Hi Riham, The idea of a statue/sculpting who is alive and can not only see what is going on around him but can feel as well brings possibilities for writing stories. This statue has a heart and if he could he would comfort the frightened sad little girl. Well done.

hi Riham
so imaginative to show is from the statues pov. you did switch briefly when you mentioned the woman’s pov and her vision becoming blurry.
so did the statue know the girl was hiding behind him?
you showed us a snapshot off a sad family with a little girl who has a secret. we can guess her home life from the interaction the statue sees.
a lot of information inside this story. a lot to think about.

You’ve captured a moment very well. I love the last two lines in particular. Beautifully done.

A clever take on the prompt, showing how a slip can have devastating consequences. Well done.

Hi, thank you for submitting a great poem. This is a reality for many and sadly people do slip in and out of our lives no where to be found again. With it’s details, I was able to vision this piece into a mini story in my mind. That to me, is great poetry.

The imagery is vivid, and the emotions are strong. I like how you showed the story and used the prompt in different ways. Thank you for sharing.

Hello,
Wow, that was quite an ending to a romantic story. You’ve got plenty of natural rhyming. Well done.

Powerful image and powerful words.

You’ve captured the feeling of waiting and yearning very strongly and the last verse feels like it brings the poem to all of us – we are all the child waiting for their father. Beautifully done.

Fantastic poem Riham. I love the short verses that are powerful and emotive. The image is heart-wrenching with its title, and your words do it great justice.

The rhythm and rhyme are excellent and the story is well told.

I love all the verses, but this is my favourite:
The edge of the sky is still grey
But the sea is once again blue
Nature remembers then forgets

Thank you for sharing.

Hi Riham. I like this short, but emotive poem. Very rich imagery. My favorite verse is “Nature remembers then forgets”. Thank you for sharing.

Hello Riham,
That’s such a poignant painting, showing the yearning of a small boy to see his father again. We landlubbers tend to think of the seaside as a place of pleasure, seen in the background of this picture. But of course it isn’t. It is a place of constant danger. Your poem brings this point out beautifully. Thank you for sharing.

A wonderful match with Homer’s painting. You have captured the essence beautifully.

Powerful, so well done. I love the empty chairs, and the wave – promise broken. I could see parts of my life in the smoky jaded mirror.

Excellent poem Riham. I could feel the images and the words and the forlorn emptiness and the attempt to cover it all up and move on with life.

I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm and you evoke so much with words painting these pictures

Great job.

Hi Riham, I also enjoyed your poem. My favourite two lines were these:
The warm wave kisses the sand
Then breaks her promise, recedes a tad
Lovely wording. Well done.

Beautiful poem!!

Hello,
A feeling of abandonment and loss permeates the poem. The movement of the tide will wash away that episode of life. Thanks for sharing.

this was lovely – the sheer desperation comes through in the words – that constant running, trying to find their place in the world, or in someone’s life, or in escape – “I cannot escape that loss” – wow, so poignant
I thought you captured the essence of ‘not being found’ admirably!
very nicely done

Great poem Riham. I could feel the need to escape all the difficult and unpleasant things of life and I could relate. I think this is also very apt for our current environments and circumstances and the sheer overwhelm of it all.

So many great lines, but these are some of my favourite:
Running away from the memory of a scar

I am as wild as a stranger’s kiss
And as fragile as a love affair
But I can’t hold back my soul

I enjoyed the flow and the meaning that I garnered from the words and the feelings they emoted. Well done and thank you for sharing.

Hi Riham, I agree with Kim and Debbie, this is a powerful poem, six verses filled with different reasons and different problems to run from. I too can sense the desolation and desperation. Well done.

Hi Riham. This is a very striking and touching poem. I find it quite interesting that this month’s prompt has led to so many tragic and sad poems.
I really liked the irony that seeps through in your poem: that the things we find when we are running away so often becomes the next things we run away from.
You stanza starting with “Running away from the echo of a departed voice” was especially striking. It matches the controversies of the rest of the poem by making one wonder what is worse: the echo of a departed loved one of the memories fading?
Your metaphors are delightful, I especially enjoyed the “garden statue” and “oak.” Beautiful! 🙂

Hello,
I can almost feel the exhaustion and frailty the running has created. The repetition works really well, and the images are realistic so that we can all relate to them. Good poem!

Great job, Riham! To me it sounds as if the runner is also running out of a bad relationship? Really love the imagery — that oak!

I like the consistent theme.Well done