• I was so curious to find out how you’d put it in! I was so stumped yesterday when I saw the prompt! ๐Ÿ˜€

  • Thank you so much! That helps!

  • <3 Thank you so much! ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Thanks for pointing that out, Deryn. I didn’t realize it didn’t go well with the rest of the text. I didn’t want to use “slip” because that would mean the pitcher would fall and spill over. Since it’s so scarce, she would’ve tried her best not to waste a single drop of water.

    But I didn’t know which alternate word to use to show that she just…[Read more]

  • Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚ Raven is testing them. Runa passed his test… for now ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Thank you so much Anne ๐Ÿ™‚ I hope I can live up to your expectation ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Thank you Michael. Happy to know you found the tale intriguing. More about Raven will be revealed in the next couple of installments (at least that’s my plan; I don’t know where the prompts will take me though).

  • Thank you so much, Kim! I’m so happy to hear I could capture your interest. The first of this series is the ‘The Sฤrts Berries’, while the following submissions are in sequence (just in case you are interested in going back and reading).

  • Thank you Ismael. You’ve actually been the inspiration why I thought I should give a try to writing a series. Like I’d said, I’d tried earlier and failed. I’m so happy to hear you’re finding it interesting. Thanks for reading and commenting.

    Yes, the stein is the gift. Though there’s more to come ๐Ÿ˜‰

  • Thank you so much Anne for reading and commenting!! This morning, I was having one of those self-doubt bouts I struggle with so much, wondering if my story is any good, or even my writing! And your words (for this story as well as the next) just pulled me back from the abyss of self-pity! Thank you! You have no idea how much your words have…[Read more]

  • What a strange coincidence! That was the one line I struggled with the most. I had started off with “led down to the river”. I realized it gave the wrong idea of the direction so I changed it to “from”. Maybe if I had said, “led up from the river”? Would that have been better?

    I’m so glad to hear you enjoyed the story. Yes, it’s part of a…[Read more]

  • Thanks for reading ๐Ÿ™‚ Happy to hear you too found it vivid ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Thanks for reading, Chloe! I’m glad I managed to show the picture well. I sometimes always wonder if I’m doing justice to the images in my head with my words.

  • The boredom we’ve all felt while trapped in our classrooms… you’ve captured it so well! When I was reading the last line, I almost expected to see that she had drawn mosquitoes ๐Ÿ˜€ Thanks for sharing; I enjoyed your story thoroughly ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Photo byย Justin Kauffmanย onย Unsplashย Raven watched as the woman stumbled out of her house, clutching her stomach. She poured water from the vessel by the door into a pitcher and shuffled towards the berries. She […]

    • Hi Joyce,
      I’m liking this continuing story. I take it the stein is the gift? Keep it up.

      – Ismael

      • Thank you Ismael. You’ve actually been the inspiration why I thought I should give a try to writing a series. Like I’d said, I’d tried earlier and failed. I’m so happy to hear you’re finding it interesting. Thanks for reading and commenting.

        Yes, the stein is the gift. Though there’s more to come ๐Ÿ˜‰

        • Yay! Yes, your series is very intriguing to me. So glad you decided to continue. Love it! ๐Ÿ™‚

    • I’ve clearly missed some of this story and need to back-track

      you have my interest Joyce – very compelling

      • Thank you so much, Kim! I’m so happy to hear I could capture your interest. The first of this series is the ‘The Sฤrts Berries’, while the following submissions are in sequence (just in case you are interested in going back and reading).

    • Intriguing and not nearly enough! I want to read more about the Raven.

      • Thank you Michael. Happy to know you found the tale intriguing. More about Raven will be revealed in the next couple of installments (at least that’s my plan; I don’t know where the prompts will take me though).

    • Hi Joyce,
      I think this piece finally gave me clues to that it is indeed a dystopian world with how she got excited about “new life”. I love how you’re making this story progress. You always leave me yearning for more. Excellent writing as always. Thanks for sharing. ๐Ÿ™‚

      • Thank you so much Anne ๐Ÿ™‚ I hope I can live up to your expectation ๐Ÿ™‚

    • Captivating. I like how the raven showed mercy in the end.

    • Hi Joyce – I liked this continuation and glad they found the secret of water purification. Only thing that jarred for me was the rather slangy ‘ plonked’ that didn’t seem to fit with your rich prose. It could simply have slipped from her weakened hand… Just a thought!

      • Thanks for pointing that out, Deryn. I didn’t realize it didn’t go well with the rest of the text. I didn’t want to use “slip” because that would mean the pitcher would fall and spill over. Since it’s so scarce, she would’ve tried her best not to waste a single drop of water.

        But I didn’t know which alternate word to use to show that she just couldn’t hold on anymore, and she felt frustrated because of her failing strength. With the scarce word count, it becomes difficult to explain stuff while also taking the story forward. If you have any suggestions, please do share. It would be very helpful ๐Ÿ™‚

        • Hi Joyce – laid it down? Cradled it? Clutched it to her? Falling to the ground, she held on tightly (you might need to rejig some other sentences to meet the word count)…Her feeble hands held on to the pitcher as she sank to the ground…That might work – conveys her weakened state , but shows how precious the water is and how important it is to hold on. D

  • I’m left with no words, your words moved me so much. Very thought-provoking too. I wonder if all relationships go through this? Or is it that only a lucky few actually ever have a happily-ever-after? And the rest of us look at those few and take the plunge hoping we’d be able to become a part of their club.

  • I’m glad you enjoyed, Deryn. Thanks for stopping by ๐Ÿ™‚

  • But now I’m curious how you would retain the Baron while making Frida’s prophecy also come true. So excited to see how things will unfold!

  • I will have to look up the words ‘tenebrous’ and ‘fustian’ :/

    The whole story was infused with so much humour! I laughed when I read, “But there’s more speech!” But the funniest line was where he called Travis a “court fairy”!! ๐Ÿ˜€ Loved your writing, as always. Waiting for what happens next.

  • As you’ve mentioned, this story is so different from what you usually write but O.M.G. is this a gem or what?! I felt goosebumps on my arms when I read the last line! So well done!

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