Loved the 2nd version more .
most profound a reflection Susan!

Hi Susan

I liked them both. The first one for its clarity. the second one for the musing. Good job.

Martin

“Old man, how is it that you hear these things?” “Young man, how is it that you do not?” Perfect evocation of Po.

Hello Susan,
I struggled a bit with this, having to look up Master Po on Google and finding it only in reference to Kung Fu Panda. Is this right? Anyway, despite never having seen the film/s, I like both your poems and their reference to what seems to me a Buddhist appreciation of life.

When I was young, I used to watch David Carradine playing Caine/young grasshopper in Kung Fu, and when I was older I loved Kung Fu Panda and his Master Po. I loved the truisms that these shows relayed, they were as profound as those in your poems. This brought back fond memories from my past, and for that I say, thank you!

Oh, this reminds me of the 36 chambers movie. The first one is very clear, concise, and o the point. The second is more profound and deeper. Love both versions. Great job, Susan. 🙂

I was just waiting for a Young Grasshopper reference. Great job. The first one painted of nice picture of Master Po and the second imparted his wisdom.

Hi Susan, I enjoyed both variations very much. I was a big fan of Grasshopper and of martial arts movies generally and I love how you’ve retransmitted some of Master Po’s wisdom in the acrostic form. That was a really cool idea! Thank you for sharing 🙂

Indeed there is much more than meets the eye .Beautifully written story.Enjoyed each line.Thank you

I really enjoyed this story Susan, I liked the theological tension you brought to the inner conflict of the character.

Hi Susan,

And what would any of us do if we found out the truth. Perhaps bury our phones are go off the grid for a while. Hell yeah, why not.

Watch out for vague terms such as “all the high tech gear” It is better to be specific rather than vague.

There is an erroneous double quote at right,”

Thank you for sharing an interesting read.

Keep Writing.
Cheers,
Paul

A really lovely story. So original and fresh and thought provoking too, not an easy combination I dont think! Thank you for sharing.