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  • Emily Orna started taking the course 52 Scenes 9 months, 1 week ago

  • Hi Sandy, I love the power of your poem, especially the last two lines. It’s not only what memories are but also why they are so important for us and future generations, to be able to learn from past mistakes. Thanks for sharing!

  • Hello Gretchen, I love the power of your poem. It really captures the essence of our time and has a very similar sentiment to “The Hill We Climb”. Thank you for sharing!

  • Hi SJ, I love how you poem captures so much meaning with so few lines and that the word “joy” is used in irony here.

  • Hi Anna, beautiful poem! I like how you start with two sets of three lines that belong together and then the rest of the poem is one longer phrase

  • Hi Stevie, I was really impressed with you story. It raises awareness about a topic many people are unaware of and I love that you added a link for context. I was very relieved that in this case, the story ended well for the girl and the village was ready to protect her. Thank you for sharing!

  • Emily Orna commented on the post, Angry by claire 12 months ago

    Hi Claire, I was really impressed with your style of writing because it gives such a clear and strong picture of the protagonist and her attitude. I agree that it could also be part of a bigger story, but I think it works on its own as well!

  • Hi Gretchen, that’s a great and tragic story. I like especially that what seemed like a random example of advice that Shelby had given turned out to be one of the key aspects of her betrayel later on. Thanks for sharing!

  • Nothing seems important now,

    Infinity of stars above us,

    Gazing upon them,

    Holding you

    Tightly.

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    • Very nice portray of night. I liked the way you are doing tight of lines as you move down. Holding tightly. Interesting poem Emily

    • I enjoyed the closing in of this poem’s lines so that one can almost imagine the closing of eyes to sleep at night. Quite comforting. Thank you

    • I like the ambiguity of “holding you tightly.” It can refer to both the act of the speaker holding a loved one and the stars holding the gazers’ attention. It’s lovely.

    • Hello Emily,
      I found this intensely sad, having read it as a poem full of grief at death. Perhaps that wasn’t what you intended. Whichever, it’s a beautiful poem and I like the layout too.

    • A beautiful poem. I’ve forgotten the name of the form that reduces/increaces a word with each line. It really works so well in your poem. Thanks for sharing.

  • Hi, I also think it is a great way to deal with the prompt. Your story is both very personal and about greater topics like war, migration and family. I also think it is very moving. Thanks for sharing!

  • Emily Orna commented on the post, Despair by SJ Cramer 1 year ago

    Hi SJ, I agree with the others, your poem is great the way it is! Despite its dark tone, the beauty of the lines brightened up my day 🙂

  • “8 a.m. Josh’s alarm clock went off. He had personalized alarm tones for every day, and for Tuesdays like today it was his philosophy professor’s voice exclaiming:

    “My guiding principle is this: Guilt is never t […]

    • Quite the elaborate scene you’ve penned down, carrying your intended theme — which I suspect is a play on one’s conscience, begging the reader to judge the characters’ morale?

      “Guilt is never to be doubted.” In other words: None are innocent, all are assumed to merit punishment and actual facts do not matter.

    • Gold replied 1 year ago

      You set the scene well and constructed quite an intriguing story. It felt slightly rushed at the end and I longed for more in the cafe and a development of the waitress’s part (and more descriptions) but I know that with a limited word count this has to be brief. Interesting way of handing the question of guilt on to the reader to work out what they think at the end.

    • Hi Emily. This is an interesting piece and I can imagine that one can expect to hear some rousing arguments about whose guilt is greater if we start with the premise that all are guilty of something. Accepting guilt is a huge thing, but being willing to atone for that is an equally difficult thing. All in all, an engaging piece of writing. Thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Dianne, I like especillythe lines “Some new skill will force your brain to think” (so relatable for me who wrote my first sonnet this week) and the last two lines are a strong ending! I also like how it starts as almost a tutorial and turns into something bigger about expressing unique and personal emotions

  • Hello Annette, thank you for this beautiful poem! I like especially the last two lines and the line “loving the fear out of my soul”.

  • Emily Orna commented on the post, Luna by Che 1 year ago

    Hey Che, I love your poem. It paints such a vivid picture of the fascination of the night and I love the end where the lover leaves, but it’s not important compared to the narrator’s connection to the night sky. Thanks for sharing!

  • Ah I have so many questions (not in a bad way): Is the dead man her brother (my preferred choice) or is the guy who had information about her brother? How did he get into the apartment? Will the narrator get into trouble with the police? Great story with a lot of tension!

  • I liked you story a lot, it really shows the the position of the mother who would like to do more, but all she can do is to be patient and understanding. At first, I thought it would be nice to know something about Emily’s age, but actually I think it’s nice that we don’t know it exaclty because the mother-daughter bond can be strong at any age of…[Read more]

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