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  • LION

    PEOPLE THINK THAT I AM A LION

    WHILE INSIDE I AM JUST A SCARECROW

    PEOPLE LOOK TO ME TO SORT THEIR TROUBLES

    BUT WHO WILL HELP ME WITH MINE

    ON MY TREK, LEADING TO UNKNOWN PLACES

    PLACES WHERE I AM AFRAID […]

    • Aw.
      Poor fella. Universal conflict between perceived and actual self.

      Nice.

    • Tom, Very well said! I suspect we are all scarecrow lion inside! We might find out who we truly were, making differences in the lives of others, if we could hover over our funerals! Thanks for sharing!!

    • Hello Tom,
      Yes, most of us present ourselves completely differently from the way we feel. I have to confess I am not sure about writing poetry in all capital letters. I felt a bit as if I was being shouted at. But that’s probably just me. Well done with the poem.

    • Hi
      Your poem, your words paint the secret portrait of people everywhere. Well done. CA

  • LIGHT                                    ©tmullane 10/11/2021

    Autumnal colours sprayed across the horizon

    Yellow, red and brown

    Paint the landscape of tired trees

    With a final flourish of beauty

    Deceptiv […]

    • Hi T, this is a good rendition of the feeling of moving from late fall into winter. You capture the feelings of the impending harshness that is winter and in a very colorful way.. Thanks you for your poem.

    • Hello Thomas,
      I like the images you have used to paint the onset of autumn and a chilly winter. Well done.

    • Beautiful poem Thomas. You paint a gorgeous picture of colourful autumn and the dread of the cold to come. Living in South Africa I can’t relate to harsh winters, but for us we don’t look forward to the season either.

      I like this line:
      Deceptive as an unseen death can be

      Thanks for sharing. Hope you’re managing to stay warm.

    • Hi Thomas

      You have such descriptions of the changing season in here.

      ‘… as they strive
      To display their manhood’

      Brilliant. I really enjoyed this. Felt I was there.

      Martin

  • Her eyes were lowered to the ground, much to the annoyance of the prisoner, who was silently pleading to be seen. How could she ignore me? She’s supposed to be defending in ten minutes.

    She began to open her b […]

    • Go girl! A great read!

    • Of course I want to know what happens next, who the relative was, and what was the misdemeanour?…. You’ve set this up to be continued! I felt in the first few paragraphs there was maybe a little too much showing rather than telling, but our heroine revealed her humanity when she got into the bathroom.

  • ANOTHER          PROMPT 10        12 POEMS           ©tmullane 13/10/2021

    Brown mottled leaves reflect the colours of Autumn

    Still some bloom of late developers

    Evening light being stolen each day

    Suns las […]

    • Hi Tom,
      This is indeed a special piece! With such simplicity, you shared the beauty of living. We experience so many nuggets of gold while living our lives and it might seem like just another day, challenge, or experience. You simply described the beauty of life ups and downs we so often take for granted, whether, cold, despair, or a loss. Well done!!

    • Beautiful poem Tom. I love the images that you paint in my mind. Your words transported me from 32 degree sunny South Africa to the impending cold.

      The piece flows wonderfully. I don’t know why, but the end gave me a peaceful feeling of the acceptance to the end of life by disease – unseen foe. I looked up the mountain you mentioned and the area looks gorgeous.

      Stay warm and stay safe.

      Well done and thanks for sharing.

    • Hello Tom,
      What a vibrant picture of the onset of autumn in Ireland! Just a couple of pedantic comments – if no punctuation (and that’s fine), I’m not sure capitals are needed at the beginning of each line (e.g. ‘Another chance to bid farewell / To the warmth of summer’s dying sun /And greet the chill of another winter’). Also the old ‘it’s’ problem in the final line – it’s is short for ‘it is’. ‘Its’ is the possessive thingy (so, ‘its way’). Sorry for mentioning that but it’s (!) one of my ‘things’. Much enjoyed your poem though.

    • Hi, Tom
      A great piece of writing about Autumn. Keep up the good work, thanks for sharing.
      Wanda Lovan

    • Hi Tom

      I found this quite poignant, it’s time reflecting the season you describe.

      And with this line, you add a solemnity to proceedings, yet later in the poem, you remind us of the cycle.

      Martin

      ‘Another chance to bid farewell’

  • Yes, it is part of a longer story. should I continue with the story next month?

  • The Call                Tom Mullane                     ©tmullane 3rd Oct 2021

    The phone rang twice. His eyes blinked open in shock. His head was groggy and painful as he struggled to bring his mind into fo […]

    • Tom, I enjoyed reading your story. You did a good job in showing how injured Stanley was without telling us from what exactly. Although, the fact that he takes on these “jobs” suggests he’s involved ins something either crooked or spy related, in any case it from physical injury from his previous job. I completely understand his need for coffee, no matter what, by the way! LOL
      The ending left me a little confused. Was he smiling because he was going ahead with the job and hence starting back to some sense of normalcy regardless of his pain, or ?? I would have preferred a little more information explaining that, but that’s just me. Thanks for sharing your story!

