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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, ON EUGENE DELACROIX’S “LIBERTY LEADING THE PEOPLE” by BES McMillan 16 hours, 54 minutes ago
No. Never give up the truth! I think men just don‘t see why you‘re asking these questions. They‘ve been in a patriarchal world for too long. We still need a lot of dialogue with men so they start asking the same questions. Yes, it might mean that you‘re a poet for women for the next few years. But we need that! And by ‘we‘ I mean all of us. Hope…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Moon Kissed Ocean by Jane Bradshaw 18 hours, 15 minutes ago
Hi Jane, acrostic and ekphrastic – double take on the prompt. Well done! It’s a lovely painting and your poem does it justice. Or the other way round? I think both poem and painting complement each other. Well done!
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Harmonics by nsbnina 18 hours, 17 minutes ago
Hi Nina, there’s no need for a picture here – you paint it marvelously with your words. Really well done.
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Calculated Recklessness by Christian Donovan 18 hours, 19 minutes ago
Hi Christian, what an excellent poem. I don’t know anything about Bacon’s painting but your poem has me right there on the spot. Well done.
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Infinity Mirrors by Zannie Rose 18 hours, 21 minutes ago
Wow, acrostic and ekphrastic! Great cross-over of forms. Your picture drew me right in and I think your poem is just as mesmerizing.
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, ON EUGENE DELACROIX’S “LIBERTY LEADING THE PEOPLE” by BES McMillan 18 hours, 22 minutes ago
You make some excellent points here! It does make you wonder why men rally for liberty…and now I would really love to hear Mr. Delacroix’s answers to your questions..(chuckle). I can see him squirming. Great poem with great content!
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Susanne Bennett wrote a new post, Stars & Gripes by Susanne Bennett 1 day, 18 hours ago
Stars & Gripes
Oh, say, can you see, those fifty stars in formation
Marching straight, with golden determination
To those cheerful stripes, greeting other nations.
You bring that American dream
Of life, […]
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Susanne Bennett wrote a new post, Matron Saints 25 & 26/52 by Susanne Bennett 1 day, 18 hours ago
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Lilli knew exactly what was festering: her family. And the fact that she needed to choose. She hated choices. Choices implied that there was a wrong, and a right side. Usually, you can only meet people in the […] -
Susanne Bennett wrote a new post, Transatlantic Sisters 22/52 by Susanne Bennett 1 day, 18 hours ago
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November 1976 – Morgan“Mom!” Morgan flung her school bag into a corner as she entered the house. “Mom!”
“In the kitchen!” Barb was just making roulades. Somehow, she got tangled up in the twine. She was sup […]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Maya van Hout by Adriaan Snyman 2 days, 16 hours ago
oh boy, what a haunting story! It feels like it’s the beginning of a longer story. I really want to know how Maya battles her ghosts. I think you told your story well. In the beginning, though, I wished for a longer word count. You were telling me about Maya’s trouble with sleeping, I think I would have loved to witness such a night. Thanks for your story!
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, 12-Final Message (rewrite) by Becky Crookham 1 week ago
Hi Becky, I really like how you’re showing us what’s inside Maisie’s head. Especially the counting right before calling someone shows that this is quite an obstacle for her. I was somehow reminded of the TV-series “Monk” 😊 . The scenes themselves are great and seem rather polished. When you talk about how lonely Maisie is it might be a good idea…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Pure Evil by Patty Panni – Scene Twenty 1 week ago
Hi Patti, I’ve enjoyed last week’s scene so much that I just had to come back and I was not disappointed. I like the exchange between Christine and Sheila, it was full of warmth and understanding. To contrast it with the reality of Sasha was great because you’re upping the tension again and now I can’t wait to find out what happens next week!
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Scene 20 – Reaction Scene by hanna.jh 1 week ago
HI Hanna, this is such an interesting scene. The way Jane tries to reexamine her memories of the apartment tells me she has doen this before. I wonder if she’ll do it again and come up with an unexpected detail? Especially after that quote fromMark ou mentioned. Somehow I feel someone is trying to trick her memory… I really like this sentence:…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, FIT & PROPER (20). Chapter 14 Scene 29. By Hanri Mostert 1 week ago
Hi Hanri,
this is one beautiful love scene. Just perfect. I have nothing to add! 🙂 -
Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Gilly Falls #20 by nsbnina 1 week ago
Hi Nina, finally Annie gets to say that she’S pregnant! We’ve all been waiting for this one. I was surprised that Annie told the whole family all at once, I thought she might want to tell Jack in private. This whole scene is wonderful, it has a few sentences in it that are like gems. This here is one of them: “That smile that told her everything…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, The Scar by Renee Shurilla 1 week, 1 day ago
What an interesting story! and the ending calls for a sequel, I think. If things aren’t as permnent as we think, then I wonder if the contract with the dark prince will be…please write a sequel and show us how Kirsten gets out of that one!
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, The Passport by C Alexis 1 week, 1 day ago
This is so funny! Poor Tamsin – she really should not ever style her hair like Beeker ever again. I like the way you tell your story. You up the tension at the end of the first part with short sentences and Tamsin’s frantic search. Then the flashback with the Italian police – thank you for the translations! I did not see the end coming. So funny.
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Creative Evidence to a Crime by Catherine Harris 1 week, 1 day ago
I’ve really enjoyed your story but wished for a higher word count. The way you’ve introduced us to the world of an autistic artist was very well done, very realistic at that. There were some points in the story where you glossed over and that’s where I wished for more detail. For example: why did Live choose new materials if the messiness made her…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, Pure Evil by Patty Panni — Scene Nineteen 1 week, 1 day ago
Hi Patty, I haven’t read your scenes in a while but I felt right at home again. I like the way you tell your story. How interesting that the FBI finally believes Christine and is willing to work with her. I read Graham’s comment – I think the FBI could also work with Christine because they are desperate to get a lead on the case. If then Reynolds…[Read more]
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Susanne Bennett commented on the post, FIT & PROPER (19). Chapter 14 Scene 28 (Good Enough). By Hanri Mostert. 1 week, 1 day ago
Hi Hanri, sorry I’m a bit late in commenting. Can we all please have a Daniel as a coach? I love the way he’s seeing right through Rebecca and helping her. I just hope he is as good as he seems! But since he apologized so honestly about the choice of the restaurant…. I am glad to see Daniel on Rebecca’s side. Whereas frank Ehrlich made an…[Read more]
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Moving. Your rhyme scheme ripples, much as flags do in a breeze, and I like the way you’ve repurposed phrases from an assortment of America’s patriotic sources, leading up to that final admonishment. SO, SO very true! I wish to heaven the US would heed your final line! Thank You.
the title drew me in to read your poem. I like the sense of rhythm. I can hear a drum beat all the way through.
Hello Susanne,
A clever title. Although the last line of the poem is very powerful, for me the nub of it are the two lines which precede it – All I ask is that the stars should not forget / Who their brothers, their sisters be. Thanks for sharing your poem.
Hmm not feeling so great these days, but it’s a nice poem.
Hi Susanne, I like that you have linked the flag with the anthem and interwoven so much more. And your last line is every so important: With great power comes great responsibility.
If only the people in power would hold this responsibility with much higher regard.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
Wonderful! Love the last line. I appreciate your emphasis on the positive and praise, despite the difficulties going on in our world and our country. There is still a lot to be thankful for, and, as you say, a great responsibility.