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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 19 by T. Weeks 1 day, 23 hours ago
Thank you
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 19 by T. Weeks 1 day, 23 hours ago
Thank you. Yes he was behind her.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 19 by T. Weeks 1 day, 23 hours ago
Thank you
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Maggie by Sandy Menarek 1 day, 23 hours ago
Oh boy, I can imagine how she feels having to read through legal papers. For me that would be like taking sleeping pills. Josh and Maggie are so blunt, I got chills as I was reading. Great ending. I’m curious about these people at the diner and what kind of relationship does Josh have with them? Who are they?
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Maggie by Sandy Menarek 2 days ago
How interesting, two wills. I wonder why her mom made two and if they are both valid? I like that you give information to let the reader know how small the Town is, such as her neighbors already knowing she shared a sundae and Maggie already knowing the attorney that Josh recommended.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 2 days, 1 hour ago
Great learning about Eira. Her ability is very cool, the good and the bad. I can’t blame her for wanting to hide it. In you second section I got a little lost at the beginning of it but I figured it out. I felt like maybe I needed something to let me know that it was several years before.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, The Pumpkin Murders – Scene 19 – by Astrid Blume 2 days, 1 hour ago
Awesome flashback of when he was a child and learning about his relationship with his dad. Very clear and concise. Seems like Sophie came at just the right time, everyone needs a therapist like that😍 I’m still wondering was the grocer telling the truth because if so their must be more killers and since their near Cinnamon park they should see some…[Read more]
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Magical Captives by Christy Kunin 2 days, 1 hour ago
This scene written very well, very easy to understand. I liked how Mrak checked off his plan, as they were completed. It made it easier for the me to follow. I’m upset that kidnapping the nix was so easy. Warren and Shandy got took, smh. Warren fought a little bit but got his head twisted.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, You Can Do It! By Cheryl Schneider 2 days, 1 hour ago
She defiantly didn’t prepare for any stray cheetahs
Did you mean defiantly or diffinitly?It was great reading about how Seona met Baxter. Now I understand why she never knew his real name. He wouldn’t talk to her, Why is that? How did he know to go to her house? I also loved the dialogue between Seona and the street cat Maxie. It would also h…[Read more]
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, The Pumpkin Murders – Scene 18 – by Astrid Blume 2 days, 1 hour ago
Great dialogue, nice flow, easy to follow and visualize. Sage better be grateful to Spalding, it actually seems like in this scene he was more receptive towards him instead of brushing him off like in the first few scenes. I’m glad they have a good plan in place, I can’t wait to see how it goes.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, 19. Magical Secrets by Christy Kunin 2 days, 1 hour ago
I really enjoyed reading this scene. I wonder what Warren’s story is. What was in the vails? I love that they both went to the office to complain about each other.
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Tuesday Weeks wrote a new post, A king must pay his debts: scene 19 by T. Weeks 6 days, 22 hours ago
Raygar awoke startled, he felt as if his brain was bouncing inside of his skull, in an up and down motion. The sun was shining so bright he couldn’t open his eyes, so he kept them shut and then began squinting […]
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Tuesday Weeks wrote a new post, A king must pay his debts: scene 18 by T. Weeks 1 week, 6 days ago
Raygar has finally awakened from being unconscious for several days. Thanks to a minoin medicine administered to him by Rebecca. Afterwards, still feeling weak and sore he slept for the rest of the […]
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Don’t know if it was supposed to be funny, but I laughed anyway when Raygar was stepping on people sleeping on the floor while he was trying to get to the door. Good description. I like the interaction between Rebecca and Raygar. Will she tell him why she was banished?
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I agree with Cheryl that the scene of him coming out of the cave, trying to be quiet was priceless. I could picture him stepping on everyone Lifting his knees high like marching, thinking that would help. You did a good job keeping us hanging on what the King might want.
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You’ve done a good job in this scene highlighting details to place the reader in the scene. Rebecca ‘s story is intriguing. I’d love to know why she was banished. Reading through your previous scene and this one back to back, I’m not sure you need the first paragraph. It’s a lot of telling, so if there are any details that the reader needs, I think you have plenty of opportunities to bring them out in the dialog of this scene. Something to consider as you edit.
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So, now I’m hanging in there waiting to see what is awaiting Rygar, his crew, and the mnoin warriors as they make way to King Manifest. Loved the way he trampled on everyone sleeping when he was fully awake and ready for another day. I, too, would like to know why Rebecca was banished and learn more about her story. Thank you for such a good read! Astrid
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A king must pay his debts: scene 17 T. Weeks 2 weeks, 1 day ago
Thank you
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Maggie by Sandy Menarek 2 weeks, 2 days ago
Excellent writing, you showed that Maggie must be a gorgeous woman by the way people reacted to her. I’m so curious to know what’s in her mother’s will.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Maggie by Sandy Menarek 2 weeks, 2 days ago
No wonder why she is so upset. She never really got to say goodbye to her mom. I wonder if Mr. Edwards has a good reason for not contacting her, if not I’d be pretty mad at him too. Julia and Thelma are very comical, I enjoyed them.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, Maggie by Sandy Menarek 2 weeks, 2 days ago
Your dialogue was great, it flowed nicely and it seemed like you developed very strong characters because I could always tell who was talking just by what they said. You have a wonderful scene with a bit of romance sparking. My only suggestion would be adding in more descriptions if you want.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A King must pay his debts scene 16 T.Weeks 2 weeks, 4 days ago
Thank you
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A King must pay his debts scene 16 T.Weeks 2 weeks, 4 days ago
Thank you, I will definitely add more details in the rewrite.
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Tuesday Weeks commented on the post, A King must pay his debts scene 16 T.Weeks 2 weeks, 4 days ago
Thank you.
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Ah at last he reaches the Kingdom. Things should get very interesting rather quickly, I’d expect. I’m guessing from Rebecca’s discomfort that she has some history with King Max. Things are starting to get very interesting!
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Rebeca’s uneasiness in front of the kings son is foretelling. It feels like more than just respect. I don’t trust him. In this phrase, ‘ponytail bouncing at a study motion’ should study be steady? I love the description of Nersa’s ponytail. Rebecca must be very strong to stay on the horse with a sleeping man tied to her waist. I assume he was sitting behind her. This was such a tranquil scene, with hints of danger at the end. Nicely done.
Thank you. Yes he was behind her.
Your descriptions of the girls riding the horses was great. I felt like I was riding along with them. I am interested to see what is going on between Rebecca and Max, since it seemed like he completely ignored Rebecca.
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Oh, more family intrigue and some drama coming up between Rebecca, King Max and Rygar, can’t wait to read more on this.
I’m stunned to learn that Rebecca is strong as a rock being capable of riding a horse and holding onto it while keeping Rygar strapped to her waist… I’ll be happy to know how that is possible too.
Looking forward to the next bit. Astrid