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  • HAHAHAHAHA – so funny! A great take on the prompt and flowed nicely to keep me reading.
    Good title too.
    Hope you get to post lots of stories like this – I’m sure you’ll get lots of happy readers and good comments.

  • This was a real treat! Great storyline and deals with something that almost everyone fears and tries to ignore.
    When you give it another edit, have a look at the conversation between them – I think maybe it could be slightly less formal in style and that would make it flow more naturally.

    Excellent use of prompt and I loved the title.

  • You always make me laugh! And this was no exception! Vibrating like an Aolian harp is a great phrase! I don’t know what a Dodge Dart looks like or how uncool that may have been but his acceptance of ‘a car’ regardless was a typical teenage reaction.
    I can almost picture you racing through this story and enjoying it – the victim was a slight lack…[Read more]

  • Thanks Charles. This story came out of the blue as I was walking the dogs and spotted a sparkling stone in the rocks – turned out to be nothing but reminded me of finding a chunky ‘diamond’ on a walking trail in Switzerland. No-one around and impossible to find who could have lost it. I brought it home and had it valued – no surprise to learn it…[Read more]

  • Thank you or your kind comments. I enjoyed writing it! See above for more detail

  • 12 in 12 – Jewel.
    My Heart Belongs To… by del richards.
    My hand touches something strange as I desperately hunt through the drawer for stuff I need.

    A familiar shape, yet one that should not be there.

    My hea […]

    • For being last minute as you say, this was a tautly told, well paced and descriptive story. I was drawn in and could feel the main character’s emotions resonating through your artful prose. Nicely done!

    • Del, you pulled a rabbit out of the hat on this one. For an unplanned entry, this was terrific. I loved it. I was hoping to encounter some of your customary story humor but hey I’ll take it. I look forward to reading more of your stories in 2022.

      • Thanks Charles. This story came out of the blue as I was walking the dogs and spotted a sparkling stone in the rocks – turned out to be nothing but reminded me of finding a chunky ‘diamond’ on a walking trail in Switzerland. No-one around and impossible to find who could have lost it. I brought it home and had it valued – no surprise to learn it was cubic zirconium – wouldn’t even buy a coffee! But that memory on the walk kicked off the Jewel story! Needs a damn good edit but it was last minute (with my husband complaining ‘why do you leave everything so late!’) but maybe this will grow at some future stage.

  • I started to read this with a lump in my throat but it soon became a happy tale. Obviously this is part of a much longer story and I need to read that to make full sense of this.
    I’m very envious of your ability to tell so much of a story via dialogue.
    As a standalone short story, it would have had a few too many characters but as part of the…[Read more]

  • I haven’t read the previous parts of this story but it made perfect sense to me even so. It’s quite an emotional read and you have got the balance just right in my opinion. A clever use of prompt too. The one thing I obviously don’t know is how Rishi needs to get back in shape but even so, it left me wanting to know more. I’ll have to g back…[Read more]

  • This is such a heartwarming story. It starts with a dismal air and we know there has been some terrible happening in Barbara’s past. You trickle in the details skilfully and the story ends on a wave of hope. Very nicely done and excellent use of prompt.

  • What a lovely comment. Thank you so much. I enjoyed writing it actually and that makes a difference in my experience. I will read yours soon.

  • Thank you for your kind words. I know what you mean about being gripped from the contact with the local. I half started it with a glimpse of the young woman then trickle in the reason Allie was there but it just wouldn’t fit because of the word count. Allie (in that version) saw her just ‘resting’ in the heathers and ferns and disregards her,…[Read more]

  • Thank you for your kind comments. I’m hoping to get quite a few prompts done in 2022 but it depends on how much time I have to devote to the magazine. And I have an OCD thing about reliability – if I say I’m going to do something, I will. And IF i THInk I can’t, then I make that clear too!
    I enjoyed writing this story – I think mainly because it…[Read more]

  • Thank you for your kind comments. I enjoyed writing this and wish I could have had more words to use !

  • Thank you. this is my last 12 in 12 challenge aftr 36 months. I will pick and choose my prompts going forward (due to a possible lack of time since being invited on to the editorial panel of a national special interest magazine). You are very kind in your comments and I agree, a bit more insight would hav ebeen good, but since starting 12 in 12, I…[Read more]

  • This made me feel warm inside – even though the childhood experience couldn’t be further from my own – it was written in a way that resonated and made me feel ‘included’ somehow.
    What are plakkies by the way? the mind boggles!
    Such a heartwarming story and constructed so well to make it flow. Very enjoyable.

  • Well, you sly dog!! I’m looking at you with new eyes!
    A very easy entertaining read with a refreshing lack of inevitability at the end.
    The only thing that had me shaking my head was all that activity straight after a heavy meal!!!!
    So, tell me, did you enjoy writing this or was it an experimental thing to try this genre? I get the feeling that…[Read more]

  • I really envy your ability to tell a story via dialogue. I wish someone would give me the recipe how to do it!
    This was really entertaining and yet I was waiting for some terrible thing to happen (my genre, I suppose).
    I think if I was to edit anything, it would be to split up the dialogue and action in the first part when he is looking for his…[Read more]

  • Gosh, praise indeed! Thank you so much! The story was in my mind from early on but (no s**t sherlock) didn’t get put on ‘paper’ until 2 days before deadline!
    As usual, my word count was way too high so I think the story could have flowed better with the ‘full’ story (albeit with some necessary editing!).
    I used to enjoy most of Ruth Rendell’s…[Read more]

  • oh wow, this really hit me. that last line was a killer. I always enjoy your stories and the humour kind of carries me along on a tide of glee, which makes the ending even more poignant
    I’m guessing you had a colourful upbringing and many of your stories are based on truth (if not about you, then based on others you knew while growing up).
    I…[Read more]

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