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  • ‘6’
    or
    ‘Seeing Red’
    by N. Sutherland

    (Apologies -this is not  the proper standard of scene I like to submit but just a synopsis. Work pressures, a rollercoaster of Life complications, and Covid for Christmas […]

    • Hi Natasha, just dropped by to say well done for reaching the end you for novel under such dire circumstances. It’s not my genre but sounds pretty exciting all the same. Good luck for 2022.

    • What a ride reading your novel has been! Thank you so much for finishing it under difficult circumstances. I hope you are going to do the rewrite! Oh, almost forgot to ask about one thing that confused me: How can Andromeda be pure human? Wasn’t her father Keelian?

    • Hi Natasha. I wanted to drop you a message to see how you are and to let you know that I still can’t get Andromeda’s story out of my head – in a great way – so I tried to look for you and that’s when I found your last 52 post. I’m so sorry I didn’t spot it when you first posted it back in December but I can’t tell you how excited I was to finally get to find out how the story ends. And what a great ending.
      ‘But just because you don’t think something’s not there doesn’t mean it’s not there.’
      Hmmm. Sounds a lot like love to me huh Papa?
      Just beautiful. Andromeda has come such a long way and it’s been an absolute pleasure to follow her raw, often intense, and always captivating journey.
      Anyway, I just wanted to say that your story really stood out for me last year, there’s something so special about it – so I really hope you keep working on it until it’s ready for publication. I would love it if you could let me know when you do publish it and I will 100% buy and read it.
      I hope you are well and congrats on finishing your first draft!
      Bx

  • ‘6’
    or
    ‘Seeing Red’
    by N. Sutherland

    (Apologies -this  not being the proper standard of scene I like to submit but just a synopsis. Work pressures, a rollercoaster of Life complications, and Covid for Christmas […]

  • ‘6’
    or
    ‘Seeing Red’
    by N. Sutherland

    (Apologies this is not being the proper standard of scene I like to submit but just a synopsis. Work pressures, a rollercoaster of Life complications, and Covid for Christmas […]

  • ‘6’
    or 
    ‘Seeing Red’
    by N. Sutherland

    (Apologies for the fact that this scene is a synopsis and not  a scene embracing my usual style and prose. Its been a month of  work, illness, and Covid for Christmas. So it […]

    • Hi Natasha! What an interesting glimpse into your writing process! It’s the same story minus the mad energy. Thank you for sharing this, I had been wondering how you achieve the brilliance of your writing

  • ‘6’or ‘Seeing Red’by N. SutherlandMirrorAndromeda thinks its barley but she’s not sure.Tall wisps of reeds with clusters of beads at their head. As if someone whispered to me about them in a dream but not using wo […]

    • Hi Natasha, this is such a strong scene again, it’s brilliant. The contrast between the tenderness of Andromeda, the mother, in the way she cares for Palin and Andromeda, the warrior, the neck snapper, is terrific. It’s so good to see her finding herself again and regaining her fighting spirit. She’s fierce and just the right amount of unhinged to make her one of the most compelling characters I have ever come across.
      I was wondering what you’re planning to do as Andy has quite a lot to achieve and there is only one week left. Do you think you’ll try and catch up on your missing scenes? I’m asking from a totally selfish perspective as I love your world, your characters and I so desperately want to know how the story will end… xxxx

  • Hi Ben
    Was getting concerned that the bickering was happening for too long before Saleem’s interruption – , but I appreciate that you were adding a comic touch – perhaps that could be aided by inclusion of action/description of Saleem- like eating sipping his drink whilst watching the tennis match back and forth between the love triangle,…[Read more]

  • Tx Ben – like you… life a bit of playing catch up at the moment.
    Thanks for reading and commenting
    xx

  • Hey Ben
    Similar to the comments above – loved the detailed descriptions of the boat but I felt Kate’s observation of its furnishings slightly consumed her emotional response to the fact that she basically has been taken hostage at gunpoint. Having said that, I do like how you’ve made the sleek clinical energy of the boat echo the cool menace…[Read more]

  • Hi Maria

    Am so sorry I didn’t fall into your story sooner. Has such a fable kind of magic style to it and yet so colloquially cool.
    Your turn of phrase is exciting to read , like : ‘He thought about his own boredom of late, and tried to imagine being trapped here, alone, in this world of never-ending summer afternoon’
    I noticed some word…[Read more]