    • I was intrigued by this. My only regret was that it didn’t go far enough. Maybe it would work at this length if you cut down slightly on the repetitions (his injury, how he felt, what he worried about) and added in a few more details about the cause of his injury or who exactly the caller was…
      Just a few typo/tense hops but they are easily resolved.
      Just one idiot question from me (no surprise there) but is this part of a longer story – and have I missed a previous episode? If so, would you give me its name and which prompt please.
      Good title and use of prompt by the way

    • Yes, it is part of a longer story. should I continue with the story next month?

  • your descriptions were amazing, the detail awesome. loved reading it.

  • fabulous depth in your writing, thank you for sharing.

  • WINE IN THE SUN

    While sitting in my deck chair by the beach

    My glass of wine teasingly out of reach

    And laziness weighing down my arm

    That glass of wine won’t come to any harm

    While half closed eyes still p […]

    • Normally I’m not a fan of rhyme, but your use of rhyme and rhythm work well here–it’s almost a nursery rhyme for adults! I could absolutely envision this in my mind. Thank you for sharing!

    • Great poem Tom. You paint the scene well and I can feel the fight from nodding off. Won’t it be wonderful after that pleasant dream to realize that your wine is still there waiting for you.

      The rhythm and rhyme were good.

      Thanks for sharing.

    • Tom,
      A situation that I can relate to. Thanks for sharing! Cheers!
      Best to you,
      Wanda Lovan

    • Hi Tom, I really enjoyed the tone of your poem; the humour was fitting yet not over-the-top. The long syllables of the end rhymewords so effectively adds to the lazy atmosphere.
      I like how the classy deck chair and “glass of wine” simply turns into a bowl to be drained at the end. Loved this! 😀

    • Hello Tom,
      The repetitions and rhymes make for easy, lazy reading. Well done.

  • An Inheritance

    I was in a state of shock. My grandfather and I were always close. He regaled me with his stories of travel and the sea I loved those stories. They stimulated my mind and sank deep into my […]

    • Good old Horace! Grandfather or uncle? I love the idea of this eccentric grandfather who leaves his favourite grandson a treasure box. The line at the end, “Go sail your own ship”, is most satisfying. I like the main character, his want of confidence in the face of his siblings lording it over him, the hurt he feels when he thinks his grandfather cheated him makes the reader feel for him. His siblings are well described from his point of view.
      I noticed a few errors that probably escaped editing:
      A full stop is needed in line two just before, “I loved those stories.”
      Also there are a few instances of repeating the same thing which you could pare down, e.g. “I was reluctant to venture out as I didn’t want to meet anyone as I did not want to meet people.”
      and check the paragraph beginning with, “There were times when I did feel cheated….” You’ve already mentioned twice that he felt cheated. All that said, it’s only a bit of editing needed. The story itself is wonderful. Thanks for sharing.

    • Hey Tom. There are lots of interesting and rich foundational elements to this story – the absence of his parents in a fatal accident, the curiousness of his grandfather, and how he has accumulated such amazing wealth. The relationship between the siblings and why out narrator Henry is such an outcast compared to Martin and Bernadette who seem so distant to him. Why he accepted the ramshakle house but didn’t have the curiosity to open the box (he seems like a thoughtful fellow – I wondered if he was ashamed of the whole house and only went there years later for some other reason?) Anyway, I’d love you to take me deeper into one aspect of the story, even though skimming across it kept me reading and rollong along. I too love the next-to-last line of this story. Go sail your own ship. It naturally applies to my feedback too 🙂 Thanks for sharing.

    • What a lovely surprise!

      I feel that there might be further adventures awaiting Henry as he finally gets to go travelling.

      Thanks for sharing.

  • THE MERMAID OF DUNMORE

    Back in the day when mermaids waited

    And from the rocks with heart deflated

    Waiting for sailors and fishermen

    As they wearily sailed back home again

    The mermaid paused and shed a […]

    • Hi Tom,
      Such a beautiful tale you wove!! I envisioned the beautiful mermaid waiting with tears and hope and dreams of a future. I am not sure what inspired this poem…you did a wonderful job of drawing in the reader. Thanks for sharing!!

    • Hello Tom,
      Lovely imagery of a mermaid and her fated lover – would be good to know what inspired you.

    • Your words weave an image of a wistful, lonely mermaid and it is quite compelling but I feel a sense of foreboding with the last few (6) lines. It almost sounds like when she Does see her love again, he will be forced to stay with her whether he actually wants to or not– never, ever, and must are very strong words. And to sleep by her side could be read in a different light, considering mermaids in some stories are known to drown sailors. Not sure if you intended it that way, but in any case, it is a beautiful, haunting story and the short lines have a good solid rhythm. Amazing job with the rhymes too– They flow very well!

