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  • Some holidays are about giving your congregation exactly what they want.   And when I say ‘some holidays’, I really mean Christmas.  It’s the one time when you need to step back, go with the flow, and make you […]

  • Hi Isabella. Your writing about heat makes me glad that I’m in the cooler air of late autumn! A nice buildup of the discomfort from the heat and the measures taken. And hopefully not too prophetic of what climate change may bring…

  • Hi Maria. Well, what started out with a cute idea of an army of mice guarding their ‘person’ took a different turn and really packed a punch! This situation feels very recognizable and real – I’ve watched two friends do this very thing (both with their mothers) in the past couple of years. Thanks for a different and humorous view of a sad…[Read more]

  • Hi Penny. This was a nice little vignette, full of wonderful images. The description of the yard in autumn was lovely, although there was a bit of contradiction between gently floating leaves and whistling wind. The love for Pippa shines through in the beautiful line, ‘… moving into the spaces that Pippa opened up.’
    Nicely done. — Janet

  • Thanks, Donal, for reading and commenting. I think the last nearly 20 months have sadly taught us this… but we can hope for a good outcome. Thanks again.

  • Hi Steve. Thank you for your comment… especially about the conversations! I feel like I fight with dialogue so much, so I’m glad it worked for you. As for the happy ending, we need them, for sure.

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    The ringing of the telephone jolted Lucas out of sleep; the sky was still dark as he acknowledged the universal truth that no good ever came from early calls to a priest.

    One month as […]

    • Hi Janet, I found that a lovely read. Lots of conversations painting the picture. Plus, a happy ending too. 🙂

      • Hi Steve. Thank you for your comment… especially about the conversations! I feel like I fight with dialogue so much, so I’m glad it worked for you. As for the happy ending, we need them, for sure.

    • Thanks Janet, a nice piece, a reminder maybe that we cannot take tomorrow for granted, enjoyed it.

      • Thanks, Donal, for reading and commenting. I think the last nearly 20 months have sadly taught us this… but we can hope for a good outcome. Thanks again.

    • Thank you for sharing this Janet. A lovely piece and I can hear your voice both spiritually and physically as I read it. You have such lovely ways to paint the scene and show us the family and their relationships through the snippets of dialogue. I always love a good happy ending. And yes, nothing good comes of a phone call in the middle of the night. Well done!

  • Photo by Yash Prajapati on UnsplashPatrick added a couple of logs to the fire – freshly chopped by the older members of his scout troop that afternoon – and settled back into his lawn-cum-camping chair.  In a semi […]

    • Vividly described! Really fine dialogue and action tags for same. A satisfying tale, for certain.

    • Delightful story. Very easy to visualise the setting and I particularly liked the image of fifteen pairs of eyes echoing his. Very well described.

    • This is a great story
      I could totally visualize the campfire , the sparks from the logs spiralling away into the darkness., those bug-eyed stares –
      great visual descriptions
      and the ending is gold ! ☺

      great work

  • Hi Melissa.
    This was great… had no idea where it would take me, but knowing a couple of serious bakers who have nursed their starters along for years (although not 1000 years! yike!), this is a fun take on the idea!
    Writing notes: a bit of word repetition (feet ‘shuffled’ twice in one paragraph, ‘recognizing’ people), but other than that,…[Read more]

  • Hi Beth. This was a delightful story! I’ll second what Pam above has said… I would love to read more about these characters.

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    The House sits, dark and imposing, well back from the road at the end of a long, tree-lined drive.  No light shines from its windows; no welcoming flowers fill the elegant pots perched atop elaborately […]

    • Hi Janet,
      Your descriptions are superb. You bring the house and its history to life. Excellent piece which was a pleasure to read.

    • This sounds like a lovely old house that’s finally getting a chance at a new life. I was very curious about why something so lovely would sit abandoned? Not enough money to run or fix up? Wanted to live somewhere else? I think I’ve read too much Gothic literature because I was expecting something sinister the whole time. Lovely, transporting read.

    • Kim replied 4 months ago

      Hi Janet

      this reads as an outline for a potential WIP that you are considering – hopefully you will take it on and flesh it out.
      in this you have given us the opening scene and introduced the main character(s) – clearly the house will be considered a living, sentient presence
      this manor house wants it story told ! so I do hope to see future episodes written

  • Hi Isabella.
    Well, that was an unexpected twist! Although, looking through the story again, I could see that you had planted a couple of clues – the agent’s reluctance to go outside, the dustiness of the house.
    Your househunter made me think of my grandmother, who had a small, nondescript house that was adequate for her to live in, and a HUGE…[Read more]

  • The rectory’s garden had been calling to him for days.

    Lucas paused outside the faded-grey fence to the yard, then unlatched the gate and stepped in.  Early spring’s bleak jumble of branches and stems had beco […]

    • A touching story.
      I thought you handled the progression of time well, and covered some good ground 😉 with it 😁

    • Brought back memories of the flower garden my maternal grandparents had. They had more space for a garden than my paternal grandparents who made do with some flowers in the back and some by the sidewalk in front. The memories are aided by having lived in the same house or two houses away from that larger garden for many years.
      Maybe that’s why I, liek the good padre, would try to salvage the plants instead of clear-cutting and starting over.

    • Ah that garden – and those miniature roses! A beautiful, sensitively written story – well done!

  • I did very seriously consider the 52 scenes challenge … but I decided that I wasn’t quite ready (or able) to commit to the time right at the moment. It’s always at the back of my mind, though, to try and join at some point… and in the meantime, I am continuing to poke away at the project, using the monthly prompts to send me in various…[Read more]

  • Hi Deryn. Thanks for reading and commenting!
    In a combat situation, everyone will lose colleagues, even the officers. This vignette is Lucas’s ‘baptism by fire’, into a place he could only previously imagine.
    And yes, it was me that wrote about Lucas having a crisis of faith. All of my posts this year, so far, are stories about Padre Lucas…[Read more]

  • Hi Matt! Well, that escalated quickly! And in reverse, too, which is really a neat approach. Your writing in this story is simple, but not at all simplistic. I really enjoyed this.

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