Hi Darci

This is a riveting expose of how easy it must be to rationalise a criminal life and then suffer the consequences. However we may look at such behaviour with disdain, we can so often speak from a place of comfort. You shared the other perspective. I was captivated.

Thank you for sharing.

Martin

Hi Bruce

Great perspective and a lot of fun! I love the interactions between the animals and above all, the message you send. Good take on the prompt too.

Thanks for sharing.

Martin

Hi Darryl

You capture the poignancy so well in this story. The outcome seems inevitable as you draw us into the emotions he writes and how I (I cannot speak for everyone else) so want a better outcome.

It is harrowing and, as we see images of horror on our screens today, reminds us of man’s inhumanity, and the carelessness of those on…[Read more]

Hi Seth

Thank you for reading and leaving your lovely comment. I appreciate it. Best wishes for your own writing.

Martin

Hi David

Thanks for your perceptive experience. I’ll take a look at your suggestion and if it scans to my satisfaction, I may change it 😉

Martin

Hi Christian

Writing the poem coincided with me watching the pageantry of the royal salute on the Queen’s birthday on April 21st in Hyde Park. The sight and sounds of the guns and the horses were stunning.

Thank you for reading and for your words of encouragement.

Martin

Hi Bev

Sadly yes. Though the times have changed, the grim reality of war is still just as pertinent. I’m grateful for your reading the poem!

Martin

Hi Debbie

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I chose the short lines to create that pace and tension.

I appreciate your kind words.

Martin

Hi Juanita

Thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate your reading my poem and that you got to feel my meaning too!

Martin

Hi Jens

Quite. Your poem captures the need for kindness and celebration of the differences about us. Lovely reminder and very well done.

Martin

Hi Susan

Ha! Now that’s a clever take in the prompt. I love so many of the standards from the Nat era!

Martin

Hi Tom

This is a lovely tribute to a sister, supportive of your journey through life’s trial and tribulations. You did a good job in your telling of this.

Martin

Hi Sandy

Great concept around the prompt. I like the awareness, the connections and particularly the philosophy that you draw out.

Martin

Hi Linda

This is a nice compelling scene where we get a good feel for your MC’s character and her relationships with the other players. I like how you set the scene up and then the valuable outcome message.

A good job!

Martin

Hi Nam

I found this a bit of a struggle to read. The repetitive short sentences would benefit from some variety in their length.

There are also quite a few grammatical errors and I appreciate that this could be as English is not your regular language. I don’t mention this to be mean, but it’s important you are aware of it if you want to mak…[Read more]

Hi Sally

This is just right as a short story. Good backstory. Progressive narrative and the little twist at the end. I’d have had to buy something too. Maybe a Chelsea bun.

I enjoyed this.

Martin

Hi Annette

This is a clever storyline. Your parallel running of two very different scenarios leads to the same ending.

Having both in place gives that important sense of perspective, despite the message being the same.

Nice work!

Martin