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  • Thank You for the fun story. I did read about Richard the III body being discovered. The dialog kept the story going wonderfully.

    Old time magic, is real. As is the re-connection of souls. My wife and I were friends for three years before I kissed her. During those three friendship years we discovered how we had ‘almost’ met several times.…[Read more]

  • Happy bitter sweet memories.

    Thank you for the heartful read. I’m glad they kept the house. I personally wasn’t so lucky. Long, not so happy story I’m sure when the right prompt comes along I’ll write about it.

    Meanwhile, thank you.

  • Hallmark Movie material. I mean that in a good way. LOL

    Wonderful Christmas Story. The dialog is smart and feels real, not forced. I like ANY STORY that has a dog.

    I’ve been to that spot on the Mississippi and it is beautiful.

    Thanks for the fun read.

  • May the Season of Joy be upon you!

    Heartwarming story. Enjoyed your descriptions of the brother and sister. Sounds just like by grandkids. LOL

    Thanks for the fun read

  • COOL, then my work is done. LOL Not knowing what to expect was what I was going for.

  • Thank you for those comments. I wasn’t sure if the crazy, fun insanity would come across. We’ve been friends for over 50 years and our friendship has been a souse of great fun. Crazy insane fun.

  • “$30 for an eight-foot-tall Scots Pine Christmas tree? No way. We’d never get one like that when we lived in California,” Melanie pulls her RAV4 into the Kroger parking lot.
    Twenty cold minutes later she has an an […]

    • Hi Jeff– I wasn’t quite sure what to expect when I began your story. It was delightfully quirky and fun. Thanks for a great read.

    • Is he really nuts….no….maybe….no….maybe…..Whew….okay. Fun!

      • Thank you for those comments. I wasn’t sure if the crazy, fun insanity would come across. We’ve been friends for over 50 years and our friendship has been a souse of great fun. Crazy insane fun.

  • I had 99% of the story written when I read about JM Barrie and the challenge. I think it made the story better. I enjoyed reading his stories and was honored by his comments on mine.

  • OMG! Were you listening to my wife and I a few weeks back? I had done something very similar to forgetting to drop off her prescriptions. It made me laugh out loud and read that part to my wife. You nailed it. The harder he tried the worse he messed up and the more she criticized.

    Fortunately, my wife is forgiving, and does ‘not smart’…[Read more]

  • Thank YOU for the wonderful tail of love and music. The fathers sacrifice for his son to have a better life. There love for each other, unspoken, and their love of music.

    As said in the other comments there was more ‘tell’ than ‘show,’ but I don’t believe the word count would have allowed for the full story otherwise.

    I enjoyed your…[Read more]

  • Jeff Mauser commented on the post, Score by Amy Rae 2 months ago

    OMG! Every hockey players nightmare. Poor kid with the name Gretzky. A tough name to live up to even if he was “GREAT.”

    Having played sports as a kid only because ‘everyone does’ I really understood the line, “They were clearly more excited about me joining the game than I was.” LOL

    Hockey is a sport I enjoy watching. Great use of the…[Read more]

  • Great story Juanita. Good use of tension, wasn’t sure which way she was going to decide. She was guarded in her way toward him. And the dogs guarding her at the end were great.

    Thanks for the fun read

  • Thanks for the read and comment

  • The smell of the fresh carrots growing just beyond the fence, makes my nose twitch. Their lush green tops, the tasty orange vegetable, but it’s ne’er to be. They’re guarded by Trixie, Mrs. Briggs’s cat. The big […]

  • You had me laughing before they left for the meeting. I can take FOREVER to pick out a card, unless of course the FIRST CARD speaks to me. LOL

    I enjoyed the read, and yes the showing rather than the telling is excellent.

    Oh, and my wife bought a car almost this way. Not the color but the fact you can control the radio from the steering…[Read more]

  • Yes, absolutely, he dropped it down the sink. LOL

    A word count limits certain aspects of the story, but in other ways, makes you more creative. The dialog would have been different if he hadn’t lost it. How he lost it, isn’t important.

    Thanks for the read and comments

  • Yes, absolutely, he dropped it down the sink. LOL

    A word count limits certain aspects of the story, but in other ways, makes you more creative. The dialog would have been different if he hadn’t lost it. How he lost it, isn’t important.

    Thanks for the read and comments

  • Thank You for you read and comment. Sorry it took so long to reply, been busy.

    I’m happy you picked on both items. I’m a hopeless romantic, to the delight of my wife.

    And she has always encouraged my writing.

  • The last note of our bands’ cover of “Green is Blue,” by Miles Davis and Gil Evans floats away. There is a prolonged brief pause of silence, disregarding the drunken conversations. Until a woman in a corner booth […]

    • I wonder why he’s muttering to himself…did he drop the blue pill down the sink? The innuendo of this line is clear: “Let’s play the night by ear and see what pops up.” The dialogue throughout and the cconversation around bands sets a great scene and character development between two.

      • Yes, absolutely, he dropped it down the sink. LOL

        A word count limits certain aspects of the story, but in other ways, makes you more creative. The dialog would have been different if he hadn’t lost it. How he lost it, isn’t important.

        Thanks for the read and comments

    • My favorite part of your story is when he takes her hand and brushes his lips across it . A moment of passion. Your story shows how a bit of encouragement can bring someone’s talent from mundane to enthusiastic. Well done.

      • Thank You for you read and comment. Sorry it took so long to reply, been busy.

        I’m happy you picked on both items. I’m a hopeless romantic, to the delight of my wife.

        And she has always encouraged my writing.

    • Yes, absolutely, he dropped it down the sink. LOL

      A word count limits certain aspects of the story, but in other ways, makes you more creative. The dialog would have been different if he hadn’t lost it. How he lost it, isn’t important.

      Thanks for the read and comments

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