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Kim commented on the post, The Bucket List by maria delaney 2 hours, 35 minutes ago
Loved the humour in this – I cackled a few times while reading. So Brady seems like the most normal out of the dudes – Geo is just plain ass-freakin’ crazy.
Agree the line about goth-girl – in the greater scheme of your story – doesnt add any value. you have more than enough action going on elsewhere to not need that line.
loved the ‘ they…[Read more]
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Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 2 hours, 53 minutes ago
🤣🤣🤣
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Kim posted a new activity comment 2 hours, 54 minutes ago
okay, let me know when its loaded and I’ll re-read
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Kim commented on the post, Warm Salty Water by Nonie McElroy 2 hours, 57 minutes ago
this was intriguing to say the least.
you bring us into the scene after the violence has been committed , but it still hangs in the air – as you say so succinctly, like a bad smell. and then before the next act of violence is committed you take the reader out of it and we are brought back into the story after the fact – again. I am curious as…[Read more] -
Kim commented on the post, Disestablishment by June Hunter 3 hours, 43 minutes ago
Hi June
it reads real because it is real. right!
who hasnt experienced this ?? – and yes, I feel your protagonist – since when is disestablished even a ‘thing’?? (really? is that what they call it now? I’ve been out the game awhile so dont know the lingo anymore…)loved your protagonist, can just feel her sass waiting to reign supreme -…[Read more]
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Kim commented on the post, Precious by Adam Jeffrey 4 hours, 20 minutes ago
hey – you weren’t paying attention – there are plenty smells in this piece …😉
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Kim commented on the post, Precious by Adam Jeffrey 4 hours, 22 minutes ago
Hi Adam
another interesting read. I like the quirky of this.
so this mate goes round to all the emergency rooms and waits until he gets a name, and then attends said funeral (if any is forthcoming?) – so is that why the nurse looks familiar and not just a deja vu thing ?Never heard the expression before : sparking her to say – is that an…[Read more]
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Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 4 hours, 43 minutes ago
hahahaha – not sure if “Juicy sex’ falls under the trope of Romance …or porn 😂😂- I’ll have to ask Mel Delaney …😁
off to find yours now …
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Kim commented on the post, Necessary Revenge by Angelique Badger 4 hours, 50 minutes ago
well, okay …like your reply :
“on how to you the world in” – what does this mean ?
If I may ask – what is your home language – is it NOT English?
another from your story :
” I was called to get Khari or information from you I thought it finally happened” – you might mean… ” I was called to extract Khari from your clutches” ( I have no idea…[Read more] -
Kim commented on the post, The Dinner by Amrita Sarkar 5 hours ago
ps I think the Matriach is a particularly interesting character – she has her own demons to contend with as well as keeping her dysfunctional family together. Kinda reminds me of the current Queen of England….
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Kim commented on the post, The Dinner by Amrita Sarkar 5 hours, 2 minutes ago
This Is Us is brilliant – yes! I can see that premise working in this context . this will be an exciting project. Think a few prompts might be needed though. agree with you 1000 words is nothing to work with – the next one: 2500 words gives you way more room for juicy story arcs. I will definitely stay tuned so give it your best , as always 🧡
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Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 8 hours, 31 minutes ago
this is useful thanks, although I think the tropes for romance could easily be as long as the many varied plotlines that exist in telling them! 😆
deal – police thriller it is then. whenever you’re ready xx
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Kim commented on the post, The Dinner by Amrita Sarkar 8 hours, 35 minutes ago
Hi Amrita
this is a family drama straight out of the Bold and the Beautiful.
I am still a bit confused by all the different family members – I feel the need to sketch a family tree so I can tell who is whose child/grandchild etc
I got that the matriarch is Yazadi – Rafiz is her son in-law , her own daughter is the one who suffered the…[Read more] -
Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 8 hours, 57 minutes ago
aaahhh – now I get it. That’s an awesome compliment then, Thank you!
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Kim commented on the post, Necessary Revenge by Angelique Badger 9 hours, 3 minutes ago
Hi Anglique
I recall reading the 1st installment – in the comment bar you can put that this is a continuation so that readers know to follow your series.
Your grammar and spelling make this difficult to follow – please spend time on proofreading your work before submitting. it is a pity because you have a great premise for a story here.
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Kim commented on the post, The Promise by Barbara Duff 12 hours, 1 minute ago
wow Barbara
this is going to be one of my favourites this month!
this was so poignant , the grief absolute and tangible.
I too, have no constructive notes to give, other than your story gripped me from the get-go and I was sobbing along with your MC at the end, feeling every inch of fury, and grief as he, himself did.Brilliant writing…[Read more]
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Kim commented on the post, Photographic Memory by Megan 12 hours, 13 minutes ago
Hi Megan
I was wondering where this pleasant story was going – you spent a lot of time with the build-up, getting us comfortable and setting the scene – all very well executed.
The description of her sister-in-law was perfect – loved that characterisation!my one niggle was when she was identifying the people in the pic – would she label…[Read more]
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Kim commented on the post, It happened by Seyi 12 hours, 30 minutes ago
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Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 12 hours, 39 minutes ago
Thanks Amrita
I had to look up synaesthetic – and I am still none the wiser ? – what does it mean, exactly?
yea – I have decided that Janice saw loverboy but doesnt know this spook is seducing lonely women in the bookstore . This story might just evolve into something else entirely 😁
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Kim commented on the post, Lost and Found in Love by Kim 12 hours, 44 minutes ago
yea, apparently I was definitely heavy-handed with the cliches – I need to research the tropes more.
That man, sexy as he is – I found on Pinterest – have NO IDEA who he is, but he’s nice hey? 😉 - Load More
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