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  • Happy you liked it. I too have two grown up well balanced kids – it must be becasue we’re amazing parents. LOL. Thanks for the edits – as alwasy…

  • Blood bank? Would that work, as our hero was listing options this one popped into my head. This was a great story. Honora’s compassion and love could be felt in each sentence. The MC’s mad internal scramble/confusion/suspicion from the time he woke up, until the end. But then perhaps it’s not the end because who wrote the story. The burnt twist…[Read more]

  • Michael commented on the post, Failed by Michael James 1 week ago

    Thanks for the read. 🙂 I wasn’t sure if it was clear at the end – the transition I mean. I did want to add plenty drama to mislead a little.

  • Nice. Writing everyday is the trick. I’m considering starting again in June with another 52 scenes. 😉 Maybe a sci-fi.

  • Vicky

    “Just a hundred mom, we going out,” Justin scratched his face, not looking at her.

    He doesn’t even look up.

    The bright light from his phone lit his face with something more interesting.

    Second phone […]

    • Oh wow, Michael! This was so clever! I never imagined what was going on, so caught up in Vicky and Justin’s situation, worrying how it would all end badly, only for you to twist it all up like that, what a fantastic idea! Great job!!!

      • Thanks for the read. 🙂 I wasn’t sure if it was clear at the end – the transition I mean. I did want to add plenty drama to mislead a little.

        • I was a tad confused at the first line of the transition, but by the third line it all made sense and had me twisting down the new path.

    • Hi Michael,
      Wow – definitely a twist at the end. And not what I expected at all. I liked your experiment – cleverly done.
      As a mother of two adult sons – I am so glad neither of them went down this path. Scary shit indeed.

      Two minor edits required in these sentences:
      “Don’t you have any, can’t you get?” Justin asks, he knows the answer.
      Could you image if it didn’t?

      Well done and thanks for sharing:)

      • Happy you liked it. I too have two grown up well balanced kids – it must be becasue we’re amazing parents. LOL. Thanks for the edits – as alwasy…

  • Hey Peggy, nice instalment.
    I really like the smooth transition from the opening to the next bit – with her rushing down the chute. Nice way to get to her perspective too. You’ve put a lot of smart detail in the escape system, and the fact that it had been upgraded is also a sharp addition.
    Your pacing is certainly moving at high speed, con…[Read more]

  • Nice and tight with some great backstory leading to the end. Nice metaphor. I do enjoy these short ones.

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read and kind words. Nice pick up on another of the narrator’s quirks. Happy dreams. 😉

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read, I like that you’ve picked up on that character quirk – madness for sure.

  • Michael commented on the post, Abduction by Deb S. 1 month ago

    This is funny and rather chilling. I like how you’ve alluded to the face that other ‘pets’ have died, or worse just being dropped off on a wild planet somewhere.
    Lovely little horror story in 269 words. 😉

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read and insights on the steroids, I wasn’t even thinking in that direction…

  • Love it, I could imagine the yard, the cat and the loving home you’ve created here. This was a fun story and the voice was done so well. I can almost imagine a longer piece where Betty gets into all sorts of trouble. Nice work. Really sharp. 🙂

  • Michael commented on the post, Tempted by Seyi 1 month ago

    I like the film reference, not all of us (me included) are that sharp. It also created anticiaption and excitement by knowing what might be coming. Me 2 cents. 😉

  • Michael commented on the post, Tempted by Seyi 1 month ago

    That last bit, with his presence of mind to shoot for the window – great ending to this short tale. Funny how mentioning the title o a book / movie sets the environment and expectation up so quickly. Nice idea that and well executed.
    I also liked that bit about the end of the shift, and him taking the call anyway. Immediately tells me things a…[Read more]

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read, and of course there’s an edit – LOL. I swear. Only 300 words and I still mess it up. Happy you enjoyed it. 🙂

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read and high praise (I almost feel unworthy sometimes). 😉 😉 I can tell you it was a lot of fun writing, but took a while to edit down. Many words were lost.

  • Orange must be a favourite colour. 😉 My knowledge and skill with poetry is zero, but I did like this. Was unfamiliar, not sure I’ve seen this done before.
    I also think this would be a good way to describe something unknown like an alien or creature who experiences something then fires off a list of poetic-type thoughts and feelings. It’s a nic…[Read more]

  • I was wondering how you’d manage adding to a longer story with just 300 words. But nice job, it just shows skill using this economic word count to move something along. The idea of no water without power is a good nod to the science fiction of it all too.
    Charles made an excellent suggestion with adding some action to end the scene. That’s a gre…[Read more]

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read! Glad you enjoyed it. These short ones are great.

  • Michael commented on the post, Click by Michael James 1 month ago

    Thanks for the read and kind words! 🙂

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