• Great scene!…
    …next!

  • This has the feel of a biblical Exodus….
    next!…

  • Hi Peggy
    I have so much to cstch up on,so I’m binge reading…will comment at your most recent one…
    ….loving your story 👍🏻

  • 👍🏻 yaa,she’s just lacking that special something…not a personable character. But,thats only my opinion also 😉

  • Kim commented on the post, Russian Roulette by Kim 1 week ago

    so agree with you Pam.
    the pessimist in me thinks we’re doomed…

  • Kim commented on the post, Russian Roulette by Kim 1 week ago

    you know me Chantelle – subtlety isn’t my forte

  • Kim commented on the post, Russian Roulette by Kim 1 week ago

    Loved yours too ! 🤗

  • Kim commented on the post, Russian Roulette by Kim 1 week ago

    agree with you Jane – will change it on my copy. Thank you!

  • Kim commented on the post, Russian Roulette by Kim 1 week ago

    Nostradamus and the rest got it wrong – its not fire that will kill us but man’s own hubris

  • 😁 you’ve gone deep Teresa !!!
    yes the hourglass is obvious . I didnt get the ‘autumn’ of one’s life – waiting to die – how bleak. but also how true.
    I’d rather die in an accident – quick, relatively young , with not an inkling of what the hell just happened.
    and yes!!! how did it suddenly become Oct – and next week Nov !! I feel very unprepared…[Read more]

  • This is an interesting read. There is a whole backstory of regret that intrigues and speaks to some fallout between lovers?
    I had to look up Hogmanay and now realize the significence that time has passed and the planned celebrations never took place.
    And I’ve also never heard of pamander balls but I definitely want to make some now!
    A great…[Read more]

  • Like June says – stripping the individual and leaving only that which defines their purpose of being in that hospital room – such a great technique!
    I really enjoyed this – so clever
    and you somehow imbued the poem with this creeping feeling of dread so that at the end that weak heart really becomes most sinister .
    Brilliant!

  • personification? agree – its very effective, whatever its called

  • you’ve captured an essence of wasteland, of dreamwalking in one’s sleep – it’s in your evocative choice of words and imagery!it quite surreal
    this one requires several rereads for it to absorb in
    my favourite lines : ‘shadows seizing your eye ‘ and ‘ straight roads lined with middle age ‘ – the break in that line just lends itself perfectly…[Read more]

  • this was poignant
    another reality perhaps?
    at 2nd glance it looks like an Acrostic form ?? No Way?? – that made me smile!

    I would end , quite simply, just with the single word ‘You’ – it packs more of a punch that way and doesnt need the qualifier of ‘only you’
    Nicely done!

  • So good
    All those visual references to a beating are just sublime.
    Only you can make abuse sound poetic Megs !
    Brilliant 👏👏👏

  • Hi Chloe
    After your kind comment on my poem I had to see how you handled the same theme.
    The repetition throughtout is very effective and the turning point in your last stanza is especially poignant.
    You said it exactly right , but will we learn in time and adjust our course?
    God alone only knows 🙏

    Great work!❤

  • .
    Another round of skirting the issue,
    of flirting …with ecological disaster:
    allowing the planet to heat up faster and faster
     
    Another round of talk talk talk,
    summits and séance’s, same old same shi […]

    • Hello Kim! Loved this. Seems as though we followed very similar themes. Your poem looks very professional as well. I think you told a great story and chose your words carefully. Thanks for sharing

    • Another topical poem, Kim. I like how the words carry the theme of your poem throughout. The Devil’s roulette is the perfect image to go with this – it’s all a bit hellish. Sometimes we have to say it like it is!

      • Kim replied 1 week ago

        you know me Chantelle – subtlety isn’t my forte

    • Hi Kim, Tell it how it is, honest, blunt and perfect. I like the way you have set it out, the different sized stanza’s and your second last line of Bam. This should be in the Newspaper. Really well done.
      One very tiny suggestion: same old same shit – I think a comma in between same old, same shit is needed to make it stand out more.

      • Kim replied 1 week ago

        agree with you Jane – will change it on my copy. Thank you!

    • Hi Kim, I liked the rhyme of topic with catastrophic — such a perfect pairing of meaning… I wouldn’t quite call this satire, it’s a bit too realistic for that. The description of the politics is spot on. For some reason while reading it the rainbow story came to mind, that floods will never be the cause of destruction again (take that rising sea levels), nope i think you’re right it will be lack of water and abundance of fire. Well done!

      • Kim replied 1 week ago

        Nostradamus and the rest got it wrong – its not fire that will kill us but man’s own hubris

    • Hi Kim, Good for you, tackling this topic. The line, “Another round of talk talk talk,” jumped out as the clincher for me, as well as “finger pointing, country shaming…” and ….”What’s a billion, what’s a trillion..” This is an issue that won’t go away by talking or blaming or throwing money at it. I love the title – most apt and scary. Thanks for sharing.

      • Kim replied 1 week ago

        so agree with you Pam.
        the pessimist in me thinks we’re doomed…

    • Hi Kim, very powerfully worded on a very serious issue. You’ve hit the nail and you should be called to stand on centre stage when the politicos next gather and read your creation to them where the ‘finger-pointing skirters’ can see the passion pouring from your eyes. Keep up the good fight.

    • Hello Kim,
      I really admire the way your poems are always full of vigour and force. This particular message needs repeating and shouting from the rooftops and your poem does it. I like the rhyming and the rhythm. Great stuff.

    • Hi Kim – loved the urgency of the poem but how it conveys the very lack of the same in tackling the issue. Strident and to the point…

    • Hi Kim, love the rhythm and the language of your poem! The topic is very urgent indeed. We really should wonder much more why we still need to discuss. We should all roll up our sleeves and get to work! If each of us does our share, the planet will be better off. But with politicians like Trump who negate that climate change even exists…

    • Well Done, Kim ! Your poem is very hard hitting and a wake-up call for all of us. We all need to do our bit in this race against time. The politicos are too busy bickering in an attempt to garner as many votes as they can. If they were actually concerned, the planet would not be getting destroyed like this. So, the onus lies on us eventually. Great job 😇👏

    • Hi Kim. There’s a lot I love about this poem, plus its accompanying visual. The repeated words are the best ever – they are what creates the urgency. Wonderful!
      There are a few suggestions too, if you’ll allow me:
      * losing the “…” and the word “ecological” in the second line – for the sake of the rhythm. – it doesn’t need to be said explicitly, it’s there already. Just like “to our global warming” could be omitted without losing anything, Instead you’ll find that centigrade then becomes a pivot word, that may point to the actual global warming, or the heat of the political discussions.
      * worn down, well-worn – I’d suggest switching around so you get well-worn, worn down, because that creates yet another repetition which is a main feature of your style in this poem.
      * title: why not Devil’s Roulette? I think what you’re addressing is bigger than a reference to any particular country or culture…

  • I dont know whst any of this means but I love the juxtaposition of words that create such intrigue and contrast and whimsy!
    Wonderful !
    Days daze drift …its sublime . ❤
    This will warrant a few read thru’s for sure!

  • Hi Paulie

    You certainly are building on your collection of war stories for an Anthology.

    Your opening prelude and subsequent ending was neither here nor there for me. I understand you might want it as bookends to provide a resolution but it didnt add or detract from the body of the story and therefore I found it a little superficial and…[Read more]

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