• Hi Estelle
    I share Jacqueline’s idea that more people should read this truthful poem. In our forward rushing life we seldom make a pause to appreciate the joy of calm and relax. You have made excellent use of the prompt. Well done and thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Srivalli
    Thank you for your comments. I think once a writer writes and shares a poem, each reader writes it anew. It is amazing out of how many points of view the same thing can be seen. I learn much from readers’ comments. I enjoyed your comment about the resemblance between the tree and the old one. Both you and Annette have a point in…[Read more]

  • Thank you Annette. I am happy you liked the poem, and I appreciate you comments.

  • Hi William. Unlike Jacueline I am not sure I understand it, but I appreciate the rhyming style. Thank you.

  • Hello Nam Raj. An interesting capture of the prompt to reverse a famous saying. Very original and daring I would say. Thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Annette. I can feel all the pain involved in this although never experienced it. It flows so freely and the words are touching. I also like the optimistic twist at the end. Well done and thank you.

  • Thank you Pam. I would not add even one word.

  • Hi Jane
    Thanks for commenting. As you have said the tree could be any facet of life, and any of us could be an onlooker.

  • Hi Christian
    Thank you for your comment.
    The point is no one really cared for the tree except ‘the old one’ who gave it what it needed. We often behave like the other four.

  • Hi Chloe
    This is a touching piece. You are crying out the cry of conscience and of fair play and kindness. Unfortunately, not everyone hears it.
    I like your repetition of “These are the things humans do” as well as the optimistic turning point at the end. Great piece. Thank you.

  • Hi Srivalli
    Nice capture of the prompt. The Haiku formation is in itself a hint to three being together. The pearl is indeed the togetherness. Thank you for sharing this fine poem.

  • Hi Pam
    This is so true, so outrageous. Who hasn’t experienced it? I read it twice with great sympathy. Thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Shae
    This is a beautiful piece praising the nature. I liked the lines “The moon and stars play shyly / Amidst the twilight skies”. Thank you.

  • Hi Jane
    Excellent explanation of how one may feel and questions that come up in the mind . Myself when looking in the sky not searching anything special, I often realize how negligible and worthless I am. This piece is very descriptive and thought provoking. Thank you for sharing.

  • TREE

    “How splendid is that tree” said one,

    another “How delicious are its fruits”,

    The third said “By passers could repose in its shade”,

    “It will make excellent benches” thought the fourth,

    The old one just […]

    • Hello Nissan,
      I like the twist at the end. The ‘old one’ is intent on keeping the tree as magnificent as the four first people have thought it. Very thoughtful poem.

      • Hi Christian
        Thank you for your comment.
        The point is no one really cared for the tree except ‘the old one’ who gave it what it needed. We often behave like the other four.

    • Jane replied 1 week ago

      Hi Nissan, I like your description of your poem and what it stands for. Could be said for many facets of life. How often do people stand back and give their opinions but not do anything to actually assist or help a situation. Well done.

      • Hi Jane
        Thanks for commenting. As you have said the tree could be any facet of life, and any of us could be an onlooker.

    • Hi Nissan,
      Thank you for sharing this lovely poem. I would say it is a sharing of wisdom teaching. Indeed the tree can be understood and appreciated for what it can give to the world, but only the wise old one knew how to give something back to the tree. It says something about ageing into wisdom too.

    • I really like how the poem conveys the importance of action (the watering of the tree) but ultimately leaves the interpretation of the action to the reader. The ambiguity of all the people in the poem– using one, another, third, fourth, the old one instead of more common pronouns (he/she/they) — also adds to the versatility of how to one could read it. As you mentioned, we could be any one of these persons in speaking/thinking/acting. I do have a suggestion regarding word choice– “by passers” could be replaced with “passers by” , which i think might also help a little with the rhythm of the poem. Thank you for sharing this thought-provoking poem 🙂

    • A short poem that packs a wonderful message! The old one and the tree are such a perfect combo given that trees take a lot of time to grow and need nurturing. I agree with Annette’s suggestion about ‘by passers’ being written as ‘passers by’. It makes a great difference to the rhythm. Thank you for sharing.

      • Hi Srivalli
        Thank you for your comments. I think once a writer writes and shares a poem, each reader writes it anew. It is amazing out of how many points of view the same thing can be seen. I learn much from readers’ comments. I enjoyed your comment about the resemblance between the tree and the old one. Both you and Annette have a point in suggesting “passers by” instead of “by passers”. Thank you.

  • This is beautiful. I loved it. Regarding broken pottery repair (somewhat different from Kintsugi !), you can read my childhood memory in response to AV Harris’ poem this month.
    Thank you for sharing.

  • Hi David
    I have to say, with some inconvenience, that I did not know the story, so I had the opportunity and pleasure to learn it. Now, adding to that your wonderful poesie, it was a prize to read your poem. Thank you.

  • Hi Pam
    Wow! The smells come to me all the way through the Webb.
    I taste the mixture with pleasure – literarily.
    Thank you for sharing.

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  • Hi Jane
    This is bitterly sad. I wonder whether it’s about a loss or an abandonment, whether it is real or only literary. In any case it is very emotive and expressive. Great piece.

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