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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Calculated Recklessness by Christian Donovan 1 day, 9 hours ago
Hi Christian,
Gosh, that was descriptive. I could see it in my mind’s eye. Could smell and feel it. Your lines were action-packed and flowed like a Flamenco. Very good stuff! Thank you. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 9 hours ago
Hi Christian,
Thank you for your kind comments. I’m glad you think the repetitive first line is effective. It’s one of these ideas that just came. I hadn’t originally planned it like that. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 9 hours ago
Hi Cathy,
Thank you so much for your kind comments. That was the sense I wanted to put across. That the knocking is persistent but not intrusive. I’m so happy that came across. I love the painting. It’s one of my favourites. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 14 hours ago
Thank you, Jane. I’m glad you liked it.
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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 14 hours ago
Thank you, Sherry, for your kind words.
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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, The Blind Man's Meal by Pam Muller 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Pam,
This was such an atmospheric poem. I loved it. I had never viewed the painting before so I Googled it to get a closer look. The verses capture the poignancy of the man’s situation together with the practicing of his faith. Thank you for a moving read. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Pam,
Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. I’m pleased that you ‘got’ what I was trying to accomplish. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Infinity Mirrors by Zannie Rose 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Zannie,
This is interesting. It’s the second acrostic poem in this prompt I’ve read and seems to fit well with the descriptive demands of the ekphrastic poem. A mind-blowing read. Thank you. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Moon Kissed Ocean by Jane Bradshaw 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Jane,
This was very clever. I liked the acrostic form and how you were able to describe the painting through it. I must admit, I did wonder how long it must have took you. It doesn’t look easy. Thank you for a fascinating read. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Starry Night by Cathy 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Cathy,
Some beautiful verse here and great descriptions.. This is one of my favourite paintings and I think you did it justice. Thank you for an enchanting read. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Reflections on Twilight Scene by Sherry 1 day, 17 hours ago
Hi Sherry,
I enjoyed your poem. It described the picture shown. It was interesting that you include something about the artist. I hadn’t thought of doing that. Nice one. -
Maria Kinnersley wrote a new post, He Knocks by Maria Kinnersley 1 day, 18 hours ago
He Knocks (An Ekphrastic)
He knocks.
Is there an answer from within?
The weeds and wear show an unused door,
Not opened onto the bleakness of the outside.
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He knocks.
There is no other way.
The door […]
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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, New Experiences by Maria Kinnersley (The Messenger Series No. 17) 3 days, 9 hours ago
Hi Jane,
Thank you so much for your comments. It’s very cheering when I read that someone is enjoying this series. I know I’ve said it before but I never intended to write another series. It just happened. I’m finding it great fun.
Your comment about changing the word urged to heaved is a good one. I was trying to think of an alternative and…[Read more] -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Fiery Dawn by Jane Bradshaw 3 days, 9 hours ago
They’re by Deborah Harkness and are about vampires, humans, witches and daemons, although Times Convert is mainly about vampires. Very interesting.
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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Permanent, by Seyi 6 days, 9 hours ago
Hi Seyi,
I cheered when I saw it was a Ministry of Power story. It was great fun, a hugely enjoyable story. The mental picture I have of Abu in the bar will stay with me for quite a while. Thank you for a great story. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, New Experiences by Maria Kinnersley (The Messenger Series No. 17) 6 days, 9 hours ago
Hi Seyi,
All’s well here. Hope all is well with you.
Thank you very much for your suggestions. I agree with you about the second sentence. I might split that into shorter sentences. And the other sentence could be better worded. I’m pleased you are still following this series and that it has interested you. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Intergalactic exhibit by Bogdana Tepavicharova 1 week ago
Hi Bogdana,
Now this was a truly alien piece and I don’t mean in a bad way. It was very descriptive and full of word pictures. Would I be right in that it was a stream of consciousness piece. Very brave and interesting. I will probably have to come back for another read. Thank you for stretching my mind a bit. It was a fascinating story. -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, Nothing's Permanent by S.K. DuBois 1 week ago
Hi Sorchia,
I liked this. I felt reading this that I could see a TV series of these dear women going on adventures together. It made me smile and is still doing so. I don’t think you should feel lukewarm about it at all. I loved the way it went from mundane daily jobs (the rose bushes made me smile) to ‘action person’ stuff. Thank you for a…[Read more] -
Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, New Experiences by Maria Kinnersley (The Messenger Series No. 17) 1 week ago
Thank you, Sorchia. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
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Maria Kinnersley commented on the post, New Experiences by Maria Kinnersley (The Messenger Series No. 17) 1 week ago
Hi Susan,
Thank you for your kind comments. They are much appreciated. To be honest, although I had thought a lot about the prompt, I only got to work on it bout three days before we were due to upload it, so it felt a bit rushed and a bit rough. I’m still ‘playing’ with the alien I’m creating here. When I was writing he took me off in a totally…[Read more] - Load More
Hi Maria,
The repeated line, ‘He knocks’ is very effective, just like a person knocking and knocking at the unopened door. Both the painting and your poem tell the story of Christ knocking to be allowed into the individual’s life. Freedom to open the door from the inside is what we are shown. Thank you for sharing.
Hi Pam,
Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. I’m pleased that you ‘got’ what I was trying to accomplish.
Hi Maria, I like your choice of artwork. I also really liked the way you chose to set your poem out, in short verses with the beginning line repeating (as Pam said below). I grew up going to the Anglican church and a Christian School – so I am familiar with Jesus and his all-encompassing love. I feel the way you wrote this poem reaches out with that kindness, forgiveness, compassion, and eternal love that Jesus has for all. Well done:)
Thank you, Jane. I’m glad you liked it.
I like the repetition of the first line. It somehow focused my attention to the rest of the poem.
Thank you, Sherry, for your kind words.
Hello Maria,
The repetition of ‘He knocks’ is very effective and makes me want to know why. Your final verse explains all. Well done and thanks for sharing.
Hi Christian,
Thank you for your kind comments. I’m glad you think the repetitive first line is effective. It’s one of these ideas that just came. I hadn’t originally planned it like that.
You’ve explained a lot of detail that I probably wouldn’t even have noticed. Your poem conveys a sense of steadfast persistence and unfailing patience, and an eventual awakening of the listener to the knock.
(Like when you suddenly realise the mobile phone ringing in someone’s bag is yours.)
Hi Cathy,
Thank you so much for your kind comments. That was the sense I wanted to put across. That the knocking is persistent but not intrusive. I’m so happy that came across. I love the painting. It’s one of my favourites.