I love this concept! It is quite timely and a lovely gesture. I hope you’ll consider expanding on this piece to include dialogue and the group dynamics of these generous ladies.

The last line made me laugh! One thing I got confused about was the mention of WW2 era war but lots of references of to trench warfare in WW1. I’m not an expert, but this might be something you’d want to revisit if you choose to work with or expand this. Nicely done overall!

Sometimes you just need a treat. You write about some realistic feelings and urges–I could feel for the protagonist throughout!

A fun take on the prompt. I can see the car looping around in my mind. Nicely done!

The last line of this story made me laugh out loud. The family dynamic is realistic and fun. Well done!

Definitely! Thank you for reading.

I appreciate you reading it all the same!

Thank you!

Thank you Ellen, for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read!

Thank you for your kind suggestions, Seyi, and for reading!

I’m also thinking of how this idea could develop! Thank you for reading.

It’s tough to write something substantial with only 200 words, but I was a little confused as to who was speaking when with so much dialogue untagged. That said, I really appreciated the dynamic you created between two friends who clearly like each other a lot. Nice!

A tight little thriller with a great concept. Excellent!

What a quick burst of sunshine at the end. I would love to see this fleshed out or further developed.

This was very sweet. I have a few of these pictures tucked away myself. The use of dialogue was excellent and I loved the subtle mood shifts. Nicely done!

Thank you! I appreciate your helpful notes.

Thank you! I’m older than this demographic, so I usually just watch these videos with a bemused expression.

Thanks for reading, Maggie!