  • Oh Gosh. Jumped into your story now so late towards the end and it sucked me right in. I have no context about your characters since this is the first scene I’ve read but I already found myself feeling very afraid for Curtis. What is going to happen to him!!!?
    Lovely descriptions of the devastation that the hurricane has done to the landscape,…[Read more]

  • Hi Jens

    I really do like your style and once again am wishing I’d been following this from the beginning. So many interesting layers it seems to the theme of protagonist, antagonist – ‘heroes abound’. The pace is swift – something wish I could get right – the exposition when he was trying to sleep but remembering back, was effortless (…[Read more]

  • Hi Ben
    wow what a change in energy this scene had. Your description of the yacht in contrast to Dreamweaver gave the story an eerie almost sinister quality which I think is a great layer to add as we ramp up towards the end. I felt a sort of David and Goliath quality in your descriptions of the size discrepancies, as if a great shadow fell…[Read more]

  • HI SJ
    So long since I’ve read your story am sorry I don’t know the relationship dynamics , but it seemed like a very dramatic poignant scene.
    You gave some idea of the connections between characters by describing the colour and intensity of their eyes and gaze , which I enjoyed. I would have liked some more descriptions in terms of the…[Read more]

  • HI Jens
    Have not read your work before but found your style intriguing. Contemporary and relaxed but with a fable like edge. Makes me regret not reading it earlier on from the start of the challenge so I can have the context to comment against. I found a few repetitions of words in succession that jumped out at me , and things like;
    ” like My…[Read more]

  • ‘6’or’Seeing Red’PrideParlamene looks wrinkled from discontent, which is odd because nothing about him is wrinkled ever.Waistcoat, cravat, forehead, demeanour- all, always smooth.Ruatha looks curious.Curiosity […]

    • Hi Natasha, sorry it took me so long – I’ve fallen majorly behind on reading – but the twist was really well done. What better reason for Andromeda to get her fighting fire back than to save Palin! I noticed that you didn’t post a scene last week – I hope everything is ok and that you’ll make tomorrow’s post! xxxx

    • Tx Ben – like you… life a bit of playing catch up at the moment.
      Thanks for reading and commenting
      xx

      • It does get tough at times, doesn’t it? Really hoping you’ll post today – I need my Andy fix 🙂 xxxx

  • Natasha commented on the post, '6' by N. Sutherland 6 months ago

    He Ben

    Actually I have you and your feedback to thank for this little twist. In a recent scene you said you hoped Titanius’ death was there for a reason other than torture the reader (LOL) and your words gave a spark to this unfolding- so thank YOU! Proof that this writing challenge and the feedback offered by the community is really very…[Read more]

  • ‘6’
    or
    ‘Seeing Red’
    by N. Sutherland
    Andromeda’s taken back to her cell.

    My horrible, adorable, little womb. I’ve named all the bars. The one on the second to left of the wall is my favourite, Ol’ Jiminy Gunme […]

    • Oh my gosh!!!!!!!!! Titanius’ letter is absolute genius! Just when I couldn’t think of any possible way Andromeda was going to be able to get out of this darkest of all points, wow! I love it! Titanius manages to still look after her from beyond the grave, which makes him gone even more painful for her, and the reader. Congratulations Natasha, that was one masterful move 🙂

    • He Ben

      Actually I have you and your feedback to thank for this little twist. In a recent scene you said you hoped Titanius’ death was there for a reason other than torture the reader (LOL) and your words gave a spark to this unfolding- so thank YOU! Proof that this writing challenge and the feedback offered by the community is really very valuable!
      xxx

  • Hi Ben
    Thanks again for the feedback. Yeah that ‘before’ sentence was meant that way but I suppose I need to play around with it to give it more sense. (its me going all Alice In Wonderland down the rabbit hole again)
    Yeah Andy’s grieving stupor is her dark night of the soul- am kind of liking her inertia, its different to write for. I’ll be…[Read more]

  • Hi Ben

    Thanks very much for your comment. Its been a bit of a lonely journey this challenge , and having not much interest/feedback every week does of course make my inner critic behave like the grinch… but I’ve gained, I believe , a sort of accountability to listen to my grinche’s grumblings but carry on regardless and show up for my…[Read more]

  • Hi Jessica
    Haven’t read your work for months but it was lovely getting back into this fantasy folklore world of yours. Certainly much has happened plot wise that I’m unaware of , but nonetheless I can feel Midir’s panic and you’ve created this tension precisely. Would have loved even a slight description of noise or sensation before the last…[Read more]

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