    • Loved the story Tom. I did however – and this could be my twisted mind – get a bit of an ominous feeling with your last two lines. A sailor among the rocks might not be breathing.

      The rhythm and rhyme of the poem were great and I felt like I was floating on the waves. I love how you described them in this line:
      she hides beneath the dancing swirl

      Thanks for sharing. Would love to know the art to your inspiration.

    • Beautiful imagery and way to tell a story through the poem. It also sits well with some myths of mermaids and their fated lovers. Good job!

  • Assonance:

    The bouncing ball blasted it’s way down to the bewilderment of baffled boys

    Who when they heard a wise word spoken

    Simply sat and struggled  stoically

    Until under the stallions shadow, they sl […]

    • Hi Tom,

      I love that you separated your poems into distinct stanzas. Each stanza is unique and tells a story. Very nice indeed!

    • Tom
      Love the rhyme version – so true in our daily lives also.
      Great work
      Shae

    • Love the rhyme verse the most Tom. Thanks for the chuckle. Well done on fulfilling all of the prompt. Thanks for sharing.

    • Hello Tom.
      Three stand-alone poems which sort of link into one – clever. It works for this prompt – not sure it would for the poetry-format uninitiated!

  • When will I ever learn? Here I stand dripping wet, caught in a summer shower that had a mean streak. The sun had been shining and I decided to avail of the good weather and go for a walk. Foolishly I perceived […]

    • O dear, that was a miserable experience for your character. I felt sorry for him getting chafed by his shorts and then when the car drove away leaving him there I felt even more sorry. I hope he was able to hobble home and that home wasn’t too far off. At least skin is waterproof!

    • The story has the makings for a good laugh.

    • I must say this did make me chuckle. I think it was the singing in the rain that really got me. Did he get home safely and was his toe broken? Just curious.

    • Loved this. I felt the broken toe, the drenched clothes and the chaffed inner thighs. You painted a great picture . It’s like Murphy’s Law was at work for your MC. Thank you for a fun reac.

  • ROME

    Shuffling through the backstreets

    taunted by the thought of being late.

    I must not be late.

    Italians are so laid back.

    They stroll at a ridiculous pace,

    shuffling along nonchalantly

    I furtively make my […]

    • Hi Tom,

      I lived through this special piece! I felt a nervous anticipation, anxiety, and towards the end a beautiful surprise a sense of wonder. You captured the prompt quite well.

    • Hello Tom,
      I like the way the early repetitions underline the urgency of the journey through Rome’s dawdling crowds. What the woman must have felt once she discovered her mistake, I can only guess at. Lovely humour in this.

    • I really like the energy of this poem. And the beauty of the things we find all in divine timing. A very fun read with a great take on the prompt of found.

    • Hi Tom, I felt like this was a ‘tiny tale’ and you set the piece up beautifully. Lots of descriptions:) The ending was quite funny. I thought it was a long lost love that had found Gerry, only to find out it was mistaken identity:) Lucky Gerry.
      One small edit required:
      I ignore, thinking she can’t looking for me – she can’t be looking for me
      Well done.

    • I was caught by your ‘furtive’ movement that is faster than the Italians’ and by the sense that this is somehow wrong. Your poem contains much of a sense of duty imposed by others, so I enjoyed your surprise.

  • Clue                                                      ©T.Mullane 16th June 2021

    It was Tuesday morning; the sun was shining, and Nelly was wondering what she might do today. She had hung on to the comfort of […]

    • Hi Tom,

      I really enjoyed your story! Nelly’s belief in herself and her courage to get up despite what her family thought of her. You painted a picture of kindness and beauty quite eloquently. Your pacing was also great!!

    • Hi Tom

      Enjoyed reading your story, very descriptive and pictures are forming all the time you are reading, as it should be.
      Most enjoyable, thank you.

    • Hi Tom,

      Enjoyed the story, very well written I thought. I was a bit confused about her age. I thought she was a child initially so maybe you might make her age a little clearer but overall I enjoyed the read.

  • Autobiography, Tom Mullane

    To be with my loved one

    Over the sea

    Murmuring in her ear

    Many times have I kissed her

    Under the full moon

    Longing for those times again

    Lingering here sad and bereft

    Alone by […]

    • Hi Tom,
      This is such a special piece! I really like how you structured your poem. You created such beauty and sadness with your powerful words. You painted a masterpiece of great memories/remembrances and your last line… poignant.

    • Oh Tom this is heart wrenching and beautiful. Such a wonderful tribute to a stunningly expressed love. You words tore at my soul for the sadness of this loss.

      May healing be found when the tide ebbs and good memories persist.

      Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

    • Ah, Tom. You used your name to express your love and yearning. Such a lonely poem. Thank you for sharing. May happy days return.

    • Hello Tom,
      So sad and intense. Thank you for sharing your poem.

  • Do I need to re-examine it again?

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