Hi Fizza

did I detect some animosity between the sisters?
great, relatable dynamic .
good writing !

Delightful–so interesting that siblings argue about the most mundane of topics. C Alexis

I like the phrase “chewing every word” – really shows the less than friendly nature of the dialogue. But I am with the MC — NOT an appropriate dessert!

Say it ain’t so! Donuts are not boring! I enjoyed your little story. Good job!

Sibling rivalry, never let the younger one outshine the older. It happens every time. 🙂 So glad they pulled together for the sake of their parents. Nicely done, Fizza.
Thank you.
(Last line; change to ‘all that mattered’. 🙂

– Ismael

Siblings arguing over little things. Great piece. You capture the moment so vividly and end on a high. Blood is thicker than water, after all.

And just like that, through your beautiful story, I could see my sister and I squabbling about whatever. Loved your story.

Headline got me. Terrifically contrarian. Solid dialogue, but reckon some could be left out ( for example the explanation of the anniversary feels a little like they would know that), creating word space to show me a little more of where these two are arguing or perhaps the look on their parents faces when the food is presented. Minor things. Thanks for writing and sharing.

Hi Fizza,
This story made me smile. I agree with you on the fact that donuts do not make great desserts, but as the youngest one among my siblings, I would still side with the younger sister. 😉
I loved how you portrayed their rivalry through easy banter. Thanks for sharing. 🙂

Hi Fizza – Nice dialogue between the sisters . I disagree with Teresa on the use of ‘chewing’ – given the food/eating theme of the piece, I would have avoided anything related and found another word, but I like the story.