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  • Hi Jane. A very well structured acrostic poem you created. Beautifully written. Well done . Lourens

  • Hi Mia. A very cute little acrostic poem. Naughty & Nice! Lourens

  • Hi Sharon. Thank for your comment. FireHeart is a actually a character I created a few years ago. He is a boy and it’s based on my life with added fantasy.
    If you see some of my previous poems titled FireHeart you will get a better understanding of the character FireHeart. Lourens

  • FIREHEART : by Lourens Lukas Moorcroft

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    From a Fuse grew a flame
    The boy with fIre in his name
    Born to Rise, above the rest
    Its FirehEart, the boy so blessed
    With a blazing Heart of fire
    With Sparkling eyes, two […]

    • Thank you for your poem. I have never seen an acrostic poem written with the letters inside the stanzas. It took me a minute until I saw the boldface letters. I want to be positive, but I am not sure what a Fireheart is, so I didn’t understand it very well. Is your poem about space as I saw references to stars and Mars. Thanks again, Sharon

    • Hi Sharon. Thank for your comment. FireHeart is a actually a character I created a few years ago. He is a boy and it’s based on my life with added fantasy.
      If you see some of my previous poems titled FireHeart you will get a better understanding of the character FireHeart. Lourens

    • Hi Lourens, so very clever:) I have heard of Acrostics written this way but have never attempted to write one myself. I like how you have set it out and I love the imagery you create. Your Fireheart poems are always beautiful:) Well done.

    • I love this! What a great take on the Acrostic form. I have read your other Fireheart writings and wonder if one day it will all go in a book? The last line makes me think perhaps . . . when one day Fireheart will soar into print for all to read. Again, I love your use of the Acrostic. Clever and original. Well done.

    • Hi Lourens,
      From the other comments and your replies, I see this is part of a series about Fireheart. It will fit neatly into an epic poem I feel. It made me look up the word nebula and realise how relevant that is. Well done.

  • Hi All. Thanks for your great comments and taking time to read my poem.

    this is my own description/ created in my Awakening blog based on my awakening

    There lies a brief moment of synchronicity
    just before an awakening
    I simply called it
    “the reaching”
    it lies in one simultaneous moment
    where your final point of departure (asleep)
    meets…[Read more]

  • Hi Karina. A very poignant and beautifully written poem about your interpretation of the prompt. Well done. Lourens

  • I agree. The format was unusual yet very creative non the less. I personally connected with the numbers and Spiritual meanings of them especially in title waking up at 3.32am! Spiritual Awakened myself , I fully understand the number 333am. Etc. Just my take on poem. Very well written poem. Lourens

  • THE REACHING by Lourens Lukas Moorcroft#only one stormbegins and endswith the reaching outof one same handin that moment ofawakening calmlies the reaching outof that one same armwith one reachI drownedwith one […]

    • I think your poem is about Grace and the one hand reaching out is God’s hand? I could have read this differently. Loved it. Simple and to the point.

      Shae

    • Hi Lourens, I like your poem, very short, beautifully set out and a great choice of words. I am not entirely sure of the meaning. Whether as Shae has said it is reaching out to God, or whether it is simply meaning that if you go one way you are free if you go the other you will drown (not literally).
      Either way I really enjoyed it:)
      One small suggestion. You have no punctuation as a choice – but somehow a random full stop has crept it. Probably best to remove it. It is on the fourth line:)

    • This is fascinating. It reminds me a bit of Robert Frost’s ‘The Road not Taken’ – the options you have in life and where they might lead you. Well done for making the reader ponder!

    • Lovely Imagery

    • Image of a hand reaching out is powerful. I especially like the juxtaposition of “drowned…found freedom.”

      Nicely done!

    • Hi All. Thanks for your great comments and taking time to read my poem.

      this is my own description/ created in my Awakening blog based on my awakening

      There lies a brief moment of synchronicity
      just before an awakening
      I simply called it
      “the reaching”
      it lies in one simultaneous moment
      where your final point of departure (asleep)
      meets
      the your new point of arrival (awake)

  • T iming was divine
    A wakening to find
    K aleidoscope colors symbolize
    E nlightentment aligned
    N ew higher self shine

    • Lovely, Lourens. A new beginning to a higher self. This reads of hope and unexplored horizons.

    • Beautiful acrostic Lourens. I love the awakening to enlightenment and the bright shining possibilities. It leaves me feeling hopeful which is sorely needed in these times.

      Thanks for sharing.

    • This is a very neat acrostic poem which develops its message in so few words. Well done.

    • Hi Lourens, what a powerful and positive Acrostic poem. Well done.

  • Thank You so so much for all your wonderful comments. Honestly that was probably the easiest prompt to write. Yes Lumon is in fact a galaxy I created
    Well done to everyone, I’m going to be reading yours tonight. Lourens

  • After the Legion returned to Lumon a blackened ashy mist settled fastThe Land of Dreams was now gone.and yet alone he stood, his sword still drawnthe mayhem destroyed all dreams in a blastafter the Legion returned […]

    • A very nice poem and rhythm is also good. The dream was now gone very catchy line. Thank you Lukas

    • That was different.
      It worked well with the structure: nice one

    • Kim replied 7 months ago

      I’m impressed that you were able to carry your ongoing theme/story through to this form, very well done.

      I liked the impending doom conveyed by the repeating lines:
      after the legion returned to Lumon
      the Land of Dreams was now gone

      ‘Lumon’ worked very nicely in your favour!

    • great composition here, incident , historic, well expressed

    • Jane replied 7 months ago

      Hi Lourens, I am very impressed. As Kim said you managed a hard poetic form and still managed to continue with Fireheart. Well done:)

    • I looked up the word, Lumon. I came up empty handed. After giving your piece a second and third read I came to the conclusion that the army was returning home. The name of home was Lumon.
      The continuing line below I found to be a brilliant, metaphor the reader has to decipher that the battle was lost.
      The Land of Dreams was now gone.

      Great work.

    • I love your fantasy story set in poetry, and I think it works really well with this format. There’s such a sense of loss and devastation to these lines, yet FireHeart never loses hope, never gives up, he goes on, even though the land of Dreams is gone. This is beautiful, the rhythm carries the reader at a fast pace through powerful and emotional imagery.

    • Thank You so so much for all your wonderful comments. Honestly that was probably the easiest prompt to write. Yes Lumon is in fact a galaxy I created
      Well done to everyone, I’m going to be reading yours tonight. Lourens

  • The world that we live in right now, has turned into the most deadliest place for a human being to be living in. Without a doubt!Everyday,every single day, all the news channels around the globe, spews out […]

    • I love the poetic rhythm of this piece. I don’t think you need ‘when’ in–Living in lockdown until when we think it’s safe? And I don’t think you need the second ‘even’ in–even that is impossible to even fathom or believe.

    • Hi. 🙂 I agree with the above mentioned (comment by Chase).
      Also — I believe you meant to write “inkling” (a slight knowledge or suspicion; a hint.) in the last paragraph? Or was it supposed to be “inchling” (a small being of a kind likely to grow larger)?
      Alas. I can appreciate that your piece of writing is not completely hopeless… 😉

  • Thank you so much for reading it Maria. Yeah I think now is a time of much needed love and healing globally. Will definitely read your poem. Take care. Lourens

  • Every day we meet
    but today we need to speak
    on our earth, we all call home
    every day we face
    the fearful unknown

    as my two barefeet touch down
    onto her firm gentle ground
    with a few guided steps
    I take a […]

    • I also did Mother Earth. This is a great take on the prompt. We never think that we all meet in the same place, everyday.

      Great job!

    • Thank you so much for reading it Maria. Yeah I think now is a time of much needed love and healing globally. Will definitely read your poem. Take care. Lourens

    • Hi Lourens!
      Such a light hearted poem in these dark times. Thank you, a reminder that we can choose to look around and just breathe as we remember that she is with us!

    • Yes, especially now in this time of disconnect. How easy we forget that we all beings on this earth. A very nice and timely poem with a comforting rhythm.

    • Jane replied 8 months ago

      Yours is the warm and nurturing Mother Earth Lourens. It is a good time to stop and reflect and take in some calmness. Thanks for sharing.

    • Hi Lourens,
      This will work well as a meditation. And the last stanza is very powerful. Thank you for this.

    • Thank you All. Lourens

  • After our hour long session, 50 minutes of which I was the only one literally talking non stop. Finally, after all that, Sarah sat there, her jaw about to hit the floor and her only response to me was “Ok Lourens, […]

    • Hi Lourens,
      Therapy is wonderful. I’m so glad you found a good person to listen and help. Great story for 200 words. Thanks for sharing.
      Nits; Your first sentence is a fragment. Your great kicker sentence, “I just gave you the tools”, seems like it’s missing a comma or a period before continuing with, “You my friend, did all …”. Just my opinion.

      – Ismael

    • Well that sounds like it’s from the heart! I like the tone- more like a memory than a story.

    • Hi Lourens,
      That one came from a deep place.
      I might do a double-take on a missing comma around the 2nd you in the last sentence, but otherwise, nice work.
      Thank you for sharing.
      Cheers,
      Paul

    • This was really lovely. It sort of cake full circle where is started with the end, then went to the beginning, then back to the end, I liked that!

  • Thank you so much for taking time to read my story.
    Appreciate it. Lourens

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  • Oh No! Such a tender sweet story about Sam. My heart was breaking as I read your story. Sad to lose a beautiful pet. Well written. Well done.. Lourens

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