• Yes, we’re all fine, thank you.

  • Hi Seyi,
    Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your kind comments. Yes, at some point we will find out how Vitora eluded capture (or rather, escaped), but for the last two prompts, I have been exploring the Viparan’s character and physique. It’s more difficult than I had anticipated. I’m glad you enjoyed the piece. I’m hoping to…[Read more]

  • Hi Jane,
    This is developing into a fascinating story. I really enjoyed this instalment which highlighted the developing power of the triplets together with the mystery of the fungal storm bypassing the security systems. I want to know what happens next. It’s turning into a thriller of a story. Thanks for a great read.

  • Hi Jane,
    Thanks so much for your kind comments. They were really good to read. I’m thinking at the moment that Andy may well appear in the next piece. We shall see:-) Glad you enjoyed your read.

  • Hi Susan,
    Thank you for taking the time to read this. Your comments are so encouraging and kind. I’m so glad you liked Vitora. He is still a work in progress as is his world. As I’ve mentioned before, it was never my intention to make a series of this, but I’m beginning to think I may have a novel being developed here. Thank you again for your…[Read more]

  • Hi Seyi,
    How goes it?
    I have to say, I wasn’t confused. I loved the realism of it together with the descriptions. And, as always, the trademark ‘tongue in cheek’ which gives humour to your piece. It was well paced and enjoyable. Thanks for a delightful read.

  • Hi Susan,
    A highly enjoyable story and one read with a smile. I too loved the solicitor firm’s name, very credible. The twist at the end was unexpected with there being nothing left for the family because of equity release. And just the right amount of humour. Thanks for a great read.

  • Hi Barbara,
    I loved this. I well remember the John Darwin case and it was clever to base that on him. I must admit in that first sentence, I thought he was a ghost. But perhaps, I was meant to think that😊. Brilliant. The dialogue was enjoyable and the ending rounded off an excellent story. Well done.

  • Hi Barbara,
    Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and for your helpful comments. As I mentioned in the comments section, this series is an experiment. I didn’t anticipate writing another series using this online platform and I’m still feeling my way on this. Yes, the International Space Agency is the Earth organisation and I do agree…[Read more]

  • Hi Sorchia,
    Oh wow! I’ve waited hours to read your piece and I wasn’t disappointed. It was a really great, darkly humorous story. I loved it. Great build-up and a wonderful last line. Thanks for a very entertaining read.

  • No problem. I thought it would be to treat the male of this race as the weaker gender.😊

  • Thank you, Amrita for your kind comments. This series is taking a bit of work to put together but I’m enjoying it and I’m glad that you like it and have taken the time to read it. One thing though; Vitora is male😎.

  • Hi Michael,
    I enjoyed this. I especially liked the description of Rostick’s home. I could see it in my mind’s eye. Jenvik is also a fascinating character. Thanks for such an absorbing read.

  • Thank you, Michael, for taking the time to read it. I’m glad you liked it. I’m still developing Vitora and his race, but I’ll get there.

  • Hi Marilyn,
    What a beautiful story. I was moved by it. Sara seems to have had a hard life. A very poignant twist at the end though. Thank you for a lovely read.

  • Hi Nina,
    What an enchanting piece. I can imagine you telling the tale. There were some beautiful descriptions of the woods where Pubbs found herself and the unicorns. I loved it. Thank you for a lovely children’s story. We all have a child within us, don’t we?

  • Hi Gold,
    I do like this. It has more than a hint of black humour in it and was very enjoyable. You gave a wonderful image of Lidia, who was very self centred, but not half as bad as her mother. Only one small thing – you wrote ‘There conditions on the care of Buster’. Should it be ‘There are conditions on the care of Buster’? Thanks for a very…[Read more]

  • Hi Amrita,
    Great story. I really enjoyed reading this continuation. You had some lovely descriptive passages, like when you compared the three sister and talked about Tahir’s feeling for Lisa. (I’m not sure I would like my husband to compare his feelings for me like a Big Mac though😊). I could also feel the tension brewing between Rishi and Tahir…[Read more]

  • Hi Sorchia,
    Thanks so much for your kind comments. I still need to round out the viparans physique and character. I’m not quite there yet. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking the time to read it.

  • Conspiracy?

    It was only after he had eaten one of Pam’s unsatisfying meals that the memory had come to him.

    He gave a soft ‘huff’ as he thought about the food provider. It wasn’t her fault he thought. As the fem […]

    • Nicely done! The dialogue works and all the little ‘alien’ bits add to this character’s development. It’s what good sci-fi should be–different enough to be interesting but ‘human’ enough to be relatable. Well written and paced perfectly.

      • Hi Sorchia,
        Thanks so much for your kind comments. I still need to round out the viparans physique and character. I’m not quite there yet. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking the time to read it.

    • Growing in depth and intrigue, I liked it.

      Thanks for sharing.

      • Thank you, Michael, for taking the time to read it. I’m glad you liked it. I’m still developing Vitora and his race, but I’ll get there.

    • Hi Maria,
      An intergalactic thriller! You really are coming up with a great narrative. I am really glad to see that what started as an interested human-alien interaction, now has turned into a delicious complex story. Your characters, especially Vitora, is the one to look out for. I really liked how you have created her character arc. Waiting for more! Thank you for sharing!

      • Thank you, Amrita for your kind comments. This series is taking a bit of work to put together but I’m enjoying it and I’m glad that you like it and have taken the time to read it. One thing though; Vitora is male😎.

    • Very intriguing that now we see Vitora is the anointed leader of his nation. I couldn’t help wondering, though, at the fact that the assembly – with the exception of the aunt – seemed to have accepted the breaching of the tradition without any dissent. But maybe that’s the nature of the society. One question – is the International Space Agency the Earth organisation? If so, I wonder what makes Vitor seem a bigger threat to Earth than Senta herself? Lots of questions – I’m waiting eagerly to see how you bring the threads together. I like the embedded descriptions of the alien forms – e.g. Vica yelps as a way to draw attention. There are some parts, though, where I felt there was a bit of unnecessary telling, for example – “The surface was similar to all dwellings there”. The word “there” takes me out of Vitor’s memory and into the author’s POV. All in all, though, roll on the next episode!

      • Hi Barbara,
        Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and for your helpful comments. As I mentioned in the comments section, this series is an experiment. I didn’t anticipate writing another series using this online platform and I’m still feeling my way on this. Yes, the International Space Agency is the Earth organisation and I do agree that there is some unnecessary telling scattered around. But I’m enjoying exploring at the moment. I must get down to thinking up a solid plot. I do have some ideas. I need to work on them. I’m glad it’s kept your interest.

    • Hi Maria.. I congratulate you on making this a complete story, while progressing the overall plot in such a satisfying way. I had missed August’s episode and was sufficiently intrigued by this instalment to go back and find it. This tale is a clever juxtaposition of the world we know and an alien culture. I liked the subtle auditory hints which remind us how extremely alien Vitora’s world is: ‘he gave a small “huff”, ”he snuffed to himself’, ‘the Queen gave a small yelp’. As we all know sensory descriptions enhance a story but not too many people integrate sounds to shape characters – this is beautifully done and when combined with hints about Vitora’s appetite and his physical attributes makes this character leap into life. I do think it’s interesting that he’s been named as the next ruler when he seems to have very little experience or even confidence in his abilities – and I’m already wondering why this was done and what will happen as a result. This novel will be a great page turner I think.

      • Hi Susan,
        Thank you for taking the time to read this. Your comments are so encouraging and kind. I’m so glad you liked Vitora. He is still a work in progress as is his world. As I’ve mentioned before, it was never my intention to make a series of this, but I’m beginning to think I may have a novel being developed here. Thank you again for your encouragement. It has come at just the right time.

    • Hi Maria, I really enjoyed this installment. I liked going back in Vitoria’s memories to learn a bit more about him and his kind. The descriptions are good and I like how you use seeing organs, instead of eyes. I hope Andy calls home soon and that they can find some way to alert I’m to Vitoria’s presence without alerting the International Space Agency. All in all, I found it very interesting and can’t wait to read the next installment.

      • Hi Jane,
        Thanks so much for your kind comments. They were really good to read. I’m thinking at the moment that Andy may well appear in the next piece. We shall see:-) Glad you enjoyed your read.

    • Seyi replied 1 week ago

      Hey again Maria and great to see your storyline accelerating away. I laughed out loud at the Queen’s uncomplimentary reference to ‘the other sex.’ Like the other commenters, I like the Viparan’s vocal effects and the vocabulary you are developing for them. I thought you might need a stronger explanation for how Vitora had eluded capture so far but I get that you are feeling your way through the finer details right now. I am also looking forward to hearing from Andy and the ISA up in space. Well done and very best regards, Seyi

      • Hi Seyi,
        Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your kind comments. Yes, at some point we will find out how Vitora eluded capture (or rather, escaped), but for the last two prompts, I have been exploring the Viparan’s character and physique. It’s more difficult than I had anticipated. I’m glad you enjoyed the piece. I’m hoping to go back to Andy with the next prompt, so see you then:-).

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