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👍 with the huge following for this type of genre, (myself included) , I dont for a millisecond believe its a saturated market – not if the plot and character-development is strong. I say go for it, it seems you have an affinity for thriller/suspense – make the most of your strengths!

definitely a world-traveller! it sounds as if you have lived a fascinating life , I suspect so 🤗

Hi Paul

An interesting read and I enjoyed it.
your character reminds me a lot of the Detective Chief Inspector Wexford series by Ruth Rendell – are you familiar with it? In Ruth Rendell her chief character is very understated , and she builds up each case meticulously. your story here has some throwback to that style.
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Thanks for reading me Karin! appreciate the compliment

Heya Paul.
oh, Bill Nighy would definitely play Merlon….not sure about Ambrose though.

Thanks for checking in – was expecting more ‘constructive’ advice from you tbh so feel slightly relieved haha. 😉😅

this read like a horror to me – induced my own sense of panic. Like Hanri I will never do surgery of this nature in my lifetime.

my only note, perhaps, was I was expecting – after that fantastic build-up and suspense – and horror! – for the ending to be something, more? perhaps if a longer word count allowed it you could work in a more…[Read more]

haha – arent you glad those days of apprenticeships are over!? glad I managed to make you smile 🤗

your poem is a tangibile and visceral conjuring up of this drudgery – your skilful reinterpretation of the image does it justice – and makes it all the more real!
agree with Pam – love the way you worked in the weaving/spinning symbols – creates another layer of depth to your work – excellent writing!

Thanks Kat
the formatting went wonky when I posted , am impressed you were able to spot the form. Thanks for reading and commenting!

Hi Christian – yes British ‘ colonization’ has wrecked its havoc too, and left its own destruction in its wake. Hopefully the day of reckoning and reconciliation will come too .
Thanks for reading me.

Thanks Glen.

Hi Glen

so great to see you as a regular on the poetry side – awesome!

your poem made me think of Leonard Cohen’s ‘ how the light gets in’ Anthem. In our imperfection is when we are most vulnerable and open/receptive to be loved , perhaps – and it does take that special someone to see that vulnerability and respond in kind.
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Thanks June – I’m still really intrigued to find out you lived here??!!? , when did you move back to UK?

Hi Jane

wonderful imagery in your poem.
for me your 1st and 2nd stanza are strongest – agree with John tho’ : The blank slate is erased / A double rainbow divides the sky- didn’t convey perhaps what you had intended. Maybe if you said something along the lines of : the blank slate split /a double rainbow gift – or some such , would need some…[Read more]

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aahhh you were in Joburg ! – do you miss the place at all ??

Thanks Jane – yes that was a shocker when he was elected in the 1t place. think the Dems read that totally wrong , and I think they might still do!