An enjoyable read

    • Hi Matt,
      A very enjoyable story. Lots of great descriptions and some interesting characters with creepy Gina and OTT Mike. Glad I won’t ever be a best selling author, having to put up with that kind of crap. For some reason I feel like Marilynn might be getting her self into trouble here, letting Dave into her body, perhaps he doesn’t intend to give it back…
      In any case it was a great story and continuation.

      A few small editing suggestions:
      “Hate to cut it short but your do back in New York in the morning. – due back
      “I am Gina. I’ve read this book hundred times. – I’m Gina. I’ve read this book a hundred times.
      “I do anything for you, – I’d do anything
      Go for it, Mike.” Trying not to come of unappreciative. – Go for it Mike,” she said, trying not to come off unappreciative.
      Her heart skipped a beat and sweat seem to start to run down every crevice of her body. – and sweat began to ooze from every crevice of her body.
      “That’s. That’s. Only gives me a few weeks – “That… that… only gives me a few weeks
      “Could be worst?  – worse
      Marilynn’s economy rental car pulled up the entrance gates and she stared up to the sprawling – pulled up to the entrance gates, and she stared up at the sprawling
      looking out the window onto the blackness of the night sky – into the blackness
      A plumb of smoke erupted  – plume

      I would also suggest you put a few more contractions into the speech within your story.

      Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • Carol – Thanks for sharing your June submission! Incredible take on the prompt! Loved the ending and so happy you made the Groundhog Day reference – the entire time I was reading I wanted the MC to say it! So satisfying. Although now it seems obvious, for whatever reason the ending was still a great twist. Dialogue moved well and the pace was easy…[Read more]

  • Joanna – thanks for sharing your June submission. Great take on the prompt – I almost did a story on a MC who got pulled over twice in one night so this was fun to read! All in all great story, Dialogue dragged a little but the pace kept it moving, feel like we can get some more detail in there, but I could be way off because it kept my attention.…[Read more]

  • Anne – Wow. Incredible take on the prompt. I could have kept reading this for however long it needed to go. Will there be more? Great pace and easy to follow. Definitely disturbing, but not far off from what we could be in for. Descriptions were on point, wasn’t sure if the MC was a boy or girl, however I am unsure if that even matters. This is a…[Read more]

  • Anne – please continue to critique my work – I really appreciate it. I have absolutely zero training or background in storytelling – just kinda shooting from the hip and hoping the story is simple, fun, and sticky. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment. – Matt

  • DUDE. This was amazing. I love that it dawned on me as I was reading and hit me like 3 sentences later. SO fucking smart. Incredible take on the prompt man! Read it twice. Awesome! Feel free to critique mine, however I am now ashamed because I feel like mines not nearly as good! Thanks for sharing! – Matt

  • 3 parts in! Thanks for sharing! Very graphic but it works. How far does it go? – Matt

  • About to read your June submission – but had to come back and get caught up – graphic. Let’s see what June brings. -Matt

  • Charles – FUCKING SPAGHETTI! Haha I’ve been there, man. Also love the the Rolling Rock reference (I’ve been there too). Always make me laugh and another great story. Thanks for sharing, sir. – Matt

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