Ah, what a beautiful and truthful poem. More people should read it.

Good treatment of the subject – a vital subject to consider for life satisfaction. My poem this month deals somewhat with the same idea. Today!

This is lovely! It makes me think “Be still and listen to the voice of God!”

Hello Estelle,
I like the way that your poem calling for us all to be less restless and more relaxed has a sort of relaxed feel to it. I think it must be the repetitions. Well done.

Hi Estelle
I share Jacqueline’s idea that more people should read this truthful poem. In our forward rushing life we seldom make a pause to appreciate the joy of calm and relax. You have made excellent use of the prompt. Well done and thank you for sharing.

Local girl does very good. And maybe very bad. Nice she remembered that David was kind to her. Appears she will need a good criminal lawyer.
But if she was arrested for murder how is she still out of jail? Big bail and wearing one of those ankle things that tracks the wearer?

I feel that the story was only really getting started at your ending , and all that came before could be backstory drip-fed into your narrative. There is a lot more here than you have shown us, most def the interesting bits anyway. This could be a great launch pad for you to develop this into a series or mystery novel ? Great potential.

I would’ve liked more motivation as to why your MC was drawn to her as a child /teenager than the simple ‘she was odd’ or ‘they were cool’. something definitive. Spend more time exploring motivations and tease out the details.
And you have a helluva mystery dangling here with no resolution – the dead woman. Who, why , when – dont be scared – go forth and give us the story! You know you want to 😉🤗