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  • Questions by Marcena Hooks

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    I teach my kids:

    Do not say “How come?”

    Ask why

    Or ask

    “What do you think?”

    Just so the answer

    Has the potential

    Of not being so

    Rhetorical or

    Short

    Yes or no

    Is not eno […]

    • Hi Marcena. Very clever. I think you might be right. They may still ask:) But some clever lessons being taught there:) Well done and thanks for sharing.

    • Hello Marcena. I like your poem – it brings back to me how things were in my own family all those years ago (and the struggles my children now have with their own off-spring). Well done for invoking the age-old problem of trying to explain without being too dogmatic. I can assure you the children will grow to understand!

  • Some Girls have all the Hair by Marcena Hooks

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    As a little girl Carmena always dreamt of having long hair. She had fantasized about being best friends with the Disney princess Rapunzel. She could picture […]

    • Wow, this is really interesting. I feel like you could draw this out and it could be a much longer piece. Almost every paragraph could be a little episode. It’s fairytale-like with the hair obsession and bitter irony. Cool

    • Hi Marcena,
      That was a unique take on the prompt. The long hair was possibly a metaphor for Carmena-of being well, or maybe being connected to other women in the family because they would make use of the treasured family comb and brush set.I liked the characterization of Ralph, he was a believable older brother who cared for her, looked after her and was also very annoyed by her. It was a sweet relationship. You showed Delilah’s kindness well, I liked the bit about her leaning into Ralph and ask him to indulge his sister. I also liked the minute information you gave about the hair brush being passed on for generations and its significance to the family , particularly since her mother had died. You gave a lot of details about how Carmena loved to think about hair and play with hair and that she was totally absorbed in it, but it would be interesting to learn about how it made her feel more than saying that it soothed her.
      I picked up 2 typos: In this sentence, “Carmena had he special comb and brush set with her already,…”
      It should be her special comb and the father’s hair was coarse.
      Your story was quite unpredictable and held my attention well.
      A good read.

    • The emotion is strong. Well done with a good story

    • I think it’s time for her to pass on the brush and comb set to her daughter.

      This was an engaging read and one that had plenty of opportunities to make me think.

      Thanks for sharing.

    • Hi Marcena this is very interesting and an unusual ending – a mother envying her own child. The language had a very fairy tale feel to it somehow – I enjoyed the easy read.

    • Hi I liked the idea that one can be jealous of hair, it is an original take on the prompt. The story is well developed and you managed to delve into Carmena’s feelings and thoughts. I always appreciate stories where authors confront people’s pain and suffering. Well done!

  • Hello Christian, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am grateful that you read it. Unfortunately racism is prevalent and so many go unfree.

  • Amen to that hope! We have to hold on. So many of our forefathers and foremothers have died and we are still not free. Thanks for reading and commenting Poem Crush.

  • Poem Crush and Profile picture of MarcenaMarcena are now friends 4 weeks ago

  • Hello Jane, you found my little poem. 🙂 Thanks for reading and giving feedback. My thoughts on dying to find freedom: sometimes I think death is an answer to freedom, even when it’s murder or if someone dies unfairly or has to suffer. Dying in those ways is very unfortunate. Death is so final and in a way I see it as being totally free. It is…[Read more]

  • Hello Deryn, and thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate it. I agree, many are not free even in our “free country/world/America”. Sad but true.

  • Hello Stevie, and thanks for reading and giving such thorough feedback. And yes, it does feel like there is no winning in some current situations. So glad you got it that I was using American flag colors. 😉 that wasn’t intentional at first, but it seemed to fit. My feeling was the blue=cops; red=blood; white=right/freedom, etc., brown/black=the…[Read more]

  • Yes I did one, but posted late. It’s called “Freedom’s Colors”. Hope you can find it.

  • Freedom’s Colors by Marcena Hooks

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    What is freedom?

    The ability to come and go

    Do as you please

    We supposedly live in a free country

    What does true freedom mean really?

    But that those in power

    Still ooze […]

    • The song of every person who has faced injustice and an apt commentary on the current situation – many times it feels like the marginalised will never win. I like how you used colours to break down the different parts (the American flag I suppose?) It works really well and hit powerfully for me. I also like the irregular flow of the words. Small suggestion is to break the line must one be held captive/To know what true freedom is to match the second part of your piece. I love it

      • Hello Stevie, and thanks for reading and giving such thorough feedback. And yes, it does feel like there is no winning in some current situations. So glad you got it that I was using American flag colors. 😉 that wasn’t intentional at first, but it seemed to fit. My feeling was the blue=cops; red=blood; white=right/freedom, etc., brown/black=the marginalised…This went deep for me and I’m glad you could relate. I will certainly consider your suggestion in breaking up that line.

    • Deryn replied 1 month ago

      Hi Marcena – Freedom is indeed a much debated concept – who is truly free? Even in the so called ‘ free world’ many are not. Hard hitting. Well done.

      • Hello Deryn, and thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate it. I agree, many are not free even in our “free country/world/America”. Sad but true.

    • Jane replied 1 month ago

      Wow Marcena, powerful stuff. I truly hope that people do not have to die to find freedom. This is very pertinent with all the ‘black lives matter’ rallies etc. going on throughout the world. It is sad to think that a person does not feel safe to walk the streets of their home due to the colour of their skin. Very unfair. You have captured the inequality of racial freedom. Well done.

      • Hello Jane, you found my little poem. 🙂 Thanks for reading and giving feedback. My thoughts on dying to find freedom: sometimes I think death is an answer to freedom, even when it’s murder or if someone dies unfairly or has to suffer. Dying in those ways is very unfortunate. Death is so final and in a way I see it as being totally free. It is very sad to fear something as simple as walking in your neighborhood. Again sad but true. I have this fear as a mother and wife. We hope for better days ahead.

        • Jane replied 4 weeks ago

          Hi Marcena, yes I did manage to find it a couple of days ago:) And I guess dying is the ultimate freedom – especially if your existence is full of pain, from illness, or emotional, or mental struggles. As long as you believe in some form of afterlife:)

    • We can only hope that we don’t have to keep dying for a freedom that was once died for. This is a powerful piece — well done!

      • Amen to that hope! We have to hold on. So many of our forefathers and foremothers have died and we are still not free. Thanks for reading and commenting Poem Crush.

    • Hi Marcena, Your poem is a very powerful indictment of all racists and their policies. I feel privileged to have read it. Thank you for sharing the poem.

      • Hello Christian, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am grateful that you read it. Unfortunately racism is prevalent and so many go unfree.

    • I love the staccato fall of this poem. I feel it would have great impact when read aloud. I like the words you chose to speak for your chosen subject. It’s sad that it’s still one we need to speak about. Great job

  • Hello Beth,
    I appreciate your thorough comments and feedback. My crazy thoughts kind of came to fruition in this little story. 😉 Women do notice stuff, OMG. I agree that Michael should have been honest sooner. I like the idea you bring about the family knowing about the kiss; I didn’t think of that but I may use it once I can get all the thoughts…[Read more]

  • Hello Jane,
    Well I tried to make it entertaining so I’m glad you recognized the twists and turns. Even with more words, it was still hard to convey everything. I’m glad you got your questions answered. I will take note of your editing suggestions if I develop this further or expand on it. I was trying to say that 8 years ago and now (present day)…[Read more]

  • Hi Jane, and thanks for this tidbit of info on the sonnet. I will keep it as a ref. And yes to our parents always being in our hearts. I was 33 for mom and 38 for daddy.

  • Hello Beth, and thank you for reading and commenting. I didn’t want Michael to come across as weak but it was inevitable. I may work on that more and change dialogue around later. 😉 And that darn Charlene is quite unlikable. Ha ha

  • Hello Ellie,
    This is an emotional story poem and good take on the prompt. I like your repeated lines of I see/I hear/I touch. For me, that set the beat and tone of the poem. I did get confused in the middle since it started out about the tea. After reading all of it and getting through to the end, it made more sense. I’m not questioning your…[Read more]

  • Hi Mia,
    This hit home and I used a couple of your lines in my poem. Promise I didn’t read yours before I wrote or posted mine. 😉 You bring to our attention how messed up society can be. Nicely done, our fearless leader.

  • Hello Francis,
    Freedom is indeed a blessed thought. Thanks for sharing this in these times, and saying their names. This truly hits home. Great work.

  • Hello Chantel,
    This is so beautiful, and I feel it’s a tribute or ode to someone important so that they know their worth. I loved your use of imagery and descriptions plus your use of the prompt. Maybe one is free when they can dance where God has breathed. I loved the compare/contrast of the person to other objects. Well done and I’d like to read…[Read more]

  • Hello Stevie,
    What a powerful story poem this is. Just wow. It brings back memories of what my mom must have felt, or anyone who has gone through this. I enjoyed your take on the prompt, freedom and victory for this person at the end. I love your word choices like “beaming doctors”, “litany of ailments”, “the tumor is dead” and “pall of cancer”. I…[Read more]

  • Powerful haiku Deryn.